Bleak, Dreary, Rainy night1
A few more drinks2
One more fight3
Screaming tires4
Spinning head5
Flashing lights6
One more dead
A contest entry
- Give Me Your Best Poetry! by HopelesslyInLove.
200 points, ended April 18, 2008, 15 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
HOw;d you like it
Comments
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Wow!!! Powerful stuff...
Less is more...
Love that you can say so much in so few words...
Great rhyme, rhythm & flow...
A great piece you have here...
Well penned, well versed, well done!!!
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Wow, this was extremely short, but it enhanced a lot of different, sudden emotions. It's like all the emotions hit you in the face at once, it was amazing! Best of luck and thanks for entering my contest!
*KAT* -
WOW! Short but powerful! I think the shortness of this poem reall helps to get across the message of how quickly this sort of thing can happen if people are stupid enough to drink and drive. It also had a dispassionat sort of feel to it, very emotionless which actually made it quite chilling to read. Well done hun, I really loved this poem. Good luck with the contest.
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