Song of the Waves

It was late afternoon when I arrived at a small, unknown, deserted beach in mid-summer. There wasn't a sign of city life. I had only brought my favourite pencil, my notebook, a blanket, and my Ipod with me. I wanted to escape life for a while.1

The fresh sea air hit my face and oh-so-gently danced with my hair as I stepped onto the beach. The sun kissed my face and the waves serenaded me. I laid my blanket near an open spot that seemed to be the center of the beach: Not too far from the ocean, yet not too close. 2

Beautiful, jazzy music filled my ears as my hand flowed with the music, words coming off of my head and landing on the paper in front of me. I was the only one there, lying on my bed of sand.3

After a while, I turned off the music and put my things away. It was dusk. I left my things where they were to take a walk down by the water. The waves hugged my feet whenever they came close. 4

I was startled out of my mesmerized state when a hand touched my shoulder.5

"Hi," a voice said softly. I turned around to find myself staring into those deep, magnificent eyes I thought about every night. I was speechless. Those eyes belonged to the boy who I thought could care less about me. My eyes averted their gaze from him to look out at the glowing horizon.6

"I thought I was the only one who knew about this place," that serene, amazing voice said. The hand, still on my shoulder, traveled down my arm and wrapped around my waist. My head slowly but immediately laid itself on his shoulder.7

It seemed like forever until a hand tipped my chin up. He pulled me nearer to him and I found myself looking into those smooth, glassy eyes again.8

That is, until his soft lips gently pressed against mine as the waves urged us on.9

Author notes

Hmm...I don't usually write like this. XD
The "...belonged to the boy who I thought could care less about me..." part was supposed to indicate that they knew each other, but she thought he didn't care about her..
I got confused after re-reading my story, too, though. XD

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  • Hidden Within
    April 17
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    Wow, sweet story! I was deeply touched. It'd be nice with a continuation, i loved it


  • Miss Belligerence
    April 13

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    This was very simple, but that added to it's charm. It's sort of contrived, but that's ok. It seemed complete at the end, like this was a sweet memory not to be tempered with a rotten ending, or the pesky past. I really liked it. It had a sweet simplicity. good job
    thanks for entering my contest
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  • bakermiddle
    April 9
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    I liked the description in the beginning and overall the story was quite well. I enjoyed reading it. Also, the "...belonged to the boy who I thought could care less about me..." part wasn't confusing to me, I knew exactly what you were talking about. Nice job!

  • littleladymadi
    April 3
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    awwwww! sooooo cute and good! I hope you win the contest! WHO is this about


  • beezy92
    April 3

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    I like it a lot. I have to admit, I liked the first part best though. The imagery was descriptive and beautiful and original and it made me happy (= I feel like the transition into the kiss was really fast for two people who had never spoken before, but I still liked it a lot. Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest! Finalist list (=

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