Caylee Laverock lives with her Aunt Mrs. Rue [aka Aunt Clara] and her Uncle Mr. Rue [Uncle Jeff] and cousin Bree [just Bree]. They are the normal typical family you would see in any ordinary story. The fairly skinny Aunt with curly blonde hair, always making sure everything was clean and sparkling enough to blind you. And the somewhat plump Uncle always wearing his tie to tight around his neck to work. And the cousin Bree always to busy texting her friends while snapping her bubble gum in her mouth, thinking that there is nothing more to life then texting. And Caylee, the curious teen always trying out new things and loves to explore what the world has to offer. This is a story about how a normal teen discovers a new world full of magic, with a little twist. It goes something like this.2
The sky was starting to turn from a slight shade of violet to dark blue, making the stars more visible then they were before. Caylee was in her bedroom doing her usual geometry homework, staring down at question number 25.3
“X leaves the train station going 30 miles per hour and Y leaves two hours later going 35 miles per hour- who gets to point C first if point C is 360 miles away from the train station?” She read out loud to herself. She read it again. And again.4
“Ugh. Who cares who gets to point C first? Its not like I’m going to use this in real life!” She complained while grabbing her calculator out of her backpack. She punched in the numbers into the calculator coming up with a decimal that went on forever. 5
“What am I doing wrong?” She pouted sinking into her chair. She rested her head on the desk facing towards the glass window. Little water drops started to tap on her window. Tap tap tap. Moment’s later splotches of water started to blanket her window making the view into a swirly one. A smile grew on Caylee’s face. Rainy days were one of her favorite kinds of days. She lifted herself out of the chair and slowly walked towards the window, close enough for her breath to create a fog. She stared out the window viewing the small neighborhood. Calyee’s eyes wandered from house to house wondering what people were doing right now. Homework? It started to rain harder. While Caylee was figuring, a small speck of light appeared in front of her window. It floated freely spinning back and forth creating enough light to cover the tip of Caylee’s nose. This caught Caylee’s attention immediately. What’s this, a firefly in the middle of winter, in the rain? Caylee pressed her face closer to the window, making her nose into a pigs nose. It looked slightly bigger then a normal firefly but it was hard to tell by the rain.6
Someone knocked on her door. Caylee jumped and quickly spun around.7
“Come in.” She sputtered, caught off guard. The door opened, and Bree walked in, a facemask caking her face.8
“I can’t find my hair curler for tomorrow so can I borrow yours?” She said twirling her hair. Caylee shifted her position a little.9
“Sure.” Bree quickly walked towards Caylee’s hair drawer and grabbed her curler and left the room shutting the door without saying a word.10
“At least she asked.” Caylee mumbled turning back towards her window. The speck of light was gone. Caylee pressed her face against the window to look for the speck of light. What was that? Caylee’s curiosity won her over and she pushed the window doors open. The wind and the rain rushed into her room making some papers on the desk flutter. Caylee slowly poked her head out the window the rain pecking at her face. Her eyes wandered in the night, examining the dark bushes, tree’s, grass, and houses. After a few silent moments of searching for the mystery peck of light, Caylee came to a conclusion that she was just seeing things and took her head out the window her head-dripping wet.11
“Maybe tomorrow Mr. Mystery peck?” Caylee breathed, closing the windows shut, water dripping from the tips of her hair. Caylee spun around her hair slapping her face, and stretched her arm to grab a dry towel out of her closet. She seized the fluffiest baby blue towel and patted her face dry. As she whipped her face down and squeezed the water out of her hair she saw something in the corner of her eye in her room. She slowly turned her head still holding the towel close to her face. It was the little peck of light! Caylee dropped her towel creating a little thump, staring straight at it. As she took a step forward it hovered back. It defiantly isn’t a firefly because it has no fly body or figure; it’s just…light no bigger then a penny in the middle of her room. Caylee cupped her hands as if she was about to catch a butterfly and quickly clapped her hands over the light still making room for the little speck of light to flutter in her hands. 12
“Gotcha.” Caylee smiled. She felt a warm sensation in her sealed hands. She took a curious peek into her cupped hands and before she knew it bright white light spill over and through her fingers. The light over shined her whole room and leaked out through her windows. If someone were to be staring at her room window right now they would think it was a scientific lab experiment gone wrong.13
“Oh my god!” Caylee screamed not being able to see her own hands from the blinding light. Caylee quickly clasped her hands close back into a cup shape. The bright light vanished in less then a secound. Caylee’s eyes re-adjusted back to its normal stage making her blink a lot.14
“What the hell just happened.” Caylee gasped still sealing her hands shut. She started to hear footsteps running down the hall. Crud. Caylee quickly jumped into her desk chair crouched down pretending she was doing her geometry homework, while her hands were still completely sealed.15
“Caylee is everything okay in there? I heard you scream.” Aunt Clara said sounding concerned.16
“I’m okay, everything’s fine. I just couldn’t get this one problem on my homework and got frustrated.” Caylee quickly sputtered out thinking of what to say next.17
“You sure? Need help?” She said clicking the door open; she was in her nightgown.18
“No really I’m fine. You can go back to sleep. I promise I wont cause any noise to wake you again.” She said, her face staring down at her textbook, and back facing towards Clara. Aunt Clara stepped back.19
“Did you take a shower Caylee?” She said putting on her glasses. Caylee froze caught off guard.20
“Umm, yeah I did. Just a quick wash up.” She said a little too quickly.21
“Then why you still in your school clothes sweetie?” She said stepping into her room. Caylee bit her bottom lip, still having her hands closed shut making the tips of her fingertips turn yellow.22
“Aunt Clara, please I’m doing my homework and I really need to get this done.” She said trying to sound annoyed. Aunt Clara stood aback, feeling a little hurt.23
“Mmmk. Try not to stay up too late.” She said shutting the door closed behind her. A sigh of relief came over Caylee. Usually she doesn’t get to worked up when she’s about to lie out of something but this situation was just too bizarre for her to think.24
“That was close.” Caylee breathed. Caylee stared down at her sealed hands.25
“And what am I going to do with you? Mr. Unbelievably huge chunk of light?” She said in her animated voice. She parted her fingers a little bit slowly checking if the light was still there. It was back to its normal penny size. Caylee opened her hands up to get a better look. The light started to get smaller and smaller as if it were sinking into her skin. Caylee’s eyes grew wide. It was sinking into her skin. Caylee stood up and shook her hand fiercely, trying to get it off. Forcing herself not to make any sounds. After she physically exhausted herself out from shaking it was too late. Caylee felt a rush of power through her arms and spread through out her whole body. It felt warm and comforting but powerful at the same time. 26
“What’s happening to me?” Caylee whispered horrified staring down at her hands. After awhile her body settled down and felt normal again. Caylee sat on the edge of her bed, still staring at her hands.27
“What was that?” She said quietly barely talking. Caylee sat there thinking it all over again the only sound coming from the rain. Tap tap tap. As she blankly stared at her hands she started to poke it, thinking something would happen. Then started slapping it.28
“Come out light!” Caylee said aggressively. After awhile she felt just plain stupid and stopped. Her hands bright red and sore from the slapping. Caylee rubbed her sore hand and started to walk towards her desk. When she grabbed her pencil from her desk her hands were perfectly healed. No red, no pain, no nothing. Caylee’s eyes grew wide.29
“What the?” She said, then quickly pushed it aside thinking it never happened and started to tackle question number 25 on her geometry homework. But couldn’t concentrate by the pervious events that just happened, making her head spin. Caylee stretched her fingers as if she was squeezing an invisible stress ball, then pointed to her pillow on her bed extending her index finger. She concentrated hard thinking that something would happen even though it would be a 0.5 out of 10 chance. The pillow slowly started to hover above her bed.30
“Holy crap!” Caylee squeaked quickly grabbing her hand. The pillow immediately fell down from mid air creating a light little thump on her bed. Caylee’s head started to spin. She stared down at her hands for the 100th time then quickly thrust her arm out her hand stretched out and fingers spread apart as if she was going to stop a car going 100mph. A glass vase her hand was facing towards to shattered into sharp glass pieces. Caylee’s eyes grew wider then they ever have been.31
“Holy shiit.” Caylee whispered.32
“I can do magic!?!” 33
She quickly scrambled to pick up the broken vase pieces and flowers then threw them into the trash. And grabbed her baby blue towel and pressed into the damp carpet.34
“This is a dream, this is a dream. Wake up, wake up.” Caylee kept chanting to herself while cleaning up her mess. After she was done she sat back at her desk staring at the place the vase was broken. She bit the bottom of her lip hard, after awhile she started to taste blood.35
“Okay this is really happening.” She confirmed with herself, dabbing her sleeve on her wounded lip. She ruffled her hand threw her silky strawberry blonde hair thinking every single detail that had just happened. Then opened her desk drawer and grabbed her little dairy then started to scribble down everything. As she was jotting down everything a smile grew on her face. For every time she wrote down the word ‘magic’ her smile grew wider. She took up three pages of her dairy when she was finally done. She stared down at her work happily.36
“I’ve got to tell Sophia this.” She said excitedly, while closing her diary and slipping it into her drawer. She quickly changed into her jamies, brushed up, then clicked the light off, flopping onto her bed. She slowly sank into her cool bed, her hair blanketing the fluffy pillow. She kissed both her hands then slowly fell asleep still having a million questions unanswered in her head.37
Chapter 238
The alarm clock went off at exactly 6:30am creating a loud beeping sound. Caylee lazily dragged her hand onto the alarm clicking it off. She took off her blankets feeling a rush of coldness across her body, making her want to cuddle back into her warm cozy blankets. She walked over to the bathroom her feet pressing against the cold tiles and did her daily wake up routine: splash cool water onto face to wake up fully, comb birds nest out of hair, brush and floss those pearly whites, take a quick 15min shower. As she was shampooing her hair she could see that it was still raining outside from the little window right above her head. Caylee started to hum an enjoyable tune while recalling the events of last night. After a few more moments in the shower Caylee turned the shower knob off and dried herself off. As she wrapped the damp towel around her body she could her footsteps running across the hall.39
“Caylee, you slowpoke! Hurry up I need to curl my hair!” Bree shouted knocking on the door angrily. Caylee tightened the towel around her body then opened the door, walking out.40
“God calm down, I’m done okay?” Caylee said walking towards her room, leaving a wet trail from her hair. Bree gave her a disgusting look then walked inside slamming the door shut. As Caylee changed into a top and jeans she looked up towards her desk seeing her geometry homework spread all over.41
“Crap, I forgot all about this.” She said picking it all up and shoving it into her backpack.42
“I’ll just finish it up during break, since geometry is 4th period.” She mummbled grabbing her backpack and walking down the stairs towards the kitchen. She grabbed some Honey Bunches of Oats and poured it into her bowl, and a glass of orange juice to go with it. As she munched on her cereal Bree came down the stairs with her perfect curls bouncing off her shoulders. Bree grabbed the cereal across the table and poured it into her bowl, and started to munch away. As they both made crunching noises Uncle Jeff walked down the stairs in his tight black suit and tie.43
“How are my two favorite daughters and nieces doing?” He said in his happy chippery voice.44
“You only have one daughter and niece, so you have no choices about favorites.” Caylee mumbled under her breath while chugging down her OJ. Uncle Jeff didn’t seem to notice and walked towards the frig looking for anything to munch on. After Bree and Caylee finished their breakfast they dumped their dishes into the sink, gave Uncle Jeff their hugs and kisses and walked out the door with their umbrellas nice and high. They both walked towards the bus stop on the wet sidewalk, hearing the non-stop tapping on their umbrellas. As they waited for the bus, Bree was already snapping gum in her mouth with her sidekick. A few kids started to gather around the bus stop with their umbrellas crashing against each other’s. Caylee pulled away from the crowd lost in her own thought of her new powers. Maybe I’m imagining all this? Caylee glanced over the crowd making sure nobody was watching. Everyone was to busy engaging in their conversation nobody even noticed Caylee pulled away from the crowd.45
“Okay.” She whispered, while stretching her index finger like last night, towards a pebble. She concentrated like before. The pebble slowly started to rise from the wet concrete.46
“Wow.” Caylee breathed as she pulled her finger away making the pebble fall and bounce off into the street. Right then and there the bus pulled over and everyone rushed in shaking their umbrellas off. Caylee hopped into the bus closing her umbrella, and sat down at her usual seat next to Sophia. She was reading a new book she just checked out of the library last week. 47
“What’s up?” She said casually engaged in her book.48
“You are not going to BELIVE what happened last night!” Caylee squeaked excitedly.49
“Bree quit texting?” She said sarcastically, now closing her book.50
“No, I was-” Caylee started but got cut off by some guy throwing a piece of paper at her head. When she turned around three guys where staring at her.51
“Dude what’s your problem I meant the other chick not her!” One of the guys said pointing towards Sophia.52
“Then why didn’t you throw it?” Said the other, irritated. The third guy brushed past the two guys and walked towards Caylee and Sophia.53
“Sorry about my friends. Don’t let them bother you.” He said with a fake smile, while picking up the piece of crumpled paper. Sophia stroked her hair with her fingers and smiled a fake smile.54
“When hitting on a girl, throwing a piece of paper at their head is not going to make them want you.” She said with disgust. The guy with the crumpled piece of paper shifted position a little.55
“Ahh…We-” He started.56
“Tell that to your friends.” She countinued cutting him off completely. The guy stood there for a second then walked back towards his friends and sat down. 57
“What she say, Luke?” Said one of the guys anxiously. Luke gave a little smirk.58
The bus stopped in front of the school and everyone spilled out. Sophia slipped her book into her backpack and grabbed out a Hershey’s chocolate bar, handing some to Caylee.59
“You were saying?” Sophia said taking a bit out of her Hershey’s bar, walking out the bus. Caylee opened up her umbrella so that it was coving her and Sophia.60
“Yeah, so anyways last night when I was doing my geometry homework-”61
“Oh yeah, my geometry homework! I almost forgot I needed help on it last night and I was going to ask Mr. Ray about it. Sorry Cay can you tell me later?” She said hurriedly and rushed towards the school campus, leaving Caylee speechless.62
“Wait!” Caylee called. Then grunted, taking a aggresive bit out of her Hershey’s bar.63
“I’ll just tell her during lunch.” Caylee mumbled. Right when she took a step towards school someone's hand quickly wrapped around Caylee's wrist. Making Caylee's heart jump and then quickly turn around. It was a guy around her age with bright blue beautiful eyes that were full of anger and a hint of seriousness. He had pale but smooth looking skin and gelled spiky black hair. His body was toned and had muclse creases in his arms but not like those body builders, more leaner and even looking. Caylee’s heart skipped a beat. He was incerdibly dazziling. Their eyes locked for a moment, and he looked intensely into her eye's before he spoke. 64
“Don’t tell her.” in a stunningly angery whisper.65
To Be Countinued... ;]
Author notes
option 1 x]]
- Writing Review group list • next in list
A contest entry
- Paranormal by ice wolf.
400 points, ended April 25, 2008, 16 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Can You Do It? by IrishYndina.
700 points, ended April 4, 2008, 4 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Picture Promt or Whatever! by Hinata-is-me.
360 points, ended June 12, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Any and All welcome by Reaver.
160 points, ended May 26, 2008, 14 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Beautiful Fantasy by dark-fantasies.
450 points, ended June 13, 2008, 14 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Stories Please by Violet Moodswing.
600 points, ended June 16, 2008, 33 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Anything by Vampiric souls.
225 points, ended June 19, 2008, 42 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Superawesomewonderfuluberspiffyness (Name supplied by Trisarahtops. XD) by Sousuke.
225 points, ended June 22, 2008, 12 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - A Chance to Win by moonwriter.
450 points, ended June 24, 2008, 16 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think.
Comments
-
Love It!
Best story i have read, it was beautiful adn you wrote the emotions really well -
You didn't hurry this; everything sounded natural. This was so believeable. It had me 'til the end. Gonna go read the rest la~
Ace job.

-
It's a good story with a good plot, but needs a bit of polishing. In paragraph 2, when talking about the tie and her texting, to should be too. Also try not to start sentences with the same word - it throws off the flow. Remember to put a comma before using but. When describing something with more than one word - such as the fluffiest, baby blue towel - you want to use a comma to seperate the descriptions. Also, remember to use spell check! (a miracle!) Sentence fragments such as Her hands bright red and sore from slapping in paragraph 29 needs to be connected with a sentence or made into one. Other than that there were some more grammar, spelling, and other errors, but a good polishing should clean it up. Pretty good job!
-
Too much dialoug and not enoug emotion. You did a good job with the plot line, though it was a little tedious at times. The sudden jump from reality to fantasy seemed a little unbeleivable. Maybe you could edit this so it flows a little smoother.
Try adding more emotion into it. What was Caylee feeling and thinking throughout this? While dialouge is good, it's better to have a mixture of that and character thought. The background detail and imagery help set the scene and make the story more interesting.
Overall, pretty good. It was cute. -
Good!
I can't wait to read more!!
-
Thank you for commenting on my story.
-
I wonder what Caylee will do with her powers? This is a cool story-the magic plot is nice! Can't wait to see who, or what, the boy is! Your characters are awesome and so are their personalities. Bravo!


-
I am with Caylee-rainy days are the best
In about the middle of paragraph 5 you mispell her name. Calyee instead of Caylee. LoL, not a big thing but thought you would want to know
.
This is quite the intriguing story and it certainly prompts me to want to turn the page to see what happens next. Good luck in the contest. Glad I got to read it.

-
i like it.
your a good writer.
=D -
This is really good. It has an interesting storyline and Caylee seems like a good main character. Keep working!


beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
-
This was a very quirky, enjoyable piece to read, but lacked a few descriptions and detail. Things were moving much too quickly than I would've liked, but I liked the direction the story was heading. Your characters were interesting, and seem very well established, and I liked the dialogue in this too. There were some mistakes in grammar, but overall this was pretty good, and I really liked the last paragraph description of the mystery guy- it makes me want to read more of this.
-
Oooh this is really great and exciting!! Nice work!! Can't wait to continue reading this story!
-
This was very well written and fun to read. Though i found some of the paragraphs to be long and the beginning slightly weak compaired to the rest, i enjoyed it. You have alot of mis-spellings too, just try a good proofread to fix that. I found that i was wanting to continue when i knew i was near the end. Do you have more yet? I would love to read on further. Very well done! I can't wait to find out more! Well done!
-
wooow, now doesn't this mystery guy sound incredibly delicious?
he kinda reminds me of edward cullen from the twilight series
ever read that book?
Angelina. -
I really like it and i wounder who that guy i
-
-
oh lol thnx, u'll see who he is later on. . x]
-
-
oooooh! this is very good. cant wait to read the continuation of this


-
-
oh really? ty ^^
-
-
msg me when you write the continuation.
-
-
mmk! -gets excited- im so happy u like it! ;D
-
-
-
-
You'll see...I don't have time to complete it...but I'll see what I can do
-
its a very good story. not many misspelings.I like each characters differing personalities. if her relatives had been mean i would have thought i was reading harry potter
although if something like went into my hand i wouldnt go back doing my homework not that id be doing that in the first place -
Well that's not a very nice way to end this! What happens next???
This is kind of cute - I used to have dreams when I was younger that I suddenly had magic powers... *laughs* This reminds me of them a little.
You have a few grammar and spelling errors (quite a few, actually). You might want to work on editing this at some point. Be careful with to/two/too - that seemed to be a common problem (especially too). Anyways, I enjoyed this, and I love fireflies.
-
-
yeeaaee~! ty ;D i'll edit it.
-
-
this was a cute, quirky little tale. i like your character development and you write dialogue pretty well. my only suggestion would be to question how you start off your story. it sort of has a play/script feel to it the way you set it up and i think it would be just as strong if you just leapt into the story and tossed that info in as you go along.
otherwise, fun read! i enjoyed it and good luck in those contests! -
-
yeeaaee~! ty for commenting ;D
-


















