Delve sighs happily, staring at his newest acquisition. His new friend, that weird little misborn, had told him all about this place. Acetyl had even been kind enough to show Delve how to get there on his own. Delve had been skeptical; the whole thing sounded more like a madman's rantings than reality. But it was true, all true, and he was very much enjoying his first solo visit. 2
No windows, no doors. Just white walls, white ceiling, shelves and hooks... and everything else you might need. 3
Delve doesn't understand quite how the White Room works, how exactly it manages to stock those shelves every time anew as if reading the visitor's mind, but he doesn't need to understand. All he cares about is that it is a place for his kind, a safe place: perfect for his play today.4
The man shivers. He is nude; his sleek hairless skin offers a matte sheen under the diffuse ivory light of the playroom. Delve's canine jaws split into a ragged grin. 5
The killer leans forward, extending a clawed hand to caress his prey's naked genitals. They hang limp and unaroused, of course, shrivelled against his body in terror. The human whimpers, trying to cringe away from the vicious coydog. However, the chains allow only a small amount of motion. Just enough to please Delve's acute sense of textural aesthetics.6
Delve is particularly pleased with the restraints the White Room conjures. The cold iron chains show a malevolent gleam, and the leather portions are not limited to boring brown or uniform black. In fact, crimson red is far more common, though the most common is an oddly stainless white. White, red, and black strips of leather are braided through all the chains, hanging down in loose tassels here and there. 7
With a victim strapped into place, with blood flowing onto the restraints, power seems to thrum and whistle through them. It drips from the tassels into the air, its scent dazzling the killer.8
The man is blindfolded. He has no idea what is going on, who has him, or what is coming. All he knows is that his day started normally, raping a fifteen-year-old prostitute before a breakfast of stones - specifically, white rocks of a special variety.9
And then, as he was walking his bitch out the door to take her to work, someone had hit him from behind. Before he could reach his piece, something sharp pierced his neck, and darkness claimed his will to retaliate.10
He had awoken in darkness. Suspended midair vertically by his arms, tethered from the bottom about his ankles, so tightly he is unable to do little more than swing a bit, any possibility of retaliation was long dead. 11
Blindfolded, gagged, he struggles to make some kind of sound, to demand information, make indignant mouth noises. All he manages is a kind of small, piteous mumbling.12
Delve's hungry grin broadens. He allows his short but filed-sharp dog's claws to draw short, shallow cuts in the man's testicles, just deep enough to bleed... one, two, three apiece. Then he drags his talons out to the man's thighs, digging deeper as he goes, until he's flexing his knuckles to rake the man's inner thighs as deep as he can as they drag down to the knees.13
An anguished howl against the gag. Blood gouts from a severed artery. Delve leans forward, lapping up the hot blood, hissing in glee as it flows over his tongue and down his throat. 14
Aware by the taste that he has severed an artery and must work quickly, Delve lunges for the bastard's genitals, crushing them between his bone-breaking molars. Quickly he tears his way forward, literally climbing the man's body with teeth and claws, ripping upward in seconds to get to the man's throat and chest.15
He goes wild, shredding thrashing gulping slashing until the whole area is in ruins, fixing his jaws around a collarbone, ripping it away even as one hand tears past the voicebox and rips the trachea and esophagus into spaghetti while the other hand struggles for purchase on the sternum. 16
Stripping the obnoxious bone away, Delve lunges at the sweet muscle with his teeth while the hot blood still pumps, before the body heat trails away. 17
When the guts spill with an indignant plop, the killer forces his small body into the cavity as much as he can, immersing himself in the gore as he rips and swallows, devouring.
Author notes
I know this is a fairly recent write, but for me, this is old shit. I've not been writing long. And honestly, I used to be really proud of these kinds of things. But now in retrospect, I can't believe I posted what amount to sexual fantasies with absolutely no plot or context and considered them Good Writing, not to mention more-or-less complete stories! It's certainly not going to be trophy-winning awful, because I know there are people on this site who started writing when they were ten or twelve or something and will have *that* to drag out... but to me, this is awful and embarrassing and oh god. So I entered it. x.x Enjoy, or not.
A contest entry
- Anything goes by Vampiric souls.
175 points, ended May 17, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - These Stories Suck by TheTynGirl.
170 points, ended December 9, 2008, 15 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Haaha, well. I can't say it's "trophy winning awful", either, as there's a lot of good things to say about it in the way you describe the setting, but I'm sure I can nitpick it to the point where it will be a dark stain on the world of prose.
Good luck. ^_^
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This was a pretty creepy write, definitely original. The details were very visual.
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wow. really vivid stuff, and well written to boot. conjured up some very disturbing images in my mind which is a sign of a well written piece as i didn't have to paint the picture myself as your descriptions were spot on, especially liked the line regarding the contrasts between the white room and the crimson red that normally flows. I admire a horror writer who doesn't shy away from the more graphic scenes of violence, so well done.

beginning: 3, language: 3, plot: 4, ending: 3, dialog: 3, characters: 3.
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Woah now this scared me and intrigued me. It was really really good, and well written and I loved it. But wow, this is some awesome writing






