A thought wanders aimlessly in my mind,
There’s a significant ‘something’ that I wish to find.
As I ponder on what this thing could be,
I go to my heart, and there I plead.1
“What will it take to make you whole?
To bring us together and complete my soul?”
“This is the only thing that I ask of you,
Give me your answer, and that I’ll pursue.”2
When I have finished, I stand and wait,
In an eager and hopeful translucent state.
Then there comes the voice in my ear,
Saying, “This is all you’ve hoped to hear.”3
“Don’t worry; I have the key to your lock,
It just so happens to be the only in stock.”
“The answer to your problem lies within your heart,
It’s something you’ve wanted from the very start.”4
Hearing this, I jump in glee,
My thoughts are unclouded, now I see!
The thing I seek is none other than love,
A girl sent from the heavens above.5
A thought wanders joyfully in my mind,
There’s a significant ‘someone’ that I wish to find.
As I ponder as to where this person could be,
I know that when I find her, I’ll be complete.6
Author notes
Something I wrote a while back.
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Sweet and straightforward
You have a number of depressing efforts, but this one is hopeful, sweet and inspirational. It shows us a piece of who you are. If I'm not off in my character judgment, you're a hopeless romantic (I'm one myself).
Some of the rhymes are a bit cliche (heart, start; whole, soul), but it's really hard to pin down love while being original because it is probably the most popular topic in poems, lyrics and stories.
Great work.
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This was sweet and different from the poems I have been reading all night =] something about the way it tells a story in the lined of the poetry.. that inspires me and how it ends with so much hope that the womaan will complete you... It is inspirational.
congrats on the GOLD....
Temaria - Blair
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This was very interesting and it was well written
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Hmmm... this was very creative!! I loved the way you had dialouge in there, i've never seen that in a poem before!! But, that's good, I love originality!
Best of luck and thanks for entering!!
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Awww this was so pretty and I love the words that you used in it. I could feel your incredible emotions pouring out in each word. Amazing poem you have written!
~Joann
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A conversation with the heart...
...an interesting take on queries of love and such...leaving as many questions as before.
Something unusual in what I have read of yours, lin37 '“aThis',', most likely it did not format correctly, but it mars a lovely piece...
and, ahhh...the search for love, the fodder of poets from time immemorial...good luck...
amicus...
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Ohh.. this was pretty!! Loved the wording and story woven in, it was an awesome poem. Lovely and young, flirty and serene.
A perfect reflection of poetry!
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Wow! You did a great job of telling the story in this piece and I loved the way you included the dialog. Well done!!
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