She walks home in the cold wondering what will happen tonight1
Silently Star crays.The thought of being at her home upsets her too much.Star decides to runaway.To live life with out the pain.She grabs her trusty knife that has always been there for her.Smoothly she escapes the tormenting memories.All will be better.Her parents come home to an empty house and reads the note she left for them.It reads"Dear mom and dad,you said when i was young that you loved me and would do anything for me.You lied that day.Right to my face you told the biggest lie.I'm sorry but i have decided to leave forever.First i am gonna go far away from you.Then my beautiful blade will set me free.I'm sorry if i am hurting you but i need to escape this.2
Love, Star*"3
She is now on her way down the road on the bus.Star needs and audience.She quietly enters the stage unnoticed.Seeing the sign up sheet she takes her chance. She will perform at 6:00.Waiting she goes into the bathroom and locks the door."Practicing her routine." Now its 5 till.She slips her coat over her precious cuts,still bleeding. The audience hushes for the next performer. She on stage. Star at her greatest hour. She takes the knife out and with one swift movement cuts deeply. Then to end it all she stabs herself right through her stomach. All is ended, and she finally has a smile on her face. All were too late.She is gone and now the Crimson Droplets turn to a river.Freedom her last words.4
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Silently Star crays (Cries?) member what i said about past tense!
-bri -
mmmmm....i love this piece! its so deep, i have to say my fave part was when she smiled! it jus leaves me speachless! one word describes this....WHOA!!!! keep it up!!!
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Thank u all! i love it too...lol.
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this was great- well done i really loved the ending i had an image of her been in the 50's in new york having this huge coat on then just dropping it on the stage- dont ask my demented mind- lol well done
Crystal xxx -
WOW!! You have major talent I am speechless. Great write, I saw the title and feel in love at first sight and HAD to read this, and I am so glad I did. Great imagery, and meaning, and I liked the points you were got to get across. Great job , and keep writing, wouldn’t want the world to collapse without your brilliant mind! Best of wishes and great great job !!!!!!!!!!
Don't worry, I overlooked the errors, though they're were a few I won't mention them because the story was so so great! I'm not good at editing anyways, hehe it could be perfect and I'm just stupid. Anyways, great story!!!!!!! I'll buy you're book when you're famous!!!!!!!!!!!!! -
wow...amazing...im speechless
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ABSOLUTLY AMAZING!! This was so sad, but I LOVED the ending, wow. It was just such a perfect ending. I actually don't know what to say. This was just written so well. Just, Wow. Nothing else to say, *continues clapping*
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