Springing Forth

The sun is finally peeping through the old tall pine trees in my backyard. The blanket of white that coats the earth disintegrates into the soft earth. Sand that once thickly covered the streets is washed to the sides of the roads in heaps. Rains begin pouring down, making tiny rivers flow down the side streets and forming puddles in the crevices within the roads. The runoff turns into stick black mud that coats our boots and always seems to find its way onto the kitchen floor. A new season is emerging. It is a season of bright colors, warmth, and joy. It is also the season of rebirth.1

We begin to shake off the ice that has frozen us for so long. We were in a season of darkness, cold, and dreariness. It is time to bring some color into our lives. The flower buds that start forming seem like little drops of hope planted within our lives. If we treat them right, they just may become something beautiful.2

Times have been rough, but we're ready to come out of hibernation. The darkness that passes over made us hide in desperation. Now we are ready to enter the world again. We begin slowly begin arising from our sorrows, leaving them behind and clinging onto the buds of hope that begin forming whenever you least expect it.3

The sun rises, a giant blazing fireball stepping out into pink-streaked sky. I feel ready to rise again too. I'm ready to spring forth. I'm ready to set myself free.

Author notes

It's about the first day of spring, incase you didn't gather that

Sorry its short and packed with description, I'm really a poet. Just trying out this writing thing See how you like it.

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  • Cheerful-Panda
    April 28, 2008
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    I love the descrpitions truly very springish good job and good luck in the contest.


  • Andy Stephenson Greeters member
    April 1, 2008

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    Just saw this.

    This is pretty well written and the description does remind me of poetry. Story writing can become addictive. I think that this expresses the coming of Spring pretty well. Good job.

    Thanks for entering the new member contest. I hope you enjoy Storywrite. The poetry link at the bottom of the page will take you to our sister site, Allpoetry, which you may enjoy as a poet.

    Andy


  • whichcraft Greeters member
    March 31, 2008

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    I love the descriptions in your story. You can definitely tell that you enjoy poetry because you can see it in your writing. Nice work and thank you for entering.


  • tallblondie gold member
    March 31, 2008
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    My favourite sentence in this piece would have to be this; "The sun rises, a giant blazing fireball stepping out into pink-streaked sky."

    The descriptions and imagery are great - you should write more stories, rather than restrict yourself to poetry.

    Good luck with the contest!


  • IrishYndina Greeters member
    March 30, 2008

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    I really liked the bit about hope and flower buds: "If we treat them right, they just may become something beautiful." What a lovely and poetic thought! I also liked the pun in the line "I'm ready to spring forth." This is a very lovely piece about spring (which I am so glad to see finally rearing it's head *laughs*). I enjoyed it - it's almost like a bit of prose poetry in its brevity and purposful language. Best of luck in the contest!


  • SageSyren Greeters member
    March 30, 2008
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    Nicely done. I love the descriptions. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
    Brooke

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