Death, they say
will take everyone away...1
Death isn’t kind ,
death isn’t fair.
Death doesn’t think of you,
death doesn’t care.2
Although...3
Death shall not remove your laugh which still rings in my ears
Death shall not erase your face with your smiles and your tears4
Death shall not take all those years5
Death shall not cut off those endless walks
Death shall not wipe out those honest talks6
I wish i could just turn back time ,
back to the memories we shared together
just to hear your voice one last time
to have one last hug that brings that warm feeling inside ...7
well,
who am i fooling
death hasn't taken everything from me
since it has taken you...
Author notes
Nobdy knows how death is like and nobody can come back and tell you, it only brings pain to those who you love and those who love you...
--
"Happy Days"
A contest entry
- Give Me Your Best Poetry! by HopelesslyInLove.
200 points, ended April 18, 2008, 15 entries
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..dont you agree?
Comments
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yes i do! and this was totally amazing!! thank you for entering!
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I totally agree
This poem is very well done,
and interesting. You kept
me curious to the very end
Great job!!!
Thanks for entering and good luck!!!
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*tear* 1000
hmmm. wow. as (first! official thnx for entering ) a person who has lost many loved ones, i really connected to your poem. It kinda made me realize of few things i hadn't thought about it a while. One anniversary is coming and one just past. I think the worst thing about death is the fear the ones ;left behind feel, ya know. "will i forget their face? How will i remember the laugh?" Silly wonderings but troubling none the less. This was really awesome dude.beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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My heart truely dropped when I read the line 'just to hear your voice one last time
to have one last hug that brings that warm feeling inside ...' pure beauty. Keep writing!
-kiwi -
BEAUTIFUL
This poem made me think about death in a different way. It is sad, but reality. I liked it. keep up the good writtings.
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*cry*
aww, that's really sad.
i loved it
"Death shall not remove your laugh which still rings in my ears"
that was so my favorite line
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Awww... very touching and makes you sit down and think. This was very heart-felt and I like the way you wrote this. Very good job and thanks for entering!
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Luvyas
I SO agree with some of the things in your poem. AMAZING xoxo.^_^
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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great poem...saddening and true...real heart felt
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