The Weight of Pain

There is a pain that's deep within, that one cannot let go.
The pain is chained ino my heart and the weight hangs heavy there.
You cannot run from place to place to leave the pain behind.
It follows you and drags you down into the deepest and darkest of holes.
Alone and chained with an anchor of pain.
It would be better to let go and drown.
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  • May 23

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    "It would be better to let go and drown"

    Very nice ^-^ i love the emotion in this write. It flows well, and i love the ending. You're wicked talented ^-^ Keep it up.


    -Seth


  • lottiemae
    May 3

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    very emotional, i like it.you tell about pain in a very vivid way. keep up the great writings. wish u luck in the contest.


  • Frost Crystal gold member
    April 26

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    This is pretty good. ^_^ kind of short, but to the point. good job, thanks for entering and good luck. ^_^
    Eci