Lost Love

He waited for her in the lonely store, hoping that she would come in tonight. She's not expecting him- why would she? She hasn't seen him in 2 years. Not a single word has been passed between them, but he found himself missing her more and more until he couldn't take it anymore. He needed to find her. He needed to tell her that he might love her. 1

Finally a girl walks in and her sight catches his eye. It must be her. His heart panged with sorrow as he realized how different she looked. She was much thinner, she looked more weak and tired. He noticed scars on her arm- no matter, he's always known her to be clumsy. What alarmed him the most was her eyes. Instead of being full with emotion, they looked vacant. She looked as if she was just a body, living just to live. It was as if she was a lonely soul trapped in her body, forced to watch the world turn. The happy, charmful girl he once knew seemed to stay in the past, never to be mentioned again in the future.2

He decided to watch her from afar for awhile. she walked quietly into the cafe and sat at a table for two. She was quiet, small compared to the world. No one had even noticed that she walked in. She sat at an angle to him. Perfect- she can't see him yet and he still had perfect view to her empty but beautiful eyes.
He watched her, captivated by her every move. She had taken out her laptop a while ago, but he paid no attention to what she was doing with it. He was just watching her. Her and her lonely- almost sad eyes. 3

He must have stared at her for a moment too long; she suddenly felt a pair of eyes on her. She glanced around for a moment and then turned back to her laptop. He was watching her from behind a bookshelf, so she didn't notice him. There was a spark of confusion and paranoia in her eyes that lasted less than a second. That was the most emotion he would get from her.4

Finally gathering his courage, he moved closer to her. Now he was behind her, barely a few feet away from her seat, feigning interest in a small bookshelf next to him. He was watching her form the corner of his eye, watching her delicate fingers move across the keyboard. Her breathing suddenly became shaky, as if she was about to cry- or as if she was finally admitting to something she was trying to hide. Finally curious, he glanced to her screen. His heart fell at the first sentence he read.5

"Love is a fairy tale, never meant to be."6

So, she doesn't believe in Love? No wonder she was so empty, so lonely. She had lost faith in the one meaning of life. Sighing, he closed the book he never took interest in. He walked out the door and whispered "I Love you." To the summer air, and walked away. 7

At her laptop, she would never know that her words drove away her only chance at love. She changed their fates forever.

Author notes

I just thought this was cute- and sad. This was just one of those stories that came to me while I was laying on my bed staring at my ceiling(which i do quite often.
UPDATE; I keep changing that quote on her paper, becuase latley all the ones I think of aren't that great~ so would anyone like to help me and tell me whether that quote is good or not?

Read.Review.Enjoy.

A contest entry

So.....?

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have 0. (?) (Line numbers)
    Ratings:

Comments

  • It's a very good story. Nice descriptions and the ending is sad but beautiful.
    I really liked it!
    Good luck in the contest!


  • nixers
    May 28

    Edit | Reply
    This is so sad but so beautiful. It's length is just right and it is written very well. I know you probably want constructive comments, but I can't give you any because I can see nothing wrong with this piece. I enjoyed it very much! Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.

  • it was so full of emotion it felt as if i was there its an awesome story that shows so much sadness

  • lilmermaid
    April 26

    Edit | Reply

    its interesting

    why would he wal away just because he saw something like that written on her computer...the fact that she was crying could also mean that she desperately wants someone to disprove that belief of hers which seems to be forced upon her without her liking...thats really sad