Tender heart High ~ Mistress in the making~ Chapter one- Panties

Chapter One - Panties

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I wanted panties. 4

But not just any old panties. I wanted Ellie's Panties. 5

Here I was. An ordinary seventeen year old girl; Or so I thought so. Till I got a glimpse of Ellie's panties in the girls locker bay, and that was it. 6

I was lost. I was completely and utterly lost... and soon to be obsessed. 7

“Panties... Don't look ... you can dodge them... Just don't look at her...” 8

“Hay Colby, what's up?” 9

To late. Had she seen me, checking out her almost perfect ass. 10

“No... nothing,” I stuttered. “Nothing at all.” 11

Ellie seemed satisfied with my answer, as she slid her hand under her skirt, yanking at her panties. 12

My whole body shivered, watching her touch herself, not intentionally or sexually of course. Out of sheer nature to adjust herself. There was just something about it that made it so erotic, something that made me want to be under her control. 13

I wanted her to make me touch them, make me touch those tight, silky Yellow panties. That fitted her tight ass so well, that sculptured her perfect shaved pussy. 14

“Get up against the wall you dirty bitch.” 15

Images of Ellie aroused in my head. He hands gripping mine, wandering, leading them to her dirty treasure. 16

“Fucking touch me you slut.” she screamed, pushing me against the wall, letting her fingers press hard against my ordinary black panties. 17

“I said touch me...” 18

I shook out of it, as Ellie stood in front of me, waving her hand in front of my face. 19

“I said would you like to join me for lunch?” 20

Nodding, I tried to wipe the image clean from my mind. 21

“Sure, where do you want to go,” I asked. 22

Cheekily she grinned. Taking my hand by surprise.


                           “As far away from here as possible.” 23

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  • So Strange Greeters member
    July 8

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    Amazing. I loved it. I think the sexual talk in this is actually a lot better than it usually is within lesbian stories. I loved that you showed more emotion and charisma than most people who write this kind of stuff. I loved the lesbianism and it made me rather hot. haha

    I loved it. I think you have an amazing skill for writing erotica... and other genres, too, but right now, I am in the mood for erotica.

  • Sandi247
    December 28, 2008
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    Good Start

    I want to read more.


  • Lonesome Dove
    December 21, 2008

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    You have definately hooked me on this one! Dang your good!! Your opening sentences wrap this chapter up neatly, and you end it off perfectly. Where will they go? What will they do? Is it really for lunch? Hmmmm... off to read Chapter 2.


  • enchantress
    October 27, 2008
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    This is great Blair. Really hot and I like the part where she starts day dreaming.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • TNTrouble
    October 3, 2008

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    Ahhh..panties. I prefer them "off" Myself but hey...whatever turns you on luv. I think your writing here tis excellent.


  • GrimDeath
    July 24, 2008
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    I liked it alot. Wonderful Descriptions

  • mcfreeman
    June 14, 2008
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    Great strong Start

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 3, ending: 3, dialog: 4, characters: 3.

  • ReadingFanatic
    April 30, 2008
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    Hm..Not bad, looking foward to more.


  • Hermanator1 silver member
    April 26, 2008

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    Great intro

    Thw transition between fact and thought was well done and the addition of humor makes it an enjoyable read.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Anaya Roma
    April 25, 2008

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    VERY WELL DONE EROTICA

    Congratulations! I see this is Chapter One, but this stands up very well on its own, sort of like a vignette.
    Sincerely,
    Anaya Roma

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • XxTattered WingsxX
    April 25, 2008

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    Hm, that is a very interesting start. I can only imagine where this will lead. I was a bit confused by the title, but now I see how it all plays together. I never thought somebody could write an entire chapter on somebody's panties but you made it interesting, captivating. I enjoyed it greatly. I am off to read the next chapter. You have minor grammatical errors but nothing major. Good read babe.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Glowstarcharmer
    April 25, 2008

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    Hmmm, an interesting start! It would appear to have great potential. You always manage to get such heat into such a short amount of writing, I wish I had that skill. I would be very much interested in reading more. I love your style of erotica, you manage to make it so exciting but keeping the tention at the same time. I hope you write more of this soon my love, it could go in any number of ways and I cant wait to find out what happens. You always seem to be able to find the perfect pictures to go with your stories as well, where do you find them all? I always try to look for pics to go with my poems and it takes me forever to find anything I like. Thats a bit off topic though, back to telling you how wonderful you are. lol. This was great, write more soon or else! lol.

    X Amber X

    • Hermanator1 silver member
      April 26, 2008
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      Photos

      You might try the "Flicker" sites for photos and drawings. They have a lot of different categories that are not copywright protected. I like the "Virtual girls Pool" or the "Pussycat" one
      Happy hunting
      The hermanator


  • Fizbop
    April 25, 2008

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    Intrestiesig story Very great story. nice feel to it can't wait for more. A nice twist on your story that you had already.


  • Hismercy
    April 24, 2008

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    where can I buy the book (unedited version)

    ...................great story Prodigious ! Out of the whole story I saw one error, that was very pointless to share because in whole-the story was awesome, I wanted to read chapter two !

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

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