There is a pain that's deep within, that one cannot let go.
The pain is chained ino my heart and the weight hangs heavy there.
You cannot run from place to place to leave the pain behind.
It follows you and drags you down into the deepest and darkest of holes.
Alone and chained with an anchor of pain.
It would be better to let go and drown.
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A contest entry
- Dark Poetry by HowlofSerendipity.
350 points, ended April 26, 2008, 18 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I like this, though it is very dark. It's succinct. You express yourself plainly and there aren't any extraneous words. Every word in the poem fits and is needed. I like that kind of straightforward style and you express yourself very well in this write. I like how the poem is so straighforward but still manages to be poetic at the same time. I'm surprised this didn't make finalists list in the contest. Oh well I guess you can't please everybody.
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"It would be better to let go and drown"
Very nice ^-^ i love the emotion in this write. It flows well, and i love the ending. You're wicked talented ^-^ Keep it up.
-Seth -
very emotional, i like it.you tell about pain in a very vivid way. keep up the great writings. wish u luck in the contest.
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This is pretty good. ^_^ kind of short, but to the point. good job, thanks for entering and good luck. ^_^
Eci
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