My Starting Idea!! (title will Change)

It all started with a cup of coffee...1

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Kaylee stepped into the little cafe, CuppaJino, and stared at the long line. She decided to sit down at the nearest table until the line shortened. She sat down and opened her purse, mentally ordering her coffee. A man sat down next to her and stared until Kaylee looked up.3

"Can I buy your coffeee for you?" Dan asked his face concentrated on her entrancing green eyes. Her her black and red tinted hair made her already beautiful eyes sparkle with imagination and wonder. 4

"Sure, if you're feeling up to it." Kaylee said giving a signal of attraction. 5

"Well, what do you want then?" 6

"How about a carmel latte with whipped cream?" 7

"O.K. I will be back."8

Dan pushed his way through the crowd and snuck behind the counter. A few moments later he came back with her Carmel latte and Whipped cream. 9

"Here you go Miss." Dan said sitting back down. A barista came over and told Dan to get back in the brewing area before he is fired. 10

"Well it looks like I have to go, will I see you tomorrow?"11

"I would count on it!" Kaylee said walking out with her empty latte cup. She swung her hips intentionally to catch his attention before leaving to her car...12

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  • Sekhmet Kitty
    April 21

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    It doesn't say very much and I'm sure I've read the same sort of thing many times before. Perhaps have a twist in the next bit to make it different.
    It had a good amount of detail and good wording, which was good.
    Good Start!


    • CrimsonxxxTearsxxx
      April 22
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      I was going to have a twist in it... and I think that i could get a lot more done on this in a few weeks maybe... after the contest is over and I can finish the story... plots take such a long time to develop.


  • I-Love-Someone
    April 21
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    lol. this is cool. Katie told me about you. She said you were awesomeness. SHe was right!


    • CrimsonxxxTearsxxx
      April 22
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      Thank you for the comment on my awesomeness...Really without Katie, I dont think that I could be the way that i am...


      KATIE I LOVE YOU!!!