Wastin' Away

I'm headed to Margarita-ville.1

I love the salty rim. I love the lemon-lime flavor of the cocktail. I love the way it stings my tongue, and the faint taste of tequila lingers in my mouth. 2

Margaritaville. where problems dissapeer. Where relationships dissolve away. Where debt is paid off. Where nothing matters anymore. 3

I'm lost, ruined, depressed, but it doesn't matter because I'm headed to Margaritaville.

Author notes

Hmmh.

Leave me a comment. come on, you can't resist.

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    : Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have 0. (?) (Line numbers)
    Ratings:

Comments

1 - 6 of 6
  • dustbunni3
    May 21, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    This is quite depressing.. Is there something you need to tell me??

    haha jk

    I like how you describe the alcohol, where it takes you, and then the after-effect. Good job!

    I will be reading you marrige (is that how you spell it??) one soon, but I have to get going because the computer teacher is kicking me out :/

    Talk to you when i get home!!

    Seana

  • Melli
    May 18, 2008
    Edit | Reply

    yeah drinking!!

    -it's lauren-
    i like margaritia-ville!!
    when are we going?!?!


  • Midnight-In-Love
    May 18, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    Not to bad, it really portrays some people's addictions. I like the last line. It's cute.


  • So Strange Greeters member
    April 3, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    You misspelled 'disappear' in the third paragraph. You'll see it.

    But other then that, this was really deep and had a lot of meaning to it. I enjoyed this because it was full of emotions and I enjoy a story that is full of emotion and true. I hope for you to keep up the great work.

  • beezy92
    March 30, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    I likw it a lot! I love the pic, the description...relationships shouldn't be capitalized and "where debt is paid off" should be "Where debt is paid off." but other than that its perfect (=

  • Blurith
    March 30, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    I once had a margarita, and it took me 3 years to recover from the damage it caused my life.

    lol, O.K that's not true, but it was tasty. I'm glad you don't drink, because you are UNDERAGE after all

    Nice imagery of this piece, I could taste the words. The meaning behind it was also solid, as alcohol ruins many people's lives as they depend on it to escape their realities.

1 - 6 of 6