Hunt...

A contest entry

• Wolf poems! by HaXXoR. 350 points, ended June 2, 2008, 15 entries
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  Megurine Luka
  September 15, 2008
  
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  Very impressive. I liked how you made the words flow. Even though it was short, it had a huge message. Obviously, haha.
  
  Yuor backgrounds also fit the poem! Wonderful!
• trueimperfection
  September 14, 2008
  
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  Excellent flow!

  I love this kind of rhythm in a poem - the spacing and structure work perfectly to drag out the feeling of those words. Perfect word choice, it paints the image clearly. Nice one.

  
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  ice wolf
  August 13, 2008
  
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  This is really really good Auntie Divya. The imagery is amazing. You really captured the essence of a wolf in this. Good job.

  
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  iBubbles
  June 13, 2008
  
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  wow i really liked this. i normally wouldnt read poems, but i found this one very intersting x]. the way you used your words made me picture the actual pack and everything. well done :]

  
• daftweejimmy
  June 2, 2008
  
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  Not too bad........

  but even poetry demands attention to detail, in fact it requires more. I'm talking punctuation here, and, to some extent, word juxtaposition.
  
  There is a tendency when writing poetry to let punctuation take its chances; the argument is that the poem can then be read and interpreted how the reader likes. This is a cop-out of monumental proportions, because, having re-read the poem there is only one sign of punctuation. Had there been none, I could accept the very inferior idea that it frees the reader etc., but that one comma says you have a clear idea of how you want your readers to understand the piece, but haven't bothered to elucidate.
  
  Please, it isn't that hard. There's a reasonably well constructed poem here waiting to be made better, so go on, treat us!
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  gocubsgo25
  May 31, 2008
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  This was very good. It used a minimal amount of words yet still got its point across of how delicate a hunt by a wolf or any animal really is. I like how you personified the wolves, by saying that they exchange stories and other examples. I don't see any problems or critique points with it.
  
  Great job!

  beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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  Edeyn
  May 21, 2008
  
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  The visual dropoff of the words helped to see the pouncing going on. I have always had a soft spot for this kind of poetry -- both the kind that has a visual component to it, sort of playing with making a picture, and the kind that deals with nature and the whole predator vs prey interaction.

  
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  HaXXoR
  April 23, 2008
  
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  Well. i liked this a lot. and it has many of the things i wished for. i really loved how you choosed to put the text. your choose of word were great. one thing i missed badly. was the details of the location. was it a cold night? was the moon arise? This portraited a very fierce and "mean" hunt. it's the type of hunt that usually is described when it comes to wolves. fierce. fast. and no way of escape. i found this one enjoyable. it was a special way of writing about the ordinary described hunt. fierce wolves.
  
  Let's see were this can get you. good work
  
  keep up the good work
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  Glowstarcharmer
  April 3, 2008
  
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  Wow, this was really very good. I loved how you chose just the right words to use to really portray the feeling of wolves hunting. The atmosphere you created was really good as well, tense at first before the attack, then elation as the persuit comenced, then a sense of relaxation and a job well done at the end. I also loved the presentation of this poem, the way you seyt out the lines and the background you used really worked very well to set the scene. Well done my dear and good luck with the contest.
  
  X Amber X
• littleladymadi
  April 3, 2008
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  GOODJOB! best of luck in the contest!