The knife rose high and glimmered in the moon’s light. She lay dead, broken and forgotten. It’s been so many tough years of surviving this murderer but now her life has died. No one remembers that girl named Diana martin. The murderer is dead but Darcy martin, is still overwhelmed over her only sister’s death, only she knows about what happen that night, only because she was there.2
She was there to witness this tragic horror, she saw what that man did to her sister and she’ll never forget that night. The two bad things are that she doesn’t know who this murderer is and if he’s really dead. It’s been two years after Diana’s death and Darcy is thinking she is being stalked by a murderer who’s already dead? It was June 18th , five days would be the anniversary of Diana’s death and who ever was stalking her was going to make a move then for sure. The day was stormy and it was about to rain.3
Darcy ran inside to her high school and started to run for class. She was going to be in deep trouble if she didn’t hurry! She was late on her last day of high school. Graduation was Tomorrow and if she was late again she wouldn't be able to go to the Graduation. She tripped over pop can and started to fall, but luckily someone caught her. When she looked up she let out a horrifying scream and tries to struggle. It was the killer, he was alive!4
The boy let her go and tried to calm her down. She notices that she was wrong because this wasn’t who she thought it was; it was just a boy that was about her age. “Darcy are you ok?” the boy asked, reaching for her hand. “How do you now me?” Darcy asked, giving him an unsteady look. “Well miss everyone knows your name, you were all over the news. People say that you went crazy and murdered your own sister but I don’t believe that crap.” the boy Replied.5
“Oh. Thanks for being on my side. Since you know my name what’s yours?” She asked him, giving him a warm smile. “My name is Jeremy lore and I’m pleased to meet you Darcy.” The boy told her, and then kissed her hand like a gentleman. "No I'm pleased to meet you kind sir." she joked but there was no sign of a smile. To her her on the first Impression is he was cold blooded and loved only himself. "Oh! sorry I didn't hear you, I was lost in your exotic eyes." He flirted, smiling at her warmly as he could.6
she blushed bright red and gave out a short laugh. "well there not very Interesting to stare at really." She told him, while walking down the hall with him. rick came up behind her and kissed her on the cheek. " hey babe, who's your...friend." He gritted behind his teeth. "Oh! hey rick this is Jeremy and he just saved me from falling." Replied Darcy kissing him on the hand.7
"Well I guess I should thank you for saving my girlfriend from getting hurt." Rick replied to Jeremy, giving him an uneasy look. "Well babe lets go to the field, we don't want want to be late for soccer practice." Rick declared, pulling her gaze from Jeremy's gleaming eyes. "Ok well I guess I'll see you around. Bye Jeremy." She whispered, biting her lip so she wouldn't overdo her smile. "I guess you will. I got to go anyway too, I need to check out as many books on horror books." He laughed, She could tell he shared the same passion on horror books just like her. Rick finally got pissed and pushed her along.8
Jeremy waved goodbye and walked off too. "Why are you being so...mean rick?" Darcy asked, trying not to get in a fight with him. "Well I guess I just got jealous cause man your so hot and he was checking you out and I guess I couldn't let my girl be with someone like him." He flirted, but at the same time lied. She sighed. "You will never lose me and don't forget that, "that guy" saved me from getting really hurt." She reminded him. "Oh yeah...sorry babe I'll be a good boy." he smiled, giving her a puppy dog pout. She laughed soft. There was something weired about this new boy but in a real good way and she was ready to do anything to find out.9
Chapter 2 Lies and kisses10
Darcy walked off the field,trying to find rick. She finally gave up and sat on the bench. She heard moaning and she look down and saw two people down there making out. Darcy rolled her eyes and walked down there to give them her thoughts of them doing all this on her territory. "What do you think your doing? why don't you do home and do this crap huh?" She shouted, then gasped. It was like she was just kicked the heart when she saw it was rick and her only friend named Lucy.11
It made her want to cry but she bit her lip HARD. Blood started to run like her feet was doing at that moment. She couldn't believe her eyes, she just wanted to die right there and then. She could feel an Ice wall starting to build, to bury everything, her heart, her feelings, her love, her memories. She hated everyone but one.12
That new boy, Jeremy lore. She ran all the way home to her grandmother. Her grandmother was wearing the lightest clothes like always. Her gray and white hair glisten in the sun and her green sun dress swayed with the cool soft wind. Her skin was soft. The skin color was remarkable for her age.13
It was Ivory and it went with her light brown eyes. It was amazing how her teeth was still there and was white and sharp as ever. She was so angry but she knew her grandmother would fix everything. When she got there, police was everywhere. She barged through the back door. She screamed.14
Her grandmother was on the ground, broken and bloody. "Oh my god, Oh my god." She whispered, shock was all over her face."Ms.Martin?" An officer asked, eying her curiously . "Yes, that's me." She whispered,trying not to cry again. "Your under arrest for murder of Helen Mc Donald." He Replied, "Anything you say or do will be judged in the court of law."15
Even more terror and shock crossed her face while he turned her over and cuffed her hands. Pain filled every part of her hands. "What! this must be a mistake I didn't murder anyone! I just-" She stammered, trying not to cry. "What's going on here?" A voice asked behind her. Everyone turned to see who this person was.16
"Jeremy? what he doing here?" She asked her self in her mind. "You forgot your backpack at my house. what happen?" He asked the officer. "This girl murdered her grandmother about an hour ago." answered the officer. "That can't be, she was with me at my house doing homework." Jeremy lied. "Is this true Ms.Martin?" The man asked.17
She just stared at Jeremy shocked but nodded. Alright then your free but next time will be worse." He replied sternly and helped clean the mess up. Her grandmother's body was stuck in her mind still. All the blood. The pale face, eyes bulged and in shock. The lips riped off, her insides cut out.18
What a sight for a girl that just lost her whole family...Now. Then rick came in but there was no sign of a crime there by then. " Hey babe. What is HE doing here?" Rick asked, trying not to be angry. "Now the question is more like what the hell are you doing here rick?" She asked, shooting daggers at him. He was just shocked like he had no idea why she was mad at him. "What do you mean babe?" He asked surprised.19
"Oh don't lie to me! I saw you with that tramp!" She shouted again,even more angry. "What?! Who?" He snapped. "Lucy is who I mean! I saw you two...going at it!" She snapped back. "Well-um-I"He stammered. "We are done rick, through you hear me!" She cried out.20
"You'll regret this Darcy, trust me you will!" He threatened. "No she won't cause I'll be there with her, protecting her the whole way."Jeremy announced. Rick only sneered and stormed out of the back door. "Thank you." Darcy whispered. "No problem, I knew you didn't kill your own grandmother, I saw you by the bleachers plus I knew you had a soccer game at that time so...yeah."He laughed, giving her a crooked smile that made her feel like she was high.21
Chapter 3 welcome to my world22
Jeremy just knew that he loved her, A vampire in love with a human? Wow that's not the first. Well for him it was not from his other brothers. They got lucky and fell in love. Now it was his turn. He would do anything for this girl.23
He just watched her from his window, her golden hair whipped with the wind, he knew that he was going to find this killer that killed her sister and grandmother. Her brown eyes sparkled like that daylight. He could hear her pulse pound in his head, man he loved her. He just stared but of course she couldn't see him,he stayed behind the curtains. But then why was her eyes gazing his way?24
It was the day of her sister's death and he was waiting for her at the parking lot at Denny's. She walked to him and smiled. "So glad you could make it on this sunny day." He laughed,looking at all the gray clouds. "Yeah what a beautiful day indeed." She agreed, really meaning what she said. "You really like it dark out? No sun?" He asked in a curious tone.25
"Don't laugh but yes, I'm so use to this place called dark woods! This place has the word dark right?" She laughed warmly, Her heartbeat quickened, he could tell hesitantly. He laughed also but not as warm. "So let's get to know each other over breakfast" She declared,while walking with him to the restaurant. "Of course, who will talk first?"He asked,eying her,hoping her first. "Ok then lets start with-" He cut her off only cause he knew she would say him first. "You? Perfect." He sighed. 26
"Sure I guess, I was going to say you but I guess if you insisted." She laughed. They finally got a booth and started to order. "Ok what's your favorite food?" He asked, still smiling. "Don't laugh but I like Hot wings." She laughed but she was dead serious. He didn't laugh but just smiled.27
"Ok then what's your favorite guy?" He asked but was meaning it as a joke. "You" She answered blushing, smiling in a sexy way.
He was just shocked, but smiled. She laughed. That guy rick came up to the table and her expression went dark.28
"Babe, come on you can date someone less...Low life. Like me come on take me back!" Rick pleaded. "He's right...but not him you need someone who is better then both of us." Jeremy sighed. She was speechless, then glared at Rick. "Now you look here rick, I'm never going back to you and I LOVE Jeremy and I'll never leave him! even if he WAS a low life I would still love him." She growled at him.
Jeremy was as shocked as rick was, LOVE? Wow he never guessed it.29
Rick sneered at both and walked off in flamed. Suddenly she froze and was staring at someone outside in the rain. "Almost summer" He thought Jeremy looked at her only to see her terrified face, Her eyes were filled with sorrow mixed with anger, and fear. "Hey? what's wrong? Darcy?" He asked her, trying hard to get her eyes on him. "Huh? oh nothing I just thought I saw...someone." She whispered back.30
"Oh..well why did you say that you love me?" He blurted out, and at the moment he totally regretted it. "Oh! well I only said that so he would leave us alone, you don't think that I..." F*uck she never really loved him, only a stupid lie. "No! of course not I just wondered." He lied, hoping she wouldn't his sadness. She did. "Look I just want to be friends, you understand that right now...I'm not in the shape ...for love right now right?" She asked him, hoping he would understand. He didn't but she pretended like he did.31
"Yes of course...Darcy." He replied , saying her name coldly. Tears filled her eyes and she tried not to show him. "Foolish,wonderful girl, I will always love you even when I'm not around." He whispered to quiet for her to hear him. "Please don't cry, I won't be so...foolish again" He whispered louder so she could hear him.32
"Oh please don't talk so foolish, it was my fault, I shouldn't have lied with out telling you what I was doing. For that I am so sorry Jeremy." She whispered, walking out of the building and in to the dark day. It was almost like night outside, unsafe for a human, he thought. Then he heard her scream about three blocks away and he bolted out of the restaurant only to find her emerald neckless covered with black blood.33
Chapter 4 The darkest day34
Darcy felt like she was missing something like she wanted to make him realize that she did love him ever since she first met him. There was something in his eyes that made her grow weak for him. When he looks at her in that crazy, sexy way she loved to be around him. "But he must have someone else in his life, someone Important right?" She asked herself softly. Then for some reason she felt like someone was watching her, following her.35
Quickly her mind shattered and was back in reality. She looked around and noticed it was dark outside, really dark. She pulled her arm up to see her watch. 1:03pm. "So dark. so early?" she asked out loud.36
Then quickly she felt an arm wrap around her throat and she gasped. "Shh, we don't won't Jakey to here us do we now?" A rasp voice asked in a bone chillin way. The voice didn't even sound like a voice but a cold, harsh wind. Like a knife scraping against a grave stone. But she wouldn't go down without a fight. 37
She started to kick and punch. She could feel his Ice cold blood drip on to her arm. The blood felt like dry Ice to her skin and it felt like it was burning her skin right off. She screamed in pain and everything went black. But before she faded away the man had pulled her neckless off of her and put her blood on it and dropped it so someone would find it, someone named Jakey?
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She awoke to extreme pain and a scream had started build up in her but it wouldn't escape her lips. She was laying on a cold table, strapped down. She picked her head up only to see her self caked in her blood.Then a light flashed on, to bright to see who was before her. But soon she remembered what happen and then let her scream go, but it was no scream just a weak sob.39
The man grabbed for a knife on a metal table that was next to her. Fear spread to every Inch of her body and she let out a real scream. His cold sweaty palm clamped over my mouth and he smiled. His green shimmering eyes flickered hungrily. He took out a needle and a string and faced her again.40
She wore her faded blue jeans and her sister's red and black dress over them. He sharped the needle to a point then tied the string at the end of the needle. She soon knew what he was going to do. She tried to struggle but it was useless. This seemed almost like a bad dream of a dumb horror movie that she loved to watch.41
After this, if she lived, no more horror movies for a while. His Tan skin reflected on her cellphone's screen... Her Cellphone! She tried to go for it but his hand slammed her back down on the table faster then she could even think. Pain inflected in to her spine and she shriek. Then he stuck the needle in her bottom lip and she started to sob.42
It felt worse then she could ever Imagen! It was like nothing like her movies and books. It was much worse. It was like being burned on a stove but you couldn't take it off. He started to sew her lips together. When he finished, he grabbed the knife again and looked at her brown pleading eyes. She watched in dis may that he could do was smirk at her. 43
He out the knife to her throat and cut a little but not enough to kill her. Warm blood started to trickle down her dress. He started to cut in to her arm and licking her blood off. Something was about him was familiar. But she didn't know what. She was to focus on the pain, But then at that moment she knew who it was.44
It was not a he at all, it was a her. It was her very own sister! "But your-dead! I-I-Killed you!" Darcy screamed, watching her twin sister cutting her arm. Pain shot through her. "No you didn't.
I did to trick your mind, it made you think you did becouse I look just like you, it confused your brain enough for me to plot a way to kill Jacob." She snickered, and smiled in a wicked way that frightened her a little."Or should I saw Jeremy lore?" Diana laughed louder. Darcy gasped in disbelief.45
"What had he ever done to you?" She screamed, at her sister and the unbelievable pain. "What do you expect from a Vampire hunter?" She smirked. "What is your plan Diana?" Darcy asked in a low whisper. "Well since your going to die, might as well tell you. I acted like you killed me to buy me time to plan how all this was going down, so I decide to "stalk" you then murder you." Her laugh crackled through the empty shack. "How does this fit in with..." Gulp. "Jeremy?" Darcy asked.46
"Haven't you figured it out yet? He's a vampire Darcy. So since I look like you I will trick him to think I'm you! Then he will think that you murdered him or tried if I fail." She laughed again. "Maybe I'll keep you alive so if he does live and I escape, then you will suffer all over again!" "You f*uckin B*tch!" Darcy screamed.47
Chapter 5 An unluckily Vampire 48
When she left Darcy, she was hafe dead. She looked at herself in the mirror to make sure she looked just like her. Yep, everything was finished. But of course the last thing on the list was...Death. the knock on the door startled her.49
"Coming!" She shouted over her "Lindsy loahn CD". She ran down the stairs to the door and smiled. "Come in" She whispered to Jacob/Jeremy. "Wow Darcy, you look great!" He whispered, almost like he didn't mean it. She grabbed his hand and tugged him inside.50
They walked over to the couch, and her grin went wider. She bent over to his lips and kissed him. Darcy's blue and red dress shimmered in the moon light that shined through the window. His eyes were open in shock. She stopped kissing and bent to his cold ear.51
She looked at the time. 11:59 Pm. "I'm not Darcy." She whispered in his ear, her lips softly touching his ear. He jerked back and glared. "where is she? Who are you." He yelled, his eyes turning blood red.52
"Gone." She snickered, "I'm her sister." His eyes grew wide. "That's right lover boy and I'm a vampire hunter. so say goodbye leech!" She shouted, pulling out a silver dagger. Ding. Ding.Ding. 12:00 Am.53
A wolf of some sort jumped out of thin air and started to attack her. Clawing and biting. She let out a piercing scream but then there was silence. Jacob looked at Diana's dead body and shot his eyes back to the creature in front of him. Werewolf.54
Slowly the werewolf started to turn in to a human form. A human girl form. "Darcy!" He hissed. She layed bloody and torn apart in front of him. Her eyes hafe opened.55
"I'm so sorry...Jacob I tried to stop her but she had me strapped down, I'm so sorry I should have told you." She sobbed, clutching her side. "Shh. It's going to be ok, Shh, stay awake." He whispered, suddenly by her side, holding her in his arms. She layed on his lap, bleeding uncontrollably. "I have to...turn you, you understand right? You need to live, I can't be with out you!" He whispered. "I feel so cold Jake, I can't feel my body." Darcy whispered, shivering wildly.56
Tears filled his eyes, He knew even if he did bite her, it would do no good. He was too late, he was useless. But then he saw the wounds started to heal by it self. Next thing he knew she was wrapping her arms around him in a tight hug. He notice that they were standing now.57
His green and black hair covered his eyes and he was glad becouse if she saw that he was crying will that would ruin the moment. "So your a werewolf?" He joked. "Shut up" She laughed, and kissed him. The kiss was sweet and warm. A Vampire and a werewolf? Now that was the first...
The end
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This story about a girl who everyone almost thinks she was crazy and killed her own sister. She has a theory that someone wants her dead too. But who? She thinks eather the new boy in school or her boyfriend or maybe the ghost from her past... Oh and there is going to be only 5 chapters! Just saying. OH! And Romance!
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Whoa that was so FREAKIN AWESOME!!!!!!!!! I love this! It was really dark, and really cool! Awesome! I love your stories, they are always a good read! Thanks for sharing, star!
~Julia
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Thanks for entering my contest, but I'm sorry to say I have to DQ you
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cool, but rushed and a bit confusing
dude if this were a book i'd buy it! but i have to agree with Dreama. A little rushed ans stuff. a vampire and a werewolf and s sister killing her twin... wow do you watch a lot of horror movies?? you should edit it and make it really good and the post it back up again !
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don't take this personally i'm in an editing mood tonight....
okay end of chapter one: first thoughts? you need to do some serious editing. some of the sentences didn't quite make sense and some others didn't seem real. you're diving straight in there with big plots and actions and characters but it's not executed very well and i think you need to work on that and bits of the dialogue.
chapter two: again diving straight in there, try to build up to it a bit. and again this just isn't realistic i was sat reading this and i actually said outloud about how unrealistic it was. even with fantasy and horror people keep reading stories because they think that if that did actually happen, whether they're reading about human teenagers or dragons and elves, then what the author has written is believable, it would be a natural reaction. and i just don't believe that anybody could trust someone that much that quickly, or some of the other things you've written- again, dialogue, character development
i swear i won't repeat that again.
okayso after the first two chapters i couldn't be bothered to give you an essay but i think five chapters was too short to do this story. it's a good idea for a story and written properly this could be amazing but at the moment this actually reads more like a plan for a novel than a short story and it needs some serious editing. hope this was helpful and i don't mean this nastily but the reason people join SW is to get critique on their stories right? anywayz...arrive derci x -
Your AN don't include required info for my contest, I have yet read this(Much applause to you its a great story) but if you dont put those in i'll regretfully have to DQ you.
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I like all the twists in the story, they really made it a whole lot better! I enjoyed reading your story. I liked the bit of humor, romance, horror, fantasy, and werewolf. This story was really rather unique. Over all there were a places that were hard to read, due to various spelling/gramar/tense mistakes, but the story flowed together good none-the-less. Thank you for entering my contest, and good luck! Keep up the good work!

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Some spelling and grammar mistakes, but nothing bad enough to ruin the flow of the story. I liked this, the little twists really gripped my interest, and your description is good. At the beginning I anticipated a high-school story, which I usually like anyway, but as I read on I spotted a few things you'd done to make it unique, which made it even better =D
Thanks for entering, good luck in the contest.
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It was pretty good, but the punctuation mistakes kind of made it hard to read.
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wow, that sure was brill. maybe... you try and get it published.
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Well this is interesting. You could fix this in a few places and do some things to make it a bit better. First off a lot of people have told you you need to seperate out your daiolog lines so um, do it. Secondly, some of your wording is odd and you miss or duplicate words in some places; I'd recomand a quick proofreading and maybe running a grammar checker through it. Thirdly, your chapters are quite short which isn't a bad thing but something I felt like pointing out. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Nice, Really good!


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I just picked a random story and it happened to be yours and all that i can say is that i loved it! It was unique, different and a good read! 5*****


beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 4.
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This is really good and so well done as a story idea, I think that you just need somebody to read over it because of some spelling mistakes (not that I can speak about spelling) It's a great story idea and great work on finishing it!!


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Nice plot
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Wow, that was really good!! I have a few little suggestions though, that would make it a lot better!! When someone new is speaking, start a new paragraph. Like if Rick was saying "Babe, come on you can date someone less...Low life. Like me come on take me back!" then you start a new paragraph when Jeremy speaks, then we can understand it a whole lot better!!
so then you would say, "He's right...but not him you need someone who is better then both of us." Jeremy sighed.
and so on. but if it is the same person speaking then you just continue on with the paragraph. Also, you had some problems with grammer and the kind of 'tense' to use, I guess you would say. Like in some sentences you needed to use past tense instead of present tense and stuff like that. Or you needed to use an adverb instead of an adjective. Spelling was pretty on the mark, I saw one or two errors, but nothing big. Try to use more descrpitive words when you describe a situation or someone. Like when Darcy caught rick and lucy kissing, you could've described better of how she felt I guess. Like her whole world seemed to shatter and come crashing down, or like time seemed to freeze in place taunting me with the picture of them kissing right in front of me.
Also if you added more description your chapters would be a lot longer! Tell more about how her grandmother was...well before she was killed. And tell us WHY they think she is crazy and killed her sister and grandmother. I think that's all....I hope I helped!! Loved Loved the story!! I wonder how the title fits in with the story??! And how did she fall in love with Jeremy so quickly? That part sort of confused me a little. Sorry this is so long, only trying to help! I am a total spelling and grammer nut, again I hope I've helped!

beginning: 3, language: 5, plot: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 4.
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its good i like it ...i wonder wats going to happen though...you can't get much help here nut i can try..i'll msg you later about it...sorry but kinda lost in mind about things..i really do like this though >^-^<
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Well I would suggest spacing out your paragraphs between your characters speaking. It makes it a lot easier to read, you know? And I would also suggest giving the characters a little more depth, you know? If you do that readers can relate to the characters better and it gives a better reading experience. Alrighties!
















