My captor. My nemesis. My father.

"ELLA! GET DOWN HERE NOW!" I turn quickly moving on down the stairs towards the man I have learned to fear. 1

"Yes father?" My voice is soft, polite but not frightened not yet. 2

"Where have you been? What did I say about staying in your room! I told you stay down here." His hand flashes, sudden pain fills my cheek. 3

"Yes, sorry father. Can I return to my room for a moment?" I ask carefully giving him a promising look. I do not dare to reach up and touch my face. 4

"For what." He snaps suspiciously. 5

"My notebook father please, I only wish to write. No one will know of this I swear." My voice is soft and pleading now, fear now hides within the words, pain scattered within it. He suddenly moves his hand again and his face softens sickeningly and at once he is an angel. I can feel his hand brushing my albino blond hair, his muddy brown and speckled green eyes glare into my soft strawberry pink ones. 6

"Of course they wont, Darling." That sickening smile an his face, the bitter sweet memories of his words echoing into my mind, stirring the sleeping remains of long forgotten fears. "Go on now, get your note book." 7

"Thank you father." I smile sincerely at him before dashing back up to my cold, dark room. This should be a sanctuary but its far from that, the only place I feel remotely safe is in my mothers arms now. Because otherwise I know he's watching, cause he's always watching. Grabbing the notebook I hurried back down the stairs so I wouldn't be struck again. Falling into one of the chairs in the wide living room, I sink down and begin to write. 8

'My captor. My nemesis. My father. Three strong things to say all describing one person, I am so afraid of him, but yet there is only one thing to do. Stay with him. If I leave, he won't survive, if he does so does she...and her I care about. She is my guardian, my life, everything in the world and yet she still hasn't saved my from him. No one can save me from his torture. But that is all right as long as he doesn't harm my mom or anyone else, I could careless what he does to me.' I stop writing to think for a moment and glance over at him, he is watching the sports channel probably ESPN or something. 'His moods are weird, for one second he is normal a happy bright eyed man, and then suddenly a dark cloud befalls him and he strikes out, only at me of course. Again, I am forced to go as he is watching me write once again...I hope I shall right soon.'9

"Ella?" His voice is hard and naturally I flinch. "I don't think you should write any more Ella."10

"Yes of course father no more writing." I agree with him avoiding confrontation. He stands, I cringe again, again he moves closer to me now, hovering again he takes the notebook and throws it aside. "father. I." I look up at him again and he strikes me, the time my head spins from the smack, the pain ripping through my skull like a thousand stabbing knives. Suddenly another pain hits me and then another before long I cant see or react, What did I do this time? What is it now? I must be doing something wrong, but what? Maybe I looked at him wrong, maybe I shouldn't have blinked. My world is fading and then in the distance I hear him calling my name and the sound of sirens.

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-Its the last one, cant remember the number..sorry.-

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  • Tiger-Lily
    July 4, 2008

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    Wow, Jessi, very wel done. Love how you wrtoe this! Great word structure, and though the end as a bit fast, nonetheless very good. xD

    -HT


  • Melancholic Smile
    July 4, 2008

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    Wow you wrote this so well and although it was painful to read I wanted to read more of it. As others have commented maybe some background to the character would be good, it just feels like it needs expanded somehow. You are writing it so well and I hope you will make it into a longer piece as I think it would be a great story. Very sad and very deep. Well done on a good piece of writing and good luck in my contest.


  • Reaver Greeters member
    May 28, 2008
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    This was a great story, but i found that i was wanting more. More of a backstory or place setting. I don't know. Very well done grammatically and conceptually. Enjoyed it! You over did the word limit by a few, but its cool. Thanks for entering! Durian.


  • Memoirs of a Girl
    May 16, 2008

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    Hmmm... This story seems incomplete. It needs more details, more background.
    It is a good start.
    Thanks for entering.
    ~Memoirs


  • NinjaMegami
    May 12, 2008
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    wowowowowowowowowowow.

  • I will stand by you
    April 22, 2008
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    keep writing lil sis. It's like your writing my life story. Keep it up.

  • Jinxgirl
    April 20, 2008
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    interesting... this is a different twist than i would have expected on the sentence.


  • Oddems.
    April 19, 2008

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    It was very well written and I think you should continue writing about it, I want to know what happens! Awesome job and do keep writing!

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

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