You have arrived in the year 7000 and boy` are you all in for a culture shock ! ... we live in a time where people live in fear and the days of a friendly greeting are far in the past` life is one long fight against evil in a dull boring world. Music is no longer a simple pleasure and if you like the wrong music` your whole family can be jailed or even killed ! depending on how kind the local judge is feeling that day, everyone wears the same clothes and nothing is allowed to say " this is me " anymore ? ... people are lead through life like lambs to the slaughter .... and they never stand up and fight anymore.1
As I became a time lord when it was trendy` I have seen many crazy cultures and lived through loads of odd moments in time .... but this place is going beyond a joke ! ... how can anyone live life to the full without a little bit of Heavy Metal to kill the boredom ?. I traveled this way by chance while I was looking for an old friend who I would boogie with at local gigs` he would freak out if he saw this place now ..... for it was only 200 years ago that we were strolling along Phil Lynott Avenue and visiting the Wall of the Forgotten Drummer.2
TO BE CONTINUED ....3
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I TOLD YOU ALL I HAD OTHER THINGS TO DO ?
WELL HERE IS THE FIRST OF THEM.
IDEA`S ?
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thankz for your kind comments
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this was written some time ago and I did forget to write more of it ...lol. -
This is really cool! I like it I really want to read more of this when you come up with it, ya know? very interesting........... i cannot think of anything off the top of my head........zo, no ideas.............
best wishes and keep in touch...........
TES -
thank you for your kind words , I think Rous was a little unhappy with my reply
lol ... but I tell folks how I feel` if they don`t like it ... hard luck.
This is just a little project I am working on` who knows if I shall ever finish it. -
Go on with it Carl. It makes me want to know what is going to happen next. Very nice job. I like the fact that it is the year 7000. Man, that's a long time off. Keep it up. Love always,
Kristen -
lol ... no offence was taken .... I like to jest with people who know their stuff ... ha ha, sorry` I can be a royal pain in the ass at times . every comment is very welcome and your comments made a very refreshing change ... feel free to rip my poetry apart any time you wish ! ... I love Constructive feedback and your points of view were taken on board by yours truly .
happy scribbly
Carl -
I tell you what, that is just fine with me. I appologize for the crits. I thought that was what this was all about. I have found many "poets" here that do not seem to want the help, so when I find them, I keep track of them and avoid their poems in the future. Sorry to have offended you. I will not let it happen again. Thank you for your reply, though.
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the idea came to mind while I watching some youths slagging off Status Quo in HMV !, they seemed like total clowns to me ? but they gave me an idea of what the future may hold for us all.
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punctuation ? .... is that something to do with boxing !
I never understood English classes and I am English ? ... what more can I say on the subject.
you sound like you need traffic lights to cross a road ! .. lol
... one has to just go with the flow , I often get told off for using cap`s and stuff in the wrong places ?.
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You have me intrigued. Looking forward to the continuation. Do you really think the world will become like that? I think it's possible with all the political correctness and the fear of saying the wrong thing all the time. Hmmm, got me thinking.
~Lyrical
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Interesting. Dark and hopeless. My kind of story. Anyway, it does need a lot of editing for punctuation. I found it hard to read with out capital letters at the beginning of the sentences. This could be a really fine piece. Thank you for sharing.
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