the day that i died

there was a count down1

we had a pact2

nither of us wanted to die alone3

or even wait to grow old together4

so we had sex that night5

i mean if it is your last day on earth6

why not do what you want7

no one is going to find out8

plus who wants to die a virgin either9

when the time came10

i kissed you one last time11

and you stroked my hair12

saying that you were going to miss 13

the soft sweet sent14

for those few minuets15

until we see each other again in hell16

we said our goodbyes17

just in case18

and he had the knife to my throat19

and i had the gun to his head20

we agree to count to three21

1...22

2...23

bang24

i guess i forgot how to count25

9 months later i was stuck with the proof26

how was i going to tell her that i killed her father27

because we were going to kill each other28

so instead i put her up for adoption29

just to save her30

and went home31

look at the picture32

that i had of the two of us33

why did he do this to me34

why did he let me go through with it35

why couldn't i count! 36

so instead of wondering any longer37

i went into my room38

locked the door39

wrote a note40

not like anyone will ever come to find it41

or care once they do42

i turned off all the lights43

shut all the windows44

and made myself an artificial night45

that night i died46

'wasn't that a good story hun?'47

"yeah i always wanted to know why you died'48

'well now you know'49

'i'm sorry'50

'who cares anymore! come on, i heard that there is a huge party going on on level 2 of hell. wanna go?'51

'sure why not?!"52

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  • the shorty
    April 22, 2008

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    i liked this, but i thought the "conversation" or whatever that is at the end kinda killed the mood.


    • lexiconsthedevil
      April 22, 2008
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      i know. but i intended it to. i wanted to add sort of a funny thing at the end about how she told him why it took her so long to meet him in hell. but neither of them cared cause they were together and they went off to a party!
      kinda weird i know but ahahahahahah