A Moments Pain

I feel my skin screaming, crying for help as hot, fresh blood slid smoothly down my arm and dropped begrudgingly onto my long black skirt. 1

Every time my sister, Arya was mentioned, I burst into tears and and punished myself for letting her die. I did not kill her, persay, but I LET her die at the hands of my own father. As he brought out the "killer" leather belt and swung the deadly weapon at Arya, I could feel the same pain. I feel dead though i am not. I want to die but no one will let ME. Everyone cares too much about me. 2

Again as I think over the oast years I slide the blade across my skin. Cutting and tearing everything in its path. More hot blood flowed out of my veins as I screamed ever so silently. footsteps followed the sound of my screaming. I hurriedly hid the knife under my bed and pulled the covers over my head....

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  • eleno
    June 5

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    This is freaky, hm, how could they hear if the screaming was silent? and its not oast its past. Good overall.


  • Tiger-Lily gold member
    June 1

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    Hm...if she's screaming silently, how did they hear?

    Also, "oast" = past.

    Very well-written, not to mention painfully descriptive.

    Great job on the emotions.

    HT


  • Fish food
    May 14

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    It's pretty good, very very sad! Though it's a bit too short for me, it would have been nice if you added more background info, a little more character building so that it would be even sadder! Keep it up!!


  • ForestFaery
    May 6

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    SHort but sad

    I liked it one typo though third paragraph "again as i think over the oast" oast should be last but other than that i loved it thanks for entereing


  • Pomodorina
    May 1

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    Oh my god, this is an amazing story but I sincerely hope to God it is not true. This is an amazing write, keep up the good work!!

  • Writing0Freedom
    April 22

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    Wow, vivid picture. This is very sad. I think there is a little missing here such as the back story. I would be interested in reading more. Very good for what you have though. Thanks for entering!
    WritingFree


  • ForgottenVoice silver member
    April 22
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    woah. christabob this is wow

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