They’d shot hell out of the morning; noon was slipping by into afternoon when Brad Benson joined Joe Farley in his office for a war council. Neither had bothered with lunch.1
“Looks like it’s our baby,” Benson collapsed in a chair. “Can you believe this frigging shit? They want us to take on ten homicide investigations and keep it quiet.” Benson knocked his head against the back of his chair several times. “We’re being dumped on. The Brass is covering their asses and exposing ours.”2
The outburst made Farley grin. “Don’t overdose yet Brad. Remember, like Cabonetti says, taken individually there was nothing suspicious about these suicides. It’s only when you lump them together in short time frame that the situation becomes questionable.”3
“Yeah, right,” Benson removed a pack of Kools from his shirt pocket, then apparently thought better of it and replaced them. “Damn, they expect us to only use only the guys already assigned to us. That doesn’t tick you off?”4
Farley rotated his head slightly on shoulders that had been carrying someone else's weight for years and awarded his companion with a knowing smile. “Have your cigarette Brad.” He pulled open a draw and handed a smokeless ashtray to him. Then he placed the files he’d toted back from Taylor’s office on his desk and sat down. “The grunge work on each case is done. We are not going to back track on what others have already completed. We can concentrate on the files and let the computer search for similarities or connections. We’ll use office help to feed the info into the program. In the mean time we can keep investigating Michelle’s case. And keep our eyes opened for any new case.”5
Benson sat up straight. “He’s not done is he?”6
Farley shrugged his shoulders. “You don’t really believe no matter how great we are, there will be a sudden, neat conclusion. The killer nabbed and executed. We may have to settle for a compromise—maybe just drive him out of New York.”7
“I could live with that.”8
“I don’t think I can,” Farley admitted. “This bastard has mocked the best police force in the world for months. I want his ass.”9
There was a sharp rap at the door.10
Hayes came through. A satisfied grin wide on his face, he doffed his hat and announced, “We got Hal Goodwin in interrogation.”11
For the first time since the sun rose that morning, Farley’s day looked bright. “Already. Give us a quick rundown?”12
“Well Sarge it was easier than we thought it would be. We found the deli where Michelle regularly ate lunch. The guys there not only recognized her but Hal too. Seems that’s where they met and the fellows didn’t much like the relationship. They thought Michelle was sweet a kid and they’d figured Hal a streetwise phony. Guess they even tried to tell her—but…” He shook his head, “you know how that goes. Lucky us, they knew right where the guy worked.”13
“And I gather he was there?”14
“Since nine this morning; just waiting to be plucked.”15
“Great job.” He shook Hayes’s hand and turned to Benson. “Come on Brad,” Farley said. “Time we started earning our pay.”16
They paused in the conference room and watched the man on the other side of the two-way mirror. Hamlin had left him sitting alone, promising to bring him a coke. The gray metal furnishings were cold and uncomfortable even in summer. Goodwin squirmed in the chair—lifting himself now and then by placing his palms on the edge of the seat on either side of his butt.17
“I could kick myself in the ass for this,” Benson snapped, “I never even looked for this guy.”18
“Hey. You can thank Neil Harris,” Farley admitted. “If it wasn’t for the Doc, I wouldn’t have been drawn into this. God knows how many more bodies we’d have racked up before anyone caught on.”19
In a natural reaction of a Baseball fan, Benson groaned and said, “Son of a bitch is close to a Derrick Jeter look a like, no wonder Michelle went gaga over the guy. You think it’s him?”20
“I never take guesses, let’s brace him?” Farley turned the handle.21
“Hal Goodwin?" asked Benson as they moved into the narrow windowless room.22
"Yes," the nervous young man answered. “Do I need a lawyer?”23
“Not unless you have something to hide?” Farley sat across from him. “This is only an interview.”24
Benson said, "We're Detectives Benson and Farley. We just have some questions regarding Michelle Baine." He leaned on the table at the side of Goodwin.25
"Yes, that’s what the other officers said earlier. Is there something wrong with Michelle?"26
Ignoring his question, Benson asked, "How long have you known Ms. Baine?"27
"About six months," answered Goodwin. "What’s happened?"28
Again ignoring his question, Benson inquired, "When did you last see her?"29
"About two weeks ago. Is she okay?" He seemed genuinely concerned.30
Farley took that moment to say bluntly, "She's dead."31
The detectives both watched Hal's face closely as he paled and seemed shaken. "Dead? How?"32
"Let's just say her death is still under investigation," said Benson. "Can you think of anyone who might want to harm her?"33
"No! Nobody would want to hurt Michelle. She hardly knew anyone in New York. Just the people at work. Michelle’s dead!" He rubbed at his temple and forehead. “Dead?”34
"How long did you live with her?" asked Farley.35
"A couple of months. Actually not a full two."36
"Why'd you move out?"37
"Things were going too fast. I wasn’t into the marriage bit—and that’s all she could talk about."38
"Did you part on amicable terms?" Farley continued.39
"Well, she was kind of upset, but it seemed the right thing to do. It wasn’t fair to her to string her along. Dead?" That last word was whispered. “Can I have a drink?”40
“Sure,” Benson stepped to door and was awarded with the coke Hamlin had been waiting to deliver. 41
“Thanks.” Goodwin took a long swing then set the can down and said, “You have to understand. I like Michelle a lot. But she has these picky ways—that could drive yah bonkers.”42
“You fought?”43
“Not like that. Christ you couldn’t have a fair yelling match. Michelle never yelled—she’d cry. She’d make you feel like shit over the dumbest things. You dropped a dirty sock—God would strike you dead. You left a glass on a table—the world was coming to an end… I can’t believe she’s dead.”44
“She kept things neat?” Benson said.45
“Not just neat. She was obsessed.”46
Farley asked, "She had a set of cups and a cup holder on the counter?"47
"Yeah, so?" 48
"Did it matter to her whether the cups were in the holder or in the cupboard?" asked Farley.49
"That's an odd question," replied Hal. "She always kept them in the cup holder. She’d flip if I put one in the cupboard."50
"And the coo coo clock. Did it work?"51
Hal grinned at a memory. "I could've strangled that bird, that bird would come out and chirp the wrong count every time. Something was screwy with the dial—I tried but it couldn’t be fixed."52
"There was a bird then?" questioned Farley.53
"Of course, a cheap, plastic, yellow bird. Michelle loved the silly thing."54
"How often did you fight?" asked Benson suddenly.55
Hal blushed and said, "She'd get after me about smoking or being sloppy, but we really never actually fought. In fact I lied to her when I left. I told her I was coming back in a few weeks."56
“I think she knew. She put the few things you left behind in storage cartons,” Farley said. “That’s how we traced you.”57
"You’re making me nervous, Was Michelle killed or something? Am I a suspect?" 58
"Let's just say that you’re a person of interest, at this time," Benson concluded.59
“Then I can leave?”60
"Of course. Thank you for your help, but don't leave town without contacting us," said Farley.61
Goodwin couldn’t vacate the station fast enough. He even refused a lift back to work. “I’ll take the subway,” he said.62
They watched him hurry away, then Benson pointed to the wall clock where the small hand was nearing three. “My stomach’s meeting my spine.”63
“Guess we deserve some lunch,” Farley agreed. “I’ll drive. What do you think of Goodwin?”64
“First impression? He didn’t hurt the girl. But then maybe he’s just too smooth and clever.”
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Amazing imagination
I'm here at the moment still reading through the chapters i do intend to leave comments on each but so engrossed at the moment just need to read -
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Hi Tibsy!
Just drop a comment when you feel like it. If you feel there's a problem we should address, please mention those.
We're very pleased to have you reading us.
How are you this day?
Andy
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Great
A new person of interst, don't think he did it. The nw people are adding interest to the story even the differences with the
police men are interesting, the usually hate each other anyway.

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Hi!
Geri is amazing with character development. She can make it seem like they're in the same room with you.
I'm glad that you're enjoying our tale. I think we've got a really good story here. I hope it finds a publisher.
Andy
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Good work with the interview although it could have been written edgier,of course he isn't a suspect but the cops need answers. They could have been a little harder,after all the girl is dead. Hal got off too easy. They should have shown him the girlsfriend's photo after her death then the phtoos of the other girls...just to not his reaction even if all the girls seemingly committed suicide some of them if not all were molested and even if Dale? used a condomn you aren't taking Locard's Theory and putting it into play. Still it reads well enough for me to want to continue with the next chapter.


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Hmm?
What's Locard's Theory?
Our killer has sexual thoughts related to the murders, but he's not molesting the young women, just killing them.
Andy
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We've seen an awful lot of Joe lately!

Ah, the infamous Hal. Somehow I expected something more of a slob from him. Maybe a prominant beergut and greasy hair, maybe a bit of low-country twang and disgusting grammar, I don't know. He sounded almost respectable in his interview.
I can't help but feel a little bad for the police - they seem to be chasing their tails and they don't even know it.
Now...I wonder when we'll see this serial killer again...
Notes:
* Para 4: "together in short time frame" - in A short time frame.
* Para 5: You use the word "only" twice.
* Wow, they make smokeless ashtrays? *shakes her head at obsessed smokers*
* If there weren't so many friggin' politics involved, it would make sense to publicize the hell out of this case just to intimidate the killer and keep him from killing someone else. *scowls at politicians*
* Para 14: "Well, Sarge, it was easier" - I like those commas.
Also, one before "too" wouldn't be amiss.
* Brad never lit up, I take it?
* Para 19: Try a period after "Benson snapped."
* Para 21: Try "In the instinctual reaction of a baseball fan..." Also, "look-a-like" is hyphenated.
* Para 22: There should be a period after "I never take guesses." There's a good policeman.
Farley's using an awful lot of question marks in what could be statements...
* Para 43: "a long swing" - or "swig"?
* Para 53: Try breaking this into two sentences between "strangled that bird" and "that bird would."
* Para 59: Your punctuation is off in this. Here's my suggestion: "You’re making me nervous - was Michelle killed or something?"
As always, a good chapter with some interesting facts coming to light. Not the most action-packed chapter, but you need to have an info-gathering bit every once in a while, right?
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Thanks Irish
I hope you don't mind so much of Joe. He is the number one cop in this story. Hal? Well, I'll let you decide about Hal for yourself
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Thanks for reading, commenting, and proofing.
Andy
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Astounding
I can't wait to read the other chapter's. The dialog had true grit, betweem Farley and Benson at the the beginning. It flowed smoothly to draw the reader in. I love reading crime mysteries. It's one of my favorite genre's.
Keep on writing!
Julie

beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 4.
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Thanks
Thanks for checking out this story. You kind of started in the middle of what we've got so far. This is a collaboration between gerifitzsimmons and myself. If you'd like to start at the beginning and we'd definitely appreciate that, here is the link that will take you there:
http://storywrite.com/list/34946-Secret-Radio-Murders
Thanks for commenting and all the applause. I'm very glad that you like this story.
Andy
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Hmmmm....
If I may...took the previous chapter, in the precinct as kind of a 'catch your breath' pause for the reader to contemplate, rather expected this current chapter to be hot and heavy but the interrogation was just another piece in the puzzle and barely advanced the story, well, not exactly true, I guess.
I have a current novel that is very slow developing, but I knew it would be that way, as I recall the earlier chapters here, there was much more action than the last two...but it has been a while so my memory may be faulty...
good to hear you have more episodes pending...
good luck...
amicus...
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ohhhhhhh this is wonderful are you going to put them altogether and create a novel? I can learn a lot from reading your writes thank you


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Thanks again
I'm glad you are enjoying this story.
Yes, Geri and I are planning to make a novel out of this. Did you start this story from the prologue? Chapters eleven and twelve are in the oven and should be done soon.
Thanks for reading, commenting, and the generous applause.
Andy
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wow, nice one... funny i started your novel from tenth chapter... But it has made me go for the first. Nice style of writing you've got. Didn't seem like a thousand words at all... And that stomach meeting the spine thing was clever. Well done...
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Thanks Kirin
Thanks Kirin,
I'm glad you like chapter ten and I do hope you'll find it interesting enough to want to read the rest of the story. This is planned to be a novel and it is being co-written with gerifitzsimmons. Thanks very much for reading and commenting.
Andy
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