Life's Ending-Title of series1
Music Blaring: Jacob's Beginning-First book I'm working on in this series. I'll be showing a few of the chapters over the next two to three weeks, and if I get a lot of grand attitudes on it, I may just finish it. Please give constructive criticism. I know I will need it. So if anything seems fucked up, too stupid, or anything like that, please don't be afraid to tell me what to fix. 2
Thanks, 3
Leah...4
On to the actual story now: 5
I’ve been dead for a while now. I don’t remember my past or anything. I don’t even remember how I died, just that I did. I also remember the feeling when I died, or almost the lack of. That’s it, it wasn’t a feeling so much as a sense of peace. But, it’s been a while now, and even that seems like a distant memory that will leave me.6
When I died, I remember seeing and feeling this warm glow that was surrounded by light. I turned from it though. I feared where it would take me. I was only a kid, and I wasn’t ready to die. But, I had died, and when I turned from the light, it became cold, faded, and left. And I stayed on earth, and like the light; I am cold.7
Since I’ve been dead and stuck on earth, I’ve watched the human race. I’ve seen the best in people and have felt proud of them. I’ve also seen the worse in people, the perversions and venoms and I’ve felt humiliated by them. I’ve also listened to them, heard the cries and laughter and yells and I’ve helped a few. The ones whose cries hurt me, the ones I see that need help the most. For the most part, they’re teens. I think, I’m connected more with teens because I died when I was one. So I help them more, I help others as well, but teens, now they are the future. And so I help them or try to.8
I listen closely to their cries and I listen when they’re screaming at themselves for being pathetic and worthless and I hope they feel me when I hug them, because when I hug them, they calm down. And I’ve helped give them peace, I hope.9
Anyway, I don’t have a story of me anymore, but I do have these people’s stories. So, that’s why I’m writing these, my death stories to the world for any to find, read, and maybe learn from. 10
So, without too much more babbling, let me begin from the beginning, with the first person I ever helped.11
Author notes
Prelude to the actual book. Tell me what you think so far as with what the story will pretty much be about.
What did you think? Please comment!
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Thanks for the comment. I've been meaning to put up the next chapter, I'm editing it now, so it'll be up soon. No, it wasn't suicide, you'll find out in the next chapter...it's more of a hint, she starts thinking, but yeah. I always try to see the best in people as well. It is hard, but it'll get easier, I'm sure, as I mature.
Hearts.
Miseria -
excellent piece
Since i've been dead and stuck on earth,(was it suicide)I've watched the human race, I've seen the best in people and felt proud of them. I always try to see the best in people. Not always easy is it. I like this alot very good
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this is a good start to a story, leaves me wanting much more, you drew me in right away. I want the rest of the story now...peace
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hey girl, I love it. Love it love it love it. I think you are going to go really far as a writer.
Jenn -
Damn Leah..I'm so freakin excited for the rest!!!
You rock hardcore.
twizted bizkit -
Okay, definately. And thanks for the comment.
Edited on Jan 03, 6:59 p.m. because 'stupid me.'. -
sounds really interesting cant wait to read more u've got to IM me when you've psoted the second ok?
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