"Um...I guess we should start the next section." Ms. Taylor said. "The distance formula!" she tried to sound like her usual self. "Does anyone know the disatnce formula?" she expected an answer from the back of the room. "Right. Of course not..." she mumbled to herself.
Parker sat in the row of desks closest to the door. He watched Ms. Taylor's movements. Something was wrong...different about the way Ms. Taylor was moving about. And Parker knew that reason.
He glanced at his watch. Class was just about over. Ms. Parker began to write an equation on the whiteboard. She was closer to Parker's desk when the bell rang.1
Author notes
You really can't tell much with this segment, it is just a taste.
How do you like the first little segment?
Comments
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If you're trying to tantalise us, you've certainly succeeded.
Something I noticed. Your second-to-last sentance says, "Ms. Parker began to write an equation on the whiteboard."
shouldn't that be Ms. Taylor? Or am I mistaken?
Anyway, it sounds like you've got a really interesting story in your head. All you have to do is write it out.
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It can get better
Now that you took a step of writing on this site, you know what to expect, and as you keep writing faithfully, your mind will expand and you will blossom. Keep writing and see where it leads you !
-Hismercybeginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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