You type in your password1
And you click sign in, 2
Hoping to find someone, 3
To share the sorrows within. 4
You look through the list, 5
And you see me online.6
You don’t even ask, 7
And just presume that I’m fine. 8
You don’t even bother,9
About how my life’s been.10
You just desperately need someone, 11
To solve the problems you’re in.12
I dry my own tears, 13
And put on a smile.14
I let you bleed your heart out, 15
And use my shoulder for a while. 16
You vent about your boy-friend. 17
Your life, your parents, and friends. 18
I keep listening to all your troubles,19
But the list just never ends. 20
Your problems are far worse than mine,21
Or so it seems right now.22
I try to forget everything else, 23
And solve them for you somehow. 24
As much as I can, 25
I help you out.26
You say that you’re thankful,27
Without a doubt. 28
Your problems are done,29
I’m hoping the turn is mine.30
But as soon as I turn to type,31
You say you have to go offline. 32
It hurts this time, 33
Just like all the times before. 34
How I really feel about this,35
You’ll never know for sure.36
I need you sometimes too,37
I hope someday you’ll understand. 38
I hope one day, you’ll see me fall, 39
And be the one to grab my hand. 40
Until then, I’ll wait for you,41
And you’ll soon realize. 42
That I cry sometimes too,43
And the smile is just a disguise. 44
Author notes
I kinda lost my muse in the middle, so the verses just seem a little forced...sorry about that! =D...but it came back after a while...funfun =]
Please tell me what you think
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thats raelly good!!
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You're an amazing author and poet, Aaez. I just read this and realized what I've done. I understand that others need a shoulder sometimes. Thank you, this inspired me.
And for some reason, I've felt extremely sad today. *random sadness* But don't worry, I'll be fine once I figure out why. (I'm weird that way).
Continue writing, you're too good to stop
-Makaely
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Very well done and I can relate to this so easily.
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That was amazing. It came from the heart and I can really relate to it. You wrote it beautifully and it really wasn't that forced. Great job.
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OMG OMG AAEZ DAT IS SOOO COMPLETELY AWESOME.........omg.....i cant believe how much ME it has...........*is speechless wid surprise
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Beautifully written. It didn't seem forced to me, but then I've never been much of a poet no matter how much I enjoy reading it. I love the last line. I think it's something everyone can relate to.
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Oh,oh oh! i love this poem! O.O So deep, and if dis ever happened to you.. It wont happen again.
hehe , you can talk to me, dude!
love this poem so much.. Great write! Woohoo. -
this is really sad... again I LOVE IT!
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Very sad, I'm sorry about what happended to you, and I'de listen, you just have to talk to me, you've listened to me all the time, if you want to talk, mate, I'm here.
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omg kool but sad
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i really like this... you are a great writer i wish most my stuff could be this good
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Beautiful
Really amazing poem. Thats how it is with friends sometimes. You help them with all there problems and when you need there help there not there. Hope your friend reads this and recognized there mistake. Keep writing. Your great at poetry.
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It did flow in the beginning more than the end, in a way that seemed so flawless and beautiful. You can definitely write poetry better than I can, lol. I ALWAYS sound forced. It didn't shine through with this, the force, it appeared to me as honest and pained. I loved it! Great work...
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It amazing...
Your verses are touching. I felt bad because I sometimes do what that girl did. Nice work!!
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Oh my goodness, Aaez.
I absolutely love this.
It's brilliant.
You wrote it nicely, in my opinion. But it was the words themselves that had the power, not the way you used them. The ones you used.
It made me almost cry!
I hope it's not too true. But I know you're such a good person, it could be.
I could tell this was striaght from the heart. And it was really original!
GREAT job.
xoxoxo
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Tay
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I know exactly what you mean. I often find myself assuming that I have no real problems to face in life because everyone else's seem so much worse. I really enjoy helping people, though. Let me know if you ever need anything in this regard--I'm all ears. Very nicely written, as well.
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Awesomenessnessness!
This is smexy and chrispay! -
That was really goood man sounds like something you would find in a book good work
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Oh oh oh! Aaez! *huggs you so tightly you cant breath* You are a good writer. This really must have come from the heart. You can always come to me if you need!!!!!! What a sad sad poem!
*huggs you even tighter that you pop*
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was that a poem, okay it was umm.........49 comments cool
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Amazing
You're a wonderful poet. Wow...was my reaction. "This is something I can relate to." I'm glad someone has the guts to write about it. I keep it bottled up until I have a total melt down...Anyways, well done
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love your emotion. Addicted now
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awwwwwwwww aaez this is soo sad! i can relate to it making it even more depressing!
it's awsome! you are able to capture such emotion!
i really hope it isn't from your true experience coz as i've told you, ill listen
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WOwwaaa.....is this really coming from you Aaez. I am hell impressed, i mean this is really soulful. Aur tum mujhe deep kehtaoi thai. It was very emo, but it's very you so it doesn't matter. Awesonme work. one of my favorites except the 'Idol poem' you wrote - very inspirational stuff here!!
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Luvyas
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Magnificent Work! Bravo!
Although I love you man, this makes me feel uneasy even though its so true and magnificent in every way. I hope you'll talk to me whenever you're down and I'll try to help however I can. ^^ This really is a great piece. I look forward to seeing more and making more comments! *hugs you tightly*
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Completely Wonderful
I may be young to consider myself a true poet but does age really matter? What I'm trying to say is.... coming from another person who enjoys poetry, I very muchly so think that this poem is wonderful.
I liked it a lot.
Thank you.
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Awwww that's sad and so true. I can relate to being treated like that by someone too and it really does hurt. I've dealt with it from someone for quite awhile and it's really became too much among other things *sigh* Great write. Glad that I found this
~Joann
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Just, beautifully expressed.
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Wow!
You expressed the emotions really well and it had some sad but well written words. It was a beautiful poem and it rhymed really well; I don't think it was forced at all, but then again I was concentrating on the message and words not the rhyme; a sign of a good poem.
I really like this!
Good Poem!
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sigh. good. AS ALWAYS. i will top u somehow. thats it man. im gonna have a poem on here tommorow. AND IT WILL KICK UR POEMS ASS!!!! hahahhahahah im just that determined
hahahahha u prob will always win aaez. but nope ANTAYA SHALL BEAT AAEZ FOR ONCE!! love yah hahhaha <3
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WOW, this is so good, and sad, this is an awesome poem and is really well written, I like your description used and think that this is really one of the best poems I have read!
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aww...that's sad but very true.
i liked it!
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wow that was a great poem you expressed emotions really well
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you know you can always come to me brother,thats what twins are for
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I feel the same ways meh paki bro :/
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Wow
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wow. i really like it and i know the feelings in it. but people care more then you think in this poem. well it was very well written and i really liked it. this was a side that i didnt expect from you. great work Aaez. awesome would i say
keep up this amazing work
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Awhhh, that's so sad and sweet too =/
We can all relate; I've had this done to me all the time, and I'm sure I've done it to people all the time. It's a really good message. Makes us think.
I want more poetry from you now =D
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Wow!
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I like it, Aaez. Heart felt and deep. And I know the feeling, for I am normally the 'therapist' but never the 'patient.' Listen to everyone else's problems but never able to talk of your own, until you're absolutely bursting and it comes out in a torrent. *huggles* Great job, Aaez.
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Awhs....
This is reallllllly good! I love it and it makes me sad...
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AWWWWWW Aaezness
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This poem is so emotional and I can relate to this 110%.
I've felt like this before too, but I want you to know that as your cousin I will try my best to be there for you whenever you need me, and if you ever need me to rant, complain, or just say a joke to I promise to be there. This was very well written and you can feel the emotion so well throughout the whole poem.
Clearly you know how to write a poem, and dang you have real talent rhyming, because I can't even rhyme shoe XD anyhoo!
I love it Aaez and it is a lovely way to express yourself.
Luffles your cousin
Mira
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Wow...This makes me feel depressed for some reason. Is this poem supposed to do that? Besides that...its really awesome! Continue striving...idk where that came from. Lol!
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Hey Aaez. you know i'm always here. even if i have to leave, send me an offline message and i promise i'll be here as soon as i can be. Thank you for everything you've done. as i've said, i'm always here.
Icy
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OMG GREAT POEM AAEZ! Iloved it...it was so true to hte heart. And the rhyming when perfectly, You are good at poetry Keep up the good poems!!!!
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Aaez, I just wanted to say that you can tell me anything...
Nice poem. The message was very clear. So..good job.
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this is really good. i like how you rhymed it and everything. i think that the flow was pretty goot too. the fact that i can really relate to this probably made me like this even more. and it is good to write things that readers can relate too. great job!
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I see - you ryhmed the sort of "copy" verses (ex. You, Too... and so on...). I liked the rhym scheme though. It's alright for it to be forced sometimes (Muses tend to be very sleepy when you've finished their energy off) I hope to read more of your stuff!
~Meli♥
P/s: I feel like you too (sometimes). I offer you my hand for when you fall though (even though I barely know you). Continue to write - you have tallent! :]
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I like this.
I'm not really a great judge of poetry, but I like this and I think that is what matters most. It is hard to write rhyme without it seeming some forced. On some occasions it seems to fall into place, but most of the time rhyme takes some work.
People rarely ask me how I am unless I ask them first. I guess that's just the way of things. Most of the time I'm doing pretty well and am relatively happy.
I like helping others. That generally makes me feel good.
Andy
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Oh wow...that was brilliant. You know..if you ever need to talk let me know. I dont want you to feel that way lol. Great write, it was so true and the words flowed perfectly. It really is a great piece.
keep up the good work.
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i very like it!!!!!!!!!!
your poem is so sad, true and full of emotions.
very well writen, keep writing!
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...............sweet.......
i liked it...i can relate i feel the same way sometimes......very good keep it up
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Excellently written!
Sorry for the late comment.
I loved this. The emotions were portrayed vividly, and the wording simple yet astoundingly lyrical. Definitely something we can all relate to.
A joy to read, i wouldn't change a thing hun
Well done.
Yrs.
Azaradelle.
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Very relateable. A lot of people are like now a days, give but are never given back. I hope everything goes well. If you need to talk, I'm always on here. Incredible write though, I love this poem. You explained everything really well.
Absolutely wonderful!
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Wow. That was really good... Ryming scheme, meter, flow... Everything was great. And I hope I never did that to you. I feel bad now... XD
Well, if I ever did, you can just talk to me about whatever you want to. And I'll be sure to ask "How are you?" on a more personal level.
Always <333
Lily
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A long poem, nice. I like long poems. It's very well done, too. It's a familiar tune, though I suppose you get a lot of comments like that. At any rate, you did well. Good job, Az.
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wow...wow..Sounds like something that I go through most of the time....you really put it into a beautiful piece of poem here Aaez...we're on da same boat..>_< I like this poem a lot and it really described how ...well we feel soemtimes...its really wonderful....thanks for writing this Aaez and putting it into words...its just so beautiful
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God i know how this feels very badly.. I really loved this poem it was enroched with feelings that some of us would have experianced while liking someone on the net, you know
very well written with honesty
keep writing
Love Blair
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This is amazing, cuz!! I ..just can't say how much amazing!
Brilliantly worded, and the rhyming's amazing. And its so poignant, it made me cry -- well, no, lol, but it was a deeply heartfelt poem!
I think everyone can relate to it, one way or the other.
Good work. I will see your other stuff, soon.
Be Well,
Randy
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Poor chimpy... There are times when such things happen. It's hard not to feel down. I can't say that I've been through this. However, I've been through something like it. I know what it feels like...
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awh that so sad..and true
good job keep up the good work
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We all been on both sides.
What a powerful, yet very truthful, up front story/poem !
You did a great job on presenting, writing and even making the lines rymne to make that beat for the reader to go along with.
Im very impressed. thank you.
-Hismercy
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Ouch...way too ESP here, nephew. Brilliantly worded and direct. Your happy facade is revealed, lol. As is mine.
Gamer
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Very good man!
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Awww....I know exactly how you feel!Really I do. Aaez, if you want to talk, you can come to me. I'm always here ^^
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wow...nice...i kinda feel that way too sometimes....no, literally ^_^
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