I went out with some friends tonight to just catch up on some lost time. Now that school is over none of us has had the time to stay in contact with each other. Even when we did the time we spent together was anything but memorable.
After a few drinks we ended up crashing a party like we used to back in college. Oh the way we were then. Luckily, Nick happend to know the host, making our gateway in a whole lot easier than when we were kids. The scene was great I couldn't believe Nick had such great connections. Everything was dressed to the "t" from the chandlier on the cieling to the freshly waxed floors. I was beginning to get a little uncomfortable for not dressing to the occassion, but I should have guessed it. When ever I'm with these guys nothing is never really planned. Like always I find myself strayed away from the pack and watching the party from the loft upstair's. I'm joined by a stranger who also seems to have also strayed his way up here. We made the best of small talk and started to break the ice. He asked if I was going "serious" with anyone. Truthfully I answeard, "yes" and couldn't stop blushing I could feel my cheeks burning with embarassment and my stomach started to fill with butter flies. I couldn't believe that just the thought of my boyfriend could make me feel so happy and jittery inside. Responding with a nervous chuckle, he confessed that wasn't exactly the answer he was hoping for." I guess I won't be getting a number tonight."
He shunned back to the swarm of people and I found my way back to Nick and couldn't help but stare blankly at him. Dumfounded by my sudden burst of the love bug, he boyishly held my hand and tenderly kissed my lips. That was when I knew. That was my moment I couldn't care less for where we were or who was surrounding us I just wanted the kiss to last forever.1
A contest entry
- Tired of Judges who don't Give Feedback? by crosscountry07.
450 points, ended April 18, 2008, 13 entries
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Comments
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Aww how sweet! Good write! Thanks for entering and good luck! -Liz
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Interesting little vignette of life.
For a first attempt you've done well - only a couple of grammer/punctuation errors that I could see.
Stylistically, it could be spaced out a little more to improve readability, but apart from that it is fine.
Simple moments are often the best.
Welcome to Storywrite and keep writing!
beginning: 3, language: 2, plot: 2, ending: 3, dialog: 2, characters: 2.
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