Straight to Video Scene 3- PRT 3

External.Outdoors.Afternoon
 
Blake Walks home with Hazel.
Blake goes inside up to his room to relax, thinking about Hazel
Alexis comes home, hears him upstairs and tires to talk.
The phone rings, it is Patty... She wants to see Blake.
 
BLAKE
Is walking up his street with Hazel.
It has been a pretty silent walk as he is still embarrassed about the incident1

So are you sure your parents wont mind you walking home with a completer stranger.2


HAZEL3

Nods.4

Trust me, they wont even realize I have come home to wrapped up in deals at the moment5

BLAKE6

oh I see.7

Turns while walking, and faces Hazel.
Walks backwards.8

So... I am sorry about today.
You know I hear it is a normal thing you know.
People touching...stimulating...and stuff.

HAZEL
9

Smile awkwardly.
Watching him as he walks.10

It's okay I know.
We once had this Massage team come out to the house, mum was looking for personal slaves.
Then she asked to give my dad a demonstration.
Well needless to say she only touched his shoulders before Ping!!!
puts emphasis on the ping11

BLAKE12

Raises his eyebrow.
Looking behind him to check if there is anything in the way.13

Really?
Jesus, bet that didn't go down very well with your Mum.14

HAZEL15

Laughs.
Shaking her head.16

You would think that wouldn't you.
But no actually she hired the woman.
Told her that if she could get my dad up there would be more men willing to pay money for other massages.
As long as they were done in the house.17

BLAKE18

looks strangely at Hazel.
Wonders if she is serious.19

HAZEL20

pole!21

BLAKE22

Stops, turns around and walks normally.23

You have weird parents.24

HAZEL25

nods.
Slugging her bag over her shoulder.
Runs up ahead.
Laughing.26

Doesn't everyone.

BLAKE
27

Hay, wait up.28

slowly runs over to her.
Catches up, a bit out of breath.29

Most people yeah.
People like me.
Not people like you.
Thought rich people had no problems.
I mean aren't you loaded?30

HAZEL

Shakes head.31

You downtown people have no idea.
We are human.
Just because we have a load of cash,and expensive things, does not mean we aren't freaks like the rest of you.
If anything we have more problems.32

BLAKE33

yeah how do you figure that?

HAZEL
34

Well you don't have to worry about the fact that you father could blow up your whole lively hood in one sitting.
Or that your mother is cheating with every man she can find.
You probably never have sat alone in a house full of empty rooms, and felt like you wanted something else.
Something more than the high life.
I would give anything to have a simple life.
Like you.

BLAKE
35

Snorts.
Stopping short of his front gate.36

What makes you think I have a simple life.
I have...37

Stops short, wondering whether he can tell another person.38

HAZEL

Raises eyebrows.
Looking towards Blake's house.39

You have?

BLAKE
40

A dog with Three legs.
Anyway this is my house, so I better get going.41

Opens gate, closing it quickly behind him.42

HAZEL43

Nods.
Knowing it was more than that.
Leans against the gate.44

Right, a Three legged dog.
How did he loose his leg.45

BLAKE

Thinks quickly
Breathing nervously.46

He got hit by a car.
The wheel ran over his leg.
It was broken, and mum decided it be best to just amputate it
He was lucky to survive.47

Looks at Hazel
wheezing.
Hoping she will buy his story.48

HAZEL

Cool.
You will have to introduce me sometime.

BLAKE
49

Nods50

Yeah definitely.
Anyway...

HAZEL
51

Oh right, yes.
Well I will see you at school tomorrow.
Turns and starts walking.

BLAKE
52

Scratches his arm
Nervously pondering a question.
Takes the courage to ask.53

Hay Hazel.54

HAZEL55

Turns around.
Walking backwards.56

Yes Blake?57

BLAKE58

Gulps.59

You wanna maybe walk to school with me tomorrow.
I mean you don't have to.
I mean if your dad gives you a lift or your mum or your slaves.
Ha ha Why would you want to walk with me.
I mean...60


HAZEL61

cuts in.
Smiles62

I would love to.
8 o'clock okay with you?63

BLAKE64

nods.
Walking slowly towards his house.

HAZEL
65

Alright then.
See you tomorrow.

BLAKE
66

Yes, tomorrow.67

Watches her run down the street.
Till she disappears around a corner.68

The sun will come out Tomorrow
Sings softly as he unlocks the door.69

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BLAKE70

upstairs in his bedroom.
Music is blaring.
Thinking about Hazel.71

ALEXIS72

walks through the front door.
Hangs up her coat and looks around the house.
Looks towards the staircase.73

Strange.

Starts to walk up the stairs when the telephone ring,
runs towards the telephone

Hallo Alexis speaking.74

PATTY75

Alex is that you?76

ALEXIS77

Patty?
What do you want?78

PATTY79

I want to see my son.

Author notes

Scene three PRT 3

Here it is..
Thanks missi & his mercy for being such great fans, I made sure it was out today just so you could read it guys.

Feedback welcome

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  • Missi
    April 15, 2008

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    this is wicked! I cant believe you cut it like that
    I really want to read more about hazel and blake, the ending was really good it made want more more and more lol, I really want to read more......
    Come on Blair give us more

    Thanks for the mention in the notes, Im glad to be a NO.1 Fan lol, hope you continue

    -Missi


  • RxxSpiritWolfxxJ
    April 14, 2008

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    Hey, this was quite good.
    I concur on hismercy's point about the action bits. Maybe italicse them or something?
    Apart from that - I like it.


  • Hismercy
    April 14, 2008

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    The story itself Prodigious was great, yet lets just say where Blake is doing an action like in the beginning.... he is walking backwards...is it possible to make a star signals ** or slants / before showing someones actions?

    (if their is other readers who disagree what I'm asking or know what I'm saying, yet have a different option please share)

    I am not a proof reader or even a specialist, and definetly not a nit picker(someone who hunts for errors), I myself am just a young man who loves to read...and Prodigious, your stories have a great taste in detail (as a reader I enjoy reading as other readers do as well)

    Prodigious you have a great writers heart, dont let anyone push your spirits down when your writing, yet keep strong and use what the readers say (good or bad) to to improve your writings...

    *blushes*

    You are very welcome Blair, I wouldn't be a great fan without a great writer (and that goes for all who post stories/poems as well)

    Your fan

    -Hismercy

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.