I can feel your heartbeat, I know you're somewhere out there...1
Under the moonlight
in the midst of the scents of the forest
Comforting
Familiar
I feel you are near.
Amongst my brethren and kin
I hear your heartbeat somewhere close by
Where?
Running through the forest
Swifter than the wind
my thoughts are flying to you
can you feel them?
I search every tree and hollow
Hunting, seeking out your scent
I will find you.2
The time is drawing near
I raise my voice and sing to the moon
a long slow howl
I'm calling you, listen.3
Your time is coming
I am the eyes that follow you in the darkness
I am looking, I am searching.
I am hungry.4
I will find you.5
A contest entry
- Wolf poems! by HaXXoR.
350 points, ended June 2, 2008, 15 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Surprise Me! by Shadow-Kissed.
300 points, ended May 28, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Please tell me what you think
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very interesting. and a good poem. very good language and good choice of words. also a good description of a hunt. i like everything except for the ending. so good poem ^^
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Amazed
i love this poem. I'm a huge animal fan and the way you worded everything was unbelievable. I'm thinking you may become a finalist. This was amazing. Well Done and best of luck
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Vury nice.
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Very Wolfy ^^
I liked that, it describes a hunting wolf well! -
This reminds me of Twilight, the series.. Anyways, I though this was fantastic and you did a great job capturing "Wolves", running in the darkness using their scent above all other senses.
Great job!
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5.
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I love wolves, and I love this poem!
You have captured both the essence of a wolf, and also the feelings around them, this was really good!
Your imagery was lovely, and I liked the uneven flow, it seemed to work for this kind of poem. I really loved this, well done!
~Miranda
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Nice write....
captures the uncaring aspect of the predator and the inevitability of the prey to escape...well done....
amicus...
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Great
Wolves are lovely animals and I really like the way you pulled off a wolf in mid hunt. You seemed to sort of contrast an intimacy with his prey with a determination to hunt them. It was interesting in that way.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Good Poem
Very nice, the thrill of the hunt captured well
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