Synopsis for Dreamsphere

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Have you ever thought about the struggles of humanity? Everyone's struggle is different from yours and mine, though none of us know the others' hardships. My story, Dreamsphere explores this and takes more than a mile's walk in anyone's shoes in a world on the verge of destruction.2

Dreamsphere opens in the Rockros Mountains in the world of Seilice. A disenchanted treasure hunter named Talot finds a buried ship at one of the range's peaks. A computer inside tells him that if the ship is turned on the 'Black Mist' will come back. Talot is concerned for his wallet, and so decides to trick the computer into letting him take it. He succeeds, and within two years, the Black Mist fills the world and eats away everything organic. Luckily, with the discovery of the buried 'homeships,' the inhabitants of Seilice are able to take to the skies for safety.3

The story follows the adventures of the soldier Coda, the ill-fated Seven, the protective sister Evra, and the ever-mischievous Riam. Seven learned early in his life that he was entrusted by the Demon God Drell to slay the Divine God Suspenza. When black creatures called Nephilites come after him, following him from homeship to homeship, he is forced to face the fact that his task must be fulfilled soon, otherwise the Black Mist would never dissipate.4

The group learns that Seven was, in fact, tricked by Drell, and so they set out to find four relics that must be returned to the surface before they can return home. This sets them on a personal journey in which they must face their own demons; Coda watching his wife and daughter die in the Mist; Evra's choice between her brother or the world; Seven's battle to decide truth from falseness; and Riam's heavy task of preventing Seven from endangering the world.5

Along the way, they meet a mysterious man named Ferestae—a man without a past, a memory, or a mother. Ferestae learns that he was sent by Drell to slay Suspenza in Seven's stead, and to kill Seven if he chose to stand in the way. This all ends in Seven's attempt to shield Suspenza from an ending strike by the man made of Black Mist. From there, they go off to find Drell and attempt to bring him to an end, finding that without the influence of the Demon God, the world would fall out of balance, and thus fail altogether unless the balance was righted.6

Dreamsphere explores the natures and difficult choices of people. It is carefully woven so that no story of any one character goes without notice and closure. Because of this, it is not only a story about adventure and fantasy, but a story about humans.7

My novel is a science fiction/fantasy story at 77,800 words long, with thirty-three chapters. The story was completed on August 3, 2008. If the premise of the story sparks your interest, I would be happy to send you a full or partial copy.8

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I'm going to remove this when this contest is over, as I don't want this and my chapters both on the internet

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  • tallblondie Greeters member
    September 18

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    Thank you for your entry in the contest 'Novels and Chaptered Works'. Following is the review for your novel 'Dreamsphere':

    [1] Grammar, spelling and punctuation:

    The chapter submitted has, quite obviously, been extensively edited and formatted. I found no glaring errors in the grammar of the piece, except for some vagueness with some phrases, but I believe this is due more to writing style than unintentional error.

    [2] Word usage:

    The words and phrases selected fit the mood/atmosphere of the piece. Good descriptive language used throughout the chapter helped to not only 'set the scene' but helped me to visualize everything that went on in the chapter. The descriptive language also helped to establish the mysteriousness of the new character, especially in regards to who he may be (the finger dissolving in the water)

    [3] Style and continuity:

    I applaud the fact that you formatted this with the indenting - as it would actually appear in a printed novel. Good introduction of a new character - the responses from the other characters upon finding Ferestae seemed realistic - especially after you gave the reader the scene with the Elder.

    [4] Story components:

    The characters appear well-rounded and realistic, and as a reader, I felt that I could easily relate to them. Good use of internal conflict with Ferestae - finding himself in a strange place and not knowing what he is doing there or how he fits. The scene and setting for the chapter submitted were paltable - I was easily able to 'see' both the surroundings and how the characters interacted within it. The chapter flowed well - it kept my attention from start to finish.

    [5] Literary value:

    The concept and premise of this story is highly original. I like that, though the story is sci-fi/fantasy, you focus on the interaction of the characters - the humanity of the story, rather than just on the world and plot that the characters live in. I quite enjoyed the chapter submitted and am inclined to read the entire story.

    Congratulations on finishing the story.