Sky moon

17 year old Mara discovers she is a werewolf and now must face the changes on her own scince her parents died in a wreck. She must learn to controll her urges for meat, her sudden outbursts that could land her back into juvinle hall for good this time,and learn to controll that beast that dwells inside that awaken when she feels emotion..especially for a boy at her new school who seems to have a familliar presence.
Chapter 1: alone1

The wind hits me lightly on the face sending a pleasent shiver down my spine, i close my eyes and try to get the feel of the wind spirit i was brought up to worship along with the other god and spirits. I can feel the change already..the beast is starting to arise inside me. It was only a month after i was moved into another foster home in Richmond Virginia that i discovered that all the legends about the Lembards pack of werewolves is true. My mother was a part werewolf part human and my father was human, they knew i would soon become a monster one day and they never even bothered to tell me my destiny of being a werewolf and they never will, they died 9 weeks after i went to jail for drug possesion and threatening the school with a bomb. My parents were on their way to pick me up from the county jail but as they were crossing the bridge they lost controll of their vehicle and plunged into the river only was it two hour later did the police and firemen get notified that a car went into the water and they finally found my parents bodies. 2

Now i am all alone in this world with out any guidance to help get me though the change and stop me from being a cold blooded killer. 3

I open my eyes to see the moon is full and bludgy. 4

Suddenly befor i knew it my eyes has changed the same color and shape as the moon glowing a bright yellow, i could feel the pain as my body began to change its self into the howler of the night. I was suddenly on the ground grasping at my sides as i felt my heart beat faster as if it were a drum being beatin by a little drummer boy and i let out a painful low groan as i felt my legs and arms twist painfully into a wolf form and i sighed as i felt my face form into a wolf. Soon i am completely transformed as i stand close to the edge of a cliff. I close my eyes and slowly lift my head to the sky and mother moon and i form my lips into a shape of an O and i let out a howl of sorrow singing my story to other wolves about how i'm alone and frightened......

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  • July 31
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    very kewl, it reminds me somewat of 'blood and chocolate'
    but still very kewl, i liked it...


  • July 13

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    i dig it lol i love scary stuff man i just cant write it i read stephen king all the time how bout you

  • "scince" = since.
    juvinle = juvenile.

    "My parents were on their way to pick me up from the county jail but as they were crossing the bridge they lost controll of their vehicle and plunged into the river only was it two hour later did the police and firemen get notified that a car went into the water and they finally found my parents bodies. 2"

    Whoa! Run-on sentence much!!! Use periods in the middle,and commas to break the flow, as it gets tiring.

    Hm...very good ending! Very dramatic, lol

    HT