Tender heart High ~ Mistress in the making~ Chapter Two- Escape

 
  Chapter Two
 
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Inside the cubical we waited, waited until the very last of the girls were gone. 1

Then we made our escape.2

Flinging the door open we shoved our sports clothes into our backpacks, slugging them over our shoulders. There was not point in changing, as long as we looked like normal school girls the teachers would not notice. After all our school was not exactly the kind to run after people.3

“You ready to do this?” Ellie asked, I could hear the excitement in her voice. “Cause once we are outside these walls there is no turning back.”4

Nodding, I made it a point not to walk behind her, knowing that already I was at breaking point. Her skirt seemed to be riding up her legs. I could see just the outline of those yellow panties crawling up her ass, and it made me shake.5

It made me vulnerable, susceptible to such feelings that a normal girl in my place should not be feeling.6

“About as ready as I am ever going to be, Just one thing though?”7

Ellie frowned, unlocking the bolts of the emergency exit door at the back of the locker room.8

“Yeah and whats that miss Colby do good?”9

Unsure of how to put it without blowing my chances, I tried to sound cool. Placing my hands on my hips.10

“What happens if we get caught?”11

Smiling, Ellie flung the door open. The sunlight shining brightly on our faces.12

“Ah it burns,” I cried without thinking.13

Laughing, Ellie took hold of my hand.14

“ Ah vampire are we? Don't worry that is quiet a turn on, I hear you girls can really bite. 15

Smiling, I looked away, trying to dodge her exquisite smile.16

“Don't worry Colby we are not going to get caught, trust me.”17

Worried, I shrugged. Butterflies swirling frantically around my stomach. My whole body felt warm as her fingers intertwined with mine, her tender heart touch exciting me beyond any level I had ever felt before.18

“Are you sure,” I asked, trying not to sound half as jittery as I was.19

“Trust me Colby, after today you will no longer be who you once thought you were, cause this time; This good girl has gone bad.”

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Chapter Two

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  • enchantress silver member
    October 27

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    I like where this is going. I believe Ellie already knows that Colby likes her in that special way. Still very hot.


  • TNTrouble gold member
    October 3

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    Tis slow going...waiting for things to really heat up here...lol. You know Me I love that lusty stuff...


  • GrimDeath
    July 24
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    Love it....(:


  • Hermanator1 silver member
    April 26

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    Building continues

    Just as your writing skills do! I like the new light hearted style of your writing...the humor interspersed with the erotic. I think this may be your best story to date even though I know that I may offend your first love...The Apparition Man. You are now writing with few errors and have far better structure than earlier works. Of course you write about twenty new stories a day so you are getting a lot of practice.LOL!!!


    • Hismercy
      April 26
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      100%

      I have to agree with Hermanator1 on his statement !


  • Hismercy
    April 25

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    Would you sign my book ?

    How does one give advice for a chapter that just rocks ?

    Well, like I said in the last chapter there was an error that wasn't worth describing, yet it may seem that you found the error cause this chapter was just so awesome, and I even was reading the story twice, and I didn't find an error!!

    The plot and the storyline and even the kinky-ness of Ellie (was awesome) when she found out that the girl that she was running off with didn't like the light and Ellie didn't mind or even grudge, yet just made a flirty comment...the whole chapter was just so cool !

    Loved the story !!

    -Hismercy

  • This story is already getting exciting. I really was a good girl when I was at school and never once bunked off, let alone with a hot girl. I think I really missed out there! lol. Although to be fair Im not into girls and none of the guys gave me a second glance *pulls a sad little face*. But enough of my self pity, this was very good. I liked how you show the main characters vulnerability in the sense that they are unsure about the feelings they are having and yet are so caught up in these feelings they are willing to be led astray. I cant wait to see where this story line is headed. Knowing you it will probably be getting very saucy, not that you will be hearing many people complaining. lol. Ill be sure to read the next chapter as soon as it comes out!

    X Amber X

  • I think this is a wonderful chapter. I love good girls who go bad. Something about that is completely hott! lol I love the pictures that you put with the chapters. I think it adds depth to it. You had a very minor spelling mishap. Other than that, it is wonderful sweetheart. Keep writing. I'm anxious to read more.


  • Fizbop Greeters member
    April 25

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    Oh crap the good girls gone bad oh no what shall ever happen. Please keep this going i'm beyond words for this work.

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