She changed, and slipped her clothes into the pile next to the door. Her hair was wrapped in a loose bun, a beautiful red and black that covered her metalic blue eyes. Bella climbed to her bed, and pulled the blankets up around her shoulders, waiting for him to come. She heard his steps into the room and she quickly wipped any traces of her tears away. He crawled in behind her and started to kiss her neck. "Please Christopher, not tonight," she said smiling half way daring him to try more.1
"Oh come on Bella, I'm just playing around with you," he said as he turned her on her back and started to kiss her cheek.2
She slowely began to play back with him, just curling her hands into his sandy brown hair and pulling his face to hers. "A tad aggressive tonight I see," he said giggling.3
He started to pull her hair back, to see her eyes, and she in response turned her head away, and grabbed his arms. He gave her a questioning look, and then leaned down for another kiss, she turned away from him, and turned on her side, just to end up cuddling with her. "I told you Chris, not tonight."4
"Ok, this I guess will have to do," he said as he pulled her body closer to his, leaving his arm right near her mouth. 5
She released her fangs just enough so she could puncture his skin, "BELLA!! What was that for?" he asked as he started to pull his out and kiss her neck again, "You know I can't stand when you do that."6
"Just having fun," she said with a sarcastic smile, and drifted off to sleep for the day.7
Author notes
ok, my first anything about vampires, and I cant say I'm hating the romance part, comments needed please!
What did you think? Please comment!
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OMG, YES!! I LOVE that book, I think you would enjoy the books by Kelley Armstrong, she only has four, and two are about werewolves and the other two are about witches, very awesome though. \m/
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Amazing
lol Vampire romance I love it I love to read about vampires have you ever read the book silver kiss it rocks I think you would love it I am a book worm hee.... -
It knocked my socks off! I didn't expect her to whip the fangs out. It was like...*meep!* VAMPIRIC VIXEN ON THE LOOSE! Can't wait to read more. 'tis awesome.
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Vampires I love vampires. Got story off to a killer start. Keep up the work.
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very well written. the vampire part was a shocker. comepletly unexpected. wow. great job. -
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i liked it, it was very unpredictable. plus i really liked the ending it was....i dunno just interesting.
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nice well done!
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Well, this was interesting enough that it kept me reading, but the ending was a lil sloppy. Like where you put "started to pull his out and kiss her" you neglect to say what lol. The end just seems like it is missing something, but other than that I liked it. You use enough description to hold the reader's attention, and thats what counts most in something like this. Keep at it
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Vampiric marriage counsellors… there will soon be little point in being undead at all! Lol.
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VAMPIRES .. *hiss* YESSSSS
You did perfect on the romance part.
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I didnt have any idea where it was going till the end. So that is a good thing if you intended it to be that way or I am just stupid if I missed it I guess. But a good start to a story.
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A good start
I'm curious to see where you're going with this. I noticed that you have two chapters to this posted so far, so I'll be off to read the next one now. No suggestions for change, but if I see anything I'll let you know 
I think I'm going to like Bella, but of course I could be biased.
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i really liked this, i can't wait to read the next chapter, the ending was unexpected, but still i really like this, great write, keep it up,
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I'm hoping to continue with it, maybe write another chapter, any advice? (
glad to see you like the story your in)
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Oh I like this. The description was very good, as was the ending.
xxBellaxx (See, I'm in the story!!)
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