In The Eye Of The Beholder

Flowers and butterflies I do not see1

You do not seem to glow in the sun’s light2

With a blush you seem no cuter to me3

I seem to have a real ignorant plight4

Beauty is false, of course you have compare5

The sunset has no big appeal to me6

You have no such thing as silky blonde hair7

In fact, a color of dull brown has thee8

Nothing has the beauty that you describe9

There is no amazing wonder out there10

No more than usual story by scribe11

No heir better than the opposite heir12

Beauty is a work of fiction, to me13

Try and convince me, but there is no glee.

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We were assigned to make a sonnet in creative writing class, so here it is. I decided to post it here since I haven't posted anything in a while. I hope you enjoyed it.

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  • IntrepidFantasy Greeters member
    April 19, 2008

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    Wow!! That is written in such a beautiful way and those words are just... Wow. I am truly in awe of how well this piece is written. I hope that you got an A+ for this because it is wonderful. Oh creative writing class, I always loved that class best when I was in school
    ~Joann


  • Rose B Gray
    April 17, 2008

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    It could just be me reading it funny but the flow seems just a tiny bit off. Other than that I enjoyed it. It reminded me of a poem I read... I think it was by Shakespeare. It's about the person describing the flaws of their lovers and still loving them anyway. I hope you post more!


    • Seria
      April 18, 2008
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      That poem is what inspired me. This poem is different from many others- it is a Shakespearean sonnet, and it HAS to be ten syllables per line. Well, at least that's what our teacher told us WE had to do for it, so yeah, my flow kind of went off. XD Thanks for commenting! I'll try to post my stuff more often!