"Isn't it ironic?
We adore those who ignore us,
Ignore those who adore us,
Love those who hurt us,
And hurt those who love us."1
For me, now is just one of those times. One of the times you feel like you know you're a really screwed up person, and you think you have the evidence to prove it. I know there's something wrong with me, or maybe many things. Many, many things.2
It doesn't seem like I need a shrink though. I just need a friend, and the great news is I already have one in mind. If she's there I know she'll listen to what I have to say. But I'm scared to confront her, to ask for what I need. Something I shouldn't want. 3
She knows (I think) and she won't give it to me because she's smart enough to know that it's really something I shouldn't be asking for. I'm sorry...I just can't help it.4
Apples, anyone?
Author notes
No matter how duranged I try to make them...why do my stories always end up romance??! *sighs dramatically*
I wanted to try to do something from some really screwed up person's point of view, someone who really hates themselves or something. Emo kid. Whatever. You can make up the story ^-^
I apoligize for grammar mistakes. There's probably a lot and I'd love a proofread. Thanks in advance!
Constructive Criticism Appreciated
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APPLES???
Your gonna have to explain that to me later.... maybe i'll read it again...(ten seconds later).. nope, still clueless. And i have a feeling that the "friend that you were going to ask" wasn't me? Was it? Leigh? Molly? Just tell me, even if you don't tell me what you were going to tell the person. mkay??
Overall, great job on the piece. I really like how it looks like it has some sort of inner meaning...that no ones supposed to know....I love it!
and extra hug!!!!
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Lol look at the title, it's a biblical reference. The forbidden apples? On the tree? You know
And you were perfectly on throughout your comment
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OKAY... i get it...the apples....OH. So what was that about being perfectly on? Huh!? I'm out of it, you gonna hae to explain it to me. (sigh)
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Apples?
OH! I get it! Well that was pretty good! Took me a minute to understand it, but the title conveyed the meaning!
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This is such a good story Heart!! I'm sorry I can't get over that name But I love your first lines, those are amazingly true! The rest of your story is awesome too, good job!
*KT*
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even if it's not what you meant it to be, it was still wonderful. I ♥ this piece. It was very deep and heart felt. The last line is weird, but I like it at the same time, I don't know why.
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