Chapter 1:Spring (unfinished)

"The face is too long," I said. I looked at my picture, then looked at Zane who was sprawled on my bed. I had been very proud of the picture I had drawn of him until he waltzed through my front door. Then of course, I realized how hard it was to capture his true beauty. I wasnt sure that the face I had drawn was "too long," I just felt the picture was lacking something. I could never capture Zane's radiance with my pencil, so i blamed it on the logical, small flaws. 1

"What do you mean the face is too long?" Zane rose up from his spreaded position on my bed with a puzzled look on his face. "It looks fine to me."2

I sighed and shook my head. "No. It will never do you justice my dear boy," I said with an English accent. I picked up the edge of the large piece of paper, looked once more at my poor attempt, tore it out of my sketch book, crumpled it up, and threw it away before Zane could say anything against me. He just stared at me with his eyes wide open and mouth agape. I went over to him, sat down, and looked him straight in the eyes. He shook his head, pointed at the trash can and said, "How long had you been working on that?" 3

"Oh about a week," I replied,"But see it wasnt even close to being finished. And its never too late to start over. So dont worry, the next one that i do will be much better."4

"A week of your life spent working on something and you're just going to throw it away?" He shook his head and blinked rapidly in amazement. Then he slipped his arm around my waist, pulled me to him, and kissed me gently on the lips. I hungrily pulled him closer and kissed him harder, because, for some reason, his recognition of my insanity was extremely sexy. When we pulled away he said, "Well whatever you want to do sweetheart. You're the artist." And his soft smile spread accross his face as he tossed his black hair out of his eyes. 5

"Thank you," I said. And i kissed him again. 6

"Well honey i better get goin'," he said when we pulled away. 7

"Where are you going to?" I asked. 8

"Lucas's house. We're supposed to play some cool new video game and then we are going to discuss very confidetial plans that you don't get to know about." 9

"What is it?" I said, thinking that surely he wouldnt be able to resist telling me. I could tell he was already about to burst from keeping the secret within him. 10

"I can't tell you. I told you it's very confidential, but you'll find out what it is soon and..." he paused and i could see him sigh with sparkles in his eyes that were full of hope."Man you are gonna be surprised. It's gonna be the best thing to ever happen to us. The best thing to happen to ALL of us."11

I couldn't help but be a little excited. even though I knew that Zane had a way of exaggerating the smallest things and making them seem like the biggest deals. Still, the hope in his eyes made me think that this wasnt just some exaggeration. This was something serious. Something big. 12

"Alright then," i said,"Go discuss your important plans with your comrade!" And he kissed me on the forehead while picking me up and spinning me around. 13

"I love you, Kayla." 14

"I love you too." And i watched him as he walked down my steps, got in his car, and drove away. 15

Author notes

well..this is only my second story attempt. ever. and em...well im not sure about it. i know what im going to do with it...but i dont know where to go from here. i figured i would post what i had and see if i got any feedback or whatever.

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  • C J Weatherholt
    January 5, 2005
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    This is really good Kim I think you should keep going with it. I love it so far and want more Much luvs~Crys