Tainted Love

OPENING: IT IS RAINING OUTSIDE,BEEBE IS SITTING ON HER COUCH IN THE LIVING ROOM, READING A MAGAZINE WHEN ALL OF A SUDDEN THERE IS A KNOCK ON THE FRONT DOOR.1

BEEBE:2

Who is it?3

COLE:4

Me baby, I forgot my key.5

BEE WALKS OVER AND OPENS THE DOOR,LOOKING AS THOUGH SHE SUSPECTS ANOTHER.6

BEEBE:7

Here you go, I saw them after you left.8

COLE LOOKING AT HIS WIFE, FEELING AS THOUGH SOMETHING IS WRONG.9

COLE:10

Hey, what's wrong? You seem a little distant. Did I do something?11

BEEBE:12

No.13

BEEBE IS TRYING TO HOLD BACK THE TEARS.COLE WALKS OVER TO HER, PUTS HIS ARMS AROUND HER, THEN HE LOOKS STRAIGHT INTO HER EYES.14

COLE: Bee please tell me what's bothering you.15

THE BOTH OF THEM WALKS OVER TO COUCH AND SITS DOWN.COLE PLACES HER HANDS IN HIS.THE KIDS COME RUNNING DOWN STAIRS, GETTING READY TO EAT THEIR BREAKFAST, SO THEY CAN GET THE SCHOOL BUS.16

KIDS:17

Daddy you not gone yet?18

COLE:19

I forgot my keys,kids go and eat your breakfast, your mother and I are discussing something.20

THE KIDS WALKS TO THE KITCHEN, AND START FIXING SOMETHING TO EAT.21

BEEBE:22

I'm alright, dear.23

FOR SOME REASON COLE DOESN'T BELIEVE HER, HE KNOWS HIS WIFE.24

BEEBE:25

Look, you better get going, you don't want to be late.Kids say go bye to your father.26

KIDS:27

Bye, daddy.28

COLE WALKS TOWARDS THE DOOR.29

COLE:30

We will finish this when I get home.31

COLE GETS INTO HIS RED SILVER-RALDO TRUCK, AND DRIVES OFF, GETS TO THE FIFTH HOUSE,PUTS THE TRUCK INTO REVERSE, AND FOR A SPLIT SECOND JUST STARES AT THEIR FRONT DOOR.32

BACK INSIDE THE HOUSE:33

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I am entering this into a 10 minute play contest, and I would like to know if this flows right, and if it keeps you interested and wanting to know more.

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  • scriptor
    May 18
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    its good but you need to add more

  • CedricDempNQ2
    April 24

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    Interesting introduction

    Sets the scene for what may be promising to be some significant and intriguing event. Think this could be worth continuing.

  • It flows, but add more