Thrown Away: A Sonnet by Grace

I have been used, rejected, thrown away
A broken tool whose use has long run out
Left in my ashen nightmares to decay
Sinking thoughts twisted to hatred and doubt1

You discarded me like so much dead weight
As if I was nothing, nothing at all
Though, countless times, I saved you from your fate
You treated me like I would cause your fall2

I'm sorry I can't be of use to you
That I failed where I should have succeeded
I'm sorry I couldn't be strong for you
And that your wishes could not be heeded3

But I have one last thing I have to ask
Remember me after death lifts my mask

Author notes

*thinks of Haku* Poor Haku... T.T

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  • Sgs
    September 26, 2008

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    "Remember me after death lifts my mask..." what a great line! This is very emotional, good job. Thank you for entering the contest!

  • Hawkeyes
    June 14, 2008

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    Very good

    I love the rhyming in this poem. The creativity is fine too. It was sad but that is what poetry is a emotion. I love it keep on writing.

    beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 4.


  • Glowstarcharmer
    April 25, 2008
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    This was so sad! It made me want to cry. I loved the way the speaker in this poem was resigned to their fate of being discarded. They obviously love the person they were with so much and tried so hard to please then yat whatever they tried it wasnt good enough. I have felt like this before, as I am sure many other people have, and it is just a really heartbreaking poem. Maybe Im just being over emotional, I cant help it, Im a woman. lol. But seriously though, this was amazing even for your outstandingly talented writing. Keep up the good work my love.

    X Amber X

    • Lover of Stories
      April 26, 2008
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      Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. <3 I have felt sort of like this before, though not to the extent of the speaker in the poem, lolz. By the way, I've been reading Dragons of Winter Night and it's really good. Thanks for reccomending the books to me! =)

      • Glowstarcharmer
        April 27, 2008

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        Hehe, no problem I recomend those books to everyone I am such a huge fan of them. I had a debate with my daddy that they were the best fantasy books out there whereas he thought 'Lord of the Rings' were. We agreed to disagree. lol. Who is your favourite character so far?

        • Lover of Stories
          April 27, 2008
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          Hrmmm...I'm really not sure who my favorite character is. I like Raistlin, Laurana, Sturm, and Tas the most at the moment. ^^


  • LadyLionnir
    April 23, 2008

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    Very beautiful. Such a small handful of people can write poetry as fluent as this. The flow makes me want to drift into the realms of love and it's after taste of bitterness. The confusing times, lol. Well, great sonnet!!! I loved it...


  • Siby Anan
    April 23, 2008

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    I...it's....wow....I mean....


    Guess who's SPEECHLESS?!


    Perfection, once again.

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