For starters, I was at my second rave, Elfs playground, when I met Byrdman, aka Joe. I met so many wonderful people, like jellybean who gave me my ravename Precious, Vanity - my rave sister now, and Joe - Byrdman. He caught my eye just with how he was working the glowsticks he had. Not to mention he was pretty cute. Sandy blonde hair, chiseled jaw, arms, and abs. Baby blue eyes, and no shirt. We danced the night away until the cops decided to be pigs and shut down the party. In the alley where my rave family and I parked, we danced to music in our cars, and took crazy group photos. What a night to remember. 1
It has been six months since I met him. Yes, Joe and I have hung out, and we've been to raves together, and we've kissed; but that's about it. Before I knew it, he had to go half way across the world to South Africa, to help save some endangered species of birds. I was pretty heartbroken. 2
The day he left had to be the most hardest day of my life. I didn't even want to rave after that day. That is bad for a raver, if she doesn't want to rave after something bad happens. I called up Vanity, and had her come over to comfort me. She stayed a couple of days in Thousand Oaks, with me to make sure I was okay. 3
While Vanity was here she was looking up ways on how to get a homebody like me out of the house and back into the rave scene. Finally she saw a solution. A Raver Day at Disneyland. 4
She knows how much I love raving and Disneyland and how much I am a disney princess at heart. Disney movies are my guilty pleasure.
On June 14th, My lovely Vanity made the trip all the way out to Thousand Oaks again to come pick me up. 5
She steps out of her very prettyful, silver, Hyundai Tiburon in all her raver glory. Silver, seven inch heel, stack boots, her kandii shorts, and her silver, glittery, disney princess tanktop. Her hair done up in braided, piggytail, with kandii bracelets holding the braids in place, and strings of beads inbetween each braided stitch. 6
"Ready, My beautiful Precious?" She called out as she started to place her sunglasses on top of her head. 7
"Yep." I replied. I grabbed my raver backpack, my keys and closed the door behind me. I skipped down to my best friend's car, hopped in through the window. I grabbed her Ipod and started searching for good roadtrip music. We settled on "Impressed" by Dj Isaac. 8
We partied like rockstars in the cabin of her car. 9
We parked on the top level of the parking structure at Disneyland, and as we were coming down the escalator, I didn't see any ravers whatsoever. 10
"Vanity.." I whined. 11
"Precious...Shh! Raver's are here you just have to find them. Sometimes we're like Carmen in 'Where in the World is Carmen San Diego." Vanity replied. I sighed and crossed my arms. As we reached the main floor where the trams are, I saw the rave photographer Tigger, with a bunch of ravers. We joined the crowd and boarded the tram. 12
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Halfway through the day, Vanity went to go get a couple of water bottles for us. I stood by the fence that overlooked the manmade river that the Mark Twain ship floated in. I checked my phone and started tapping away at the keys. 14
"Who are you texting?" I heard Vanity call out. 15
"oh nobody." I lied. 16
"Uh huh sure.. Was that Byrdman who you were texting?" She asked. 17
"Maybe." I stammered. 18
"Did you tell him about today." Vanity asked me.19
"I did. But he's still in Africa." I replied. She wrapped her arms around me while I placed my head on her shoulder.20
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Night fell upon the sky and the citylights illuminated the theme park. Vanity and I were walking all over the place eating churros when we both heard the announcer shout out the fireworks show was about the begin.
"Disneyland residents, you are about to experience so magical it may just blow your mind away. Get ready for Dreams do come true, Fireworks spectacular." 22
Vanity and I stood by the Sleeping Beauty castle, among the other ravers and watched the fireworks show. Some ravers were rolling hardcore and getting a trip off of the bright lights in the sky. Vanity made sure I stayed sober. I sighed softly. 23
"What." Vanity huffed in my ear. 24
"Somebody should really sue Walt Disney, for making this place so magical and loveable, and placing thoughts of true love in little girls heads." I pouted. 25
"You want your Disney fairytale romance don't you?" Vanity giggled. 26
"Yes." I continued to pout. 27
"Well I know I'm a toad...But will I do for a prince?" A husky voice whispered in my ear. I turned around and Joe was there. My jaw literally hit the ground, and I literally forgot how to breathe. 28
"Precious?" Vanity snapped her fingers in front of my eyes. 29
"AHH! JOE!" I screeched. I jumped into his arms and wrapped my arms around his neck. He swung me around, and then he set me back down on the ground. He leaned in and brushed his lips up against mine. 30
Colors of the rainbow splashed across the sky, beautiful instrumentals blasted from the speakers. 31
"Will you be my Princess Jasmine?" He asked me 32
"Are you going to be my Prince Ali Abawba?" I giggled. 33
"Of course, but I like the name Aladdin better." he smiled and lifted me into his arms. I placed my hands on his face and pulled him for one of those fairytale, magical kisses every Disney movie needs to be completed. I couldn't help but smile and giggle all at the same time. My Aladdin set me back down on the ground and wrapped his masculine arms around me. I guess it's true when they say "Good things take time, but really great things happen in a blink of an eye."
Author notes
I hope this isn't too corny for you. and you just have to deal with the names, I'm a raver and we're all about weird raver names lol. Raving is an addiction of mine lol. ohhh I hope it's not too long though. I tried making it short.
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Comments
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WoW.. first just interesting..then heartbreaking..so sad.. the disney land rave thing seems to be quite fun and lovely
i really love your way of writing.. and you wrote the things quite shocking. i was really suprised at some parts. haha one thing was really mystical.. the guy that was supposed to be in africa suddenly appeared hehe. and in a good way.. the ending was so lovely.. so beautiful.. i loved it. i can't say im that much for disney.. but this piece was adorable.. i must say it again.. omg. you are good at shocking people.. and the way of getting this ravy if you get what i mean.. is a great idea.. it makes it so special. actually this is the first real raver story i read here on sw.. and i love it. you are good at expressing feelings. and i think this one can be a serie.. i would love a part 2 
Amazing work!
keep up the good work


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i love this. i was so lost in the beginning and im still not sure what raving is, but i think i got the general idea. i loved the names.
this had such a sweet ending. i loved how it had all the disney elements added to it along with takin place at disney.
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Aww this is so cute! A little cheesy, but hey? What is a Disney movie without the cheesy element? I love disney movies too! Great write good luck! -Liz

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Interesting...it was a little corny but whatever. It sounds like it was real life, so I'm not gonna try to correct real life There were some grammatical issues. The whole raver/"party like a rockstar"/girled out clothing thing isn't really for me, but it was a good write. It was creative, like I asked for. (= Good luck in the contest!




