Yu Yu Hakusho and The Deadly Rose

"Shut up, witch!" A man that looks about in his mid-twenty hollered. His silver, long hair swayed to his side, his gold eyes stared down a woman about the same age.1

She smiled baring her pointy vampire teeth. Her red eyes glared at him, almost right through him. She ran her hand through her coal, black hair. pulling her hand away from her hair, she stared down at her red finger-nails. Staring back up, she stated, "What's wrong?" She laughed, than started to take in her baby voice, "Is the puppy scared of teaming up with big, bad, scary vampires?" 2

He grew angrier. Blood started to drip from his hands, as his short nails started to tear at his flesh. Then he started to relax. Letting out a sly smile, than he said as casual as he can, "I agree with the big part. You vampires are BIG HEADED!" 3

That made her snap. They exchanged insults with insults. With a swift motion, he grabbed her by her shirt caller. Her eyes stayed calm as she glared at his boiling eyes. He tugged her ear to his mouth and he whispered in his dark voice, "If I wanted to kill Yusuke Urameshi and his team, we could do it without your blood sucking kind." His hot breath coated her neck, made her tingle down her spine. 4

She took a relaxing breath, than grasped his hand. He flinched from the pain, as her nail dug into his skin. She smiled, "Poor old, Charlie. So confused." Her other hand slid across his cheek. "Now listen, do you know how you are going to kill Yusuke and his group?" His eyes turned confused as he shook his head. She lightly giggled, "I thought so. I have the best idea to bring them down." 5

He slowly released her and he set her on the ground. His eyes traveled the dark cave, than his attention turned back to her. She continued, "The only problem we have is those two demons, getting in our way. You know, Kurama and Hiei?" She paused for a reaction, but retrieved nothing. She sighed, "But we got to save our energy for Yusuke. So what if, those two demons kill each other?"6

Charlie than laughed, "Oh, how is that going to happen?" 7

She turned and smiled, "This is how." Lightning struck right beside the cave, making the inside light blue, before it faded into darkness.8

Yusuke ran through the puddled sidewalk. The rain pounded on the ground and on him. Dashing to his hotel, making the puddles splash knee-high. His black hair was soaked in water, and his shirt grew tight to his skin. His brown eyes glistened in the moonlight. 9

He kept on running even when his legs felt like they were about to cave in. His breathing was heavy, and his chest felt like it was being smashed over and over again. Yusuke stopped and rested his numb arms on his knees. Gasp, gasp. He choked out "Man, I-I'm so l-late. They're." He let out a cough before finishing the sentence, "going to kill me." He pulled his arms off, took a deep breath, and started to sprint.10

In the distance, Yusuke could see his hotel rise above the horizontal. He crashed through the door, clutching his sore arm, and dashed up the stairs. His tongue ran around his dry mouth. Seeing his door, he took the numb, and yanked the door opened. The first thing he saw was a blue haired girl, with pink eyes, sitting on the edge of Yusuke's bed. Her pink kimono drifted off the bed. She gave Yusuke a warm smile. 11

Yusuke gasped, "Sorry I'm late, Botan." Botan shielded her mouth as she giggled. Yusuke tilted his head, "What's so funny?"12

Botan finally stopped giggling, "Who said you are late? It's 5:30, the meeting is'n't until 6:00." 13

Yusuke's jaw dropped. If it wasn't attached it would of fallen right off. He blurted, "But my watch says it's 7:45." He folded his arms around his chest and grumbled, "That means my clock was wrong." He jolted his head up to face Botan and holard, "That means I waisted my energy for no damn reason!" 14

Botan burst with laughter, "Don't worry, Yusuke. Kuwabara is here early to, but." She choked down her giggle, "He wanted to came early, and he knew he was early because his watch worked." She laughed so hard that she fell over on the bed, her hands rapped around her painful gut. Yusuke glared and growled at her. Yusuke could only think of was ending her life.15

A man with red hair, styled like Elvis, entered the room from the door the leads to the kitchen. His small eyes looked at Yusuke. "Hey, Urameshi!" His lips formed a sheepish smile, "Decided to come early too."16

Yusuke mumbled, "I didn't even know I came early." Looking at Botan, he asked, "Is Kurama and Hiei here?17

Botan inhaled fresh air, "No, not that I know of." Yusuke looked down, but Botan continued, "They're probably waiting for the last minute. You know, demons and all." Yusuke and Kuwabara glared at Botan. There was no sound for a minute, until Kuwabara let out a painful sneeze.18

Kuwabara rubbed his red nose, than shoved his hands in his baggy, grey hoodie. His fingers started to fiddle with the lint that lay inside his hoodie. "Yusuke announced, "I'm going to take a nap. Wake me when those demons are here." Yusuke collapsed on his arm chair. Taking a deep yawn, his eyes fell in darkness, than he was asleep.19

Kurama brushed his red bangs from his green, emerald eyes. His long hair stretched to the center of his back. His attire grew heavy from the soggy rain. The puddle made a splosh sound with each step he took.20

Kurama took a step, but before he could land it another step was heard. Kurama's pace grew faster, but so was the other foot-steps. He stood still, and started to concentrate on the follower, but sadly found nothing. He turned around to face.... Nothing. There was nothing, even the puddles doesn't looked like it's been disturbed. Kurama clenched his fist than growled, "Show yourself. Stop hiding, coward." From the shadows, you can hear a low dark laugh. The dark figure leaped into the light about 10 feet in front of Kurama. The man's silver hair shined from the moon.21

He stared at Kurama, than he let out a sly smile, "Let me introduce myself." He took a small bow, "My name is Charlie." Kurama peered at Charlie. Kurama's mind was puzzled. Odd. I can't feel his demon energy. Charlie laughed, "What would a worthless fox know?"22

Kurama's eyes turned red, "I wouldn't mess with me if I were you." His voice was so harsh, it would make lower class demons run off for their mommas.23

Charlie stuttered, "Oh, p-please don't h-hurt me, mister mean fox." He managed to squeeze in a giggle. Kurama brought his back straight, as he thought what would be more pleasurable than torturing him? Charlie went on, "You think I'm worthless? Well I guess the fight will tell us who is better." He went into a fighting stance.24

Kurama pulled out a rose from his long hair. He just flicked the rose witched turned into a rosewhipe in an instant. Charlie dashed to Kurama and tried to give him a right claw, but Kurama leaped back, avoiding the hit. He yanked his whip forward, barley nicking Charlie. It only tore his ear. Blood squirted out, as Charlie took hold of his ear. 25

Charlie smiled than vanished. Kurama gasped. He turned every direction, but saw no one. He finally went at ease. Charlie leaped at Kurama's back, and his hand cupped Kurama's neck. He smiled and jabbed his teeth into Kurama's neck. Kurama let out a heart throbbing scream. 26

Kurama released his rosewhipe. His body was motionless, as Charlie's teeth kept digging in further. Charlie dropped Kurama. Gravity pulled Kurama on the smooshy surface. Mud piled on his cheeks, his blood turned the brown dirt red. 27

Charlie slowly licked his lips, savoring the flavor. He bended on one knee, and informed Kurama, "Don't worry, you arn't going to die." He humphed, "And the reason why you couldn't tell what my energy was, because I'm a werewolf."28

Those words were engraved into Kurama's mind. His eyes went wide like plates. He struggled to get up, but once he went an inch, he'd plop right down. 29

Charlie pulled to his feet, and dusted himself off. He turned behind him and started to fade away into the distance.30

Kurama tried to wiggle up, but still no success. He lay there and prayed for the suffering to stop. The horrible sensation, that stung his neck, lasted for minutes, as his eyelids overlapped his eyes and poured him to sleep.31

Hiei stood tall on a branch from a tree. He closed his eyes and was engulfed by the melody the rain sang. There was a chill that blew on his neck. He slowly opened his eyes, to see a woman, with black, coal hair, right in front of him. 32

Hiei jumped out of the tree, landing poorly on his feet. He peaked at where he saw that woman, but she wasn't there. The wind carried her horrifying laugh. He smiled and chuckled. I have time to kill this fool. 33

He unsheathed his katana quickly, and turned to clash with her claws. She was impressed. She praised, "You have skill. You would be a worthy worrier." Hiei pushed his sword forward and sliced downward at her, but barley hitting her.34

She leaped backward and started to go left, but before she could run she was eye to eye with his katana, which was engraved into the tree. Hiei snapped his fingers, I missed. He had tossed his katana hoping to stab her head. She slithered her hand down the sword to the handle. Hiei replied, "Don't praise me! I don't need a pathetic fool to tell me how good I am!" 35

She took hold of the handle, and wiggled it loose from the grasp of the tree. She stared at his katana for a long time, then she broke the silence. "Don't worry, Hiei." She looked deep into his eyes, "You don't have to take my praise, since I'm better than you." At that very instant, she has unjust his sword right into his back. Hiei's scream was caught into his throat.36

He slammed onto the ground. Thump. She smiled and slowly pulled the sword out. Hiei flinched, but still hasn't screamed. Her shadow stretched to his crippled body. She pulled him up, and slammed him into a tree. She pitied, "Don't try to struggle, Hiei. My names, Helen." She was so close to Hiei that their noses touched each other. She can feel Hiei slow and steady heart. 37

Hiei sighed, "If you are going to finish me you better do it now, or I will kill you." She smiled at Hiei's courage.38

She whispered in her luring voice, "I like you Hiei, and you are very brave. I will award you." She pulled down his shirt caller down, and sank her fangs in his tender neck. She poked at a vain, and started to suck the rich blood. 39

It stung Hiei at first, but than it started to feel good. He was drained. She took her fangs out of his neck, and then she pulled his head to her neck. He had to sink his teeth into her. Her blood rushed into his mouth, and entered his system. It stung as it entered his body, and his heart felt like it was going to explode. 40

He started to get pale, and he jolted, still fangs in neck, from the pain when his heart stopped beating. She smiled as he slowly died.41

Yusuke gasped awake, "HIEI! KURAMA!" He was speechless as he stared into green emerald eyes. Kurama had a little smile and, right behind him was Hiei. 42

Kurama giggled, "Well, now. Did someone had a bad dream?" Yusuke nodded after mouthing shut up. 43

Yusuke started, "It was horrible." Hiei humphed and rolled his eyes. Yusuke asked, "What time is it?" They all pointed to the clock. It said that it was 6"04. Yusuke rubbed the back of his head. He was covered in sweat. That was a terrible dream.44

Botan clapped her hands together, "OK, let's get this meeting started." Everyone started to take there seats. Yusuke stayed on his armchair, and Kurama sat on the floor with his legs criss-cross. Hiei went to the window ceal, while Kuwabara sat next to Botan on the bed. Botan looked around and stated, "OK, Koenma told me to tell you guys about a mission."45

Yusuke nearly fainted. He replied, "But, we just did one ten hours ago. Diaper-breath sure doesn't want his detectives to breath." Botan told Yusuke to hush.46

She continue, ignoring that last reply, "Koenma found out that these sudden kills isn't made from demons, or humans. That they are made from something else."47

Yusuke interrupted, "Like vampires and werewolves!" Everyone stared at Yusuke. They looked at Yusuke. Botan stared deep at him, and slowly nodded.48

She asked, "Yes, how did you know?" She scratched her brow, "Did Koenma tell you?"49

Yusuke immediately shook his head, "No, it was from a dream." Everyone's eyes were locked with Yusuke's. He pointed to Kurama, "You and Hiei was in it."50

Hiei laughed, "Lovely. I was in a human's dream." He rolled his eyes, than looked at Yusuke, "Just because it was in a dream doesn't make it true."51

Kuwabara talked back, "Oh yeah, than how did Urameshi knew about vampires and werewolves?" He smirked, "No answer, Three-eyed troll!"52

Hiei said calmly, "I will kill you."53

Kuwabara spat, "Bring it!"54

Yusuke stopped the debate, "Shut up!" Their attention was back on Yusuke. He huffed, "Just keep quiet and listen." Yusuke didn't continued until there was a minute of silence, "Look, the dream was strange. Maybe it was real, maybe not. It could be a warning, so just hear me out." He calmly told them everything about the dream.55

Kurama shivered. Botan's face dropped, and same with Kuwabara. Hiei just stared out into the blackness that formed outside. Kurama wondered, "Well, what do think of it as?"56

Yusuke opened his mouth but nothing came out. He searched his mind for the answer, but the only thing he got was puzzles.57

Kurama just smiled as he saw Yusuke looking rather puzzled. Kurama closed his eyes and started to relax. He stayed focus on the back of his eyelids. Wait. There was this small figure in the distance. The figure started to get closer and closer. It was close enough to see what the figure was. It was Hiei! His mangled up body lay in the darkness. Scratches spread all over his body and blood flooded all around him. Kurama popped his eyes open to be face to face with a man with big brown eyes.58

Yusuke giggled, "What is it? Did I say something scary?"59

Kurama just smiled, "No, it's..." Kurama was interrupted by this jolt of pain that ran through his stomach. Pain started to swarm all around him. Kurama clutched his gut, and held in his gasps. He tried to show less emotions as possible but there was no success. 60

As everyone gathered around Kurama shoved his way out the door. All their eyes fallowed as Kurama ran out the door. Hiei just stared for a moment than flinched from the pain that was coursing through his neck. Hiei opened the window and soured through the wind. Yusuke shrugged his shoulders, "This team is just running out the door."61

Kurama ran into the forest that was near the hotel. He fell on the mooshy ground and started to moan in pain. His bones started to rearrange as his eyes turned yellow. He started to tear at his flesh as he screamed in agony. His hair wrinkled up, and his face twisted from the pain. His heart pounded on his chest, almost leaping out. Blood boiling, his vision blurry, and blood spewed from his mouth. The only thing that witnessed this whole thing, that hung in the sky, was the pale, full moon.62

Yusuke hollered, "Kurama! Hiei!" He wondered down the street, searching every corner. Seeing a bench, he decided to rest on it. Watching the rain plop on the ground. His worries started to build up, and flood every emotion he ever had. What is going on? 63

Hiei started to bash his fist against a tree. He felt like something was entering his body. There was this force that pushed him in every direction. His vision was whorled around. Pressure stiffened his organs. His body trembled all over. He started to scrape at the ground, trying to bare with the pain. He suddenly went black.64

Still puking up blood, Kurama's teeth started to enlarge. Sharper than knives with each teeth. His nails tore at the earth. His nails grew sharper than ever. Red fur crept up his spine. Soon he was covered in blood, red fur. His face stretched out to form a dog snout with a black, wet nose. He howled, literaly, from the tormenting pain. 65

Kurama sniffed the ground and fallowed any sent he could sniff. Starvation clogged his mind. Words hurricane through his mind, telling him to kill. Kill. KILL!
He caught the sent of blood. His heart stared pumping from the grand smell. Turning, he spotted Hiei with scars all over his body. 66

Hiei turned behind him and was terrorized at Kurama's unique structure. Kurama sprang forward knocking Hiei flat on his back. He tried dodging those massive fangs that thrived for a taste of Hiei's flesh. In the back of Hiei's mind words flooded telling him to kill too. He herd Helen's voice echoed, "Relax Hiei. Just give in. Kill." Hiei kept fighting, both, Kurama and his own body.67

Kurama still tried to sink his teeth into Hiei, but still kept failing. He jabbed his claws deep inside Hiei's chest, making blood ooze from his body. Hiei gasped and pushed that hungry dog off. 68

Kurama whirled right into a tree and bended the bark. He shook and was back up. Hiei took this chance and swung his sword at him. Hiei was in a blood rampage. He had lost the war that was inside him. Kurama leaped from the stroke and pounced back at Hiei. He knocked the sword out of his hands and back handed him into a tree.69

Hiei snapped back to reality, but was found face to face with a hungry wolf. After a second, Hiei spewed blood as Kurama took hold of his heart. Kurama's face turned bitter as he felt his friend depart from this world.70

He yanked his paw out of the corpses chest. He watched the motionless body tumble to the ground. He can hear his own heart pound in his ear. His words got caught in his throat. His wolf slowly evaporated as he cried about what he did. The rain pounded hard, and covered poor Kurama. Tears withered from his eyes, he choked on his cry, and hated himself for what he did. He glowered at the blood that was smeared on his hands. He noticed his complexion turning pale. 71

As he moaned a low voice popped out of nowhere. "Poor Kurama. Don't worry, your life will be over shortly!" Kurama knew who that voice belonged to. Charlie.72

Yusuke hered some screaming in the forest. So, he sprinted that direction. He was half way down the way, when lightening pierced through the sky. His head was screaming in pain.73

There was this force that pushed Kurama to where Hiei's sword landed. He tried fighting it, but he just couldn't stop himself. He kept hearing Charlie's evil laugh run through his head. He reached down and trembled, picking up the sword.74

Yusuke breathed hard, as he dashed into the forest. Branches scraping his skin, tearing at his clothes, and smacking him in the face. Where are you Kurama? Hiei? 75

Kurama pressed that cold blade against his neck. He tore at the skin, making thin lawyers of blood trickle down. And then.... You'll fined out next time on Yu Yu Hakusho!

Author notes

What you said: Alrighty then, write away.

Give me a story with your Anime Prompt as: Yu Yu Hakasho

Make me cry, make me shift to the edge of my seat. Or better yet, release your dreams into the story. This story should come from your inner mind, your heart and soul working to create fantastic fusion that will knock my socks off!! ha ha..ahem.. good luck!

As you can tell, that I am not finished. I want you to die of suspense. *Evil laugh* Hehehe! Anyway, I might make an extended version too. Hope you liked it. Oh and what should I call this. Any advice?

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  • Miss Hanako Cullen
    April 24, 2008

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    Shirt Caller should be [Collar]

    There should be more fluidity in this story, sometimes it's a little hard to read. Yu Yu Hakusho is hard to write for anyway, cause the characters talk in really short bursts. So, what can I say. : )

    Botan finally stopped giggling, "Who said you are late? It's 5:30, the meeting is at 6:00." -- Little odd here, would sound better if it was ["Who said you were late? It's 5:30, the meeting isn't until 6:00." she said with a smile.

    So far it's pretty good storywise, needs some clean up and editing though.
    : ) Keep going, you've got a good piece here!!


    As for titles I would say....hmmm.. something with Rose in the name. The idea of vampires is that their beautiful.. so something like "Deadly Rose" would be good. So, [ Yu Yu Hakusho and The Deadly Rose] ha ha.

    beginning: 3, language: 2, plot: 3, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.


    • Yoko
      April 24, 2008
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      WOW! Thanks for the help. That would make it sound better. I'll try and look into it.