Heart of Darkness- Prolouge

*This is actually my first fan-fic piece. Give me comments, but please be nice! *1

Prolouge:2

The full moon cast a ghostly beam of light onto the pool of water, making the cats sitting by the shore appear as flickering silhouettes. A large tom stepped out of the shadows and moved towards the water's edge, the moonlight turning his fiery ginger coat into a strange shade of silver, his paws not leaving prints on the fine white sand that lined the pool. "The forest has fallen into disarray," he meowed faintly, his sparkling emerald eyes troubled. "The warrior code no longer exists among the rubble of the clans."3

A broad-shouldered tabby tom padded forward through the lines of warriors to join the first cat, his amber eyes full of sorrow and his paws heavy with his sadness. "I fear there is not much hope Firestar. What could we possibly do to re-establish order? It has been many seasons since you and I left the forest." He stared into the ranks of Starclan, waiting for the advancing spirits to contest what he had just said. 4

This time a young-looking gray she-cat spoke, her pelt shining with the glossiness only beheld by Riverclan cats who dine on fish. "Yes Bramblestar, it has become quite a dangerous world down there.However," she flicked her ears towards the water. "Look more closely. There is a Thunderclan she-cat expecting kits soon, and one of them possesses something the others do not. He will be the one to save the clans."5

One by one, the other starry cats approached the pool, peered down into its murky depths, and murmured their agreement. The last to do so, Firestar bent and touched his nose to the water, sending a ripple through the darkened pool. When he pulled back up, his green eyes were filled with a new spark of hope. "You are right, Pebblefang," he mewed. "Perhaps the warrior code is not yet dead."6

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In the light of the full moon, a young white she-cat struggled beside her clan's medicine cat. A few hours later, she gave birth to three kits, one with a star-shaped blaze on his chest. As he lay beneath the stars, cuddled close to his exhausted mother, he was utterly unaware of his impending destiny.

If this is good please say so and I will write the first chapter!

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  • Dusksky29
    June 8
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    nice

    it was good. a little sad though that Firestar and Brambleclaw/ Bramblestar are dead


  • Firestar-
    October 27, 2008
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    Continue!


  • Flamingpelt
    April 26, 2008
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    It is VERY good.

    This is AMAZING!!! WRite the first chapter!!!

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • J.R. Coleman
    April 23, 2008
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    me too! OMG! it was incredible!! I LOVED IT. you sooooooo have to write the first chapter!


  • Clovertail
    April 20, 2008

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    ooooooh... that was really really good!!! I would put it in past tense, though, because to me it would make more sense that way. I want you to write the first chapter!!!!!

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