A Numb Heart's Blood

I was always loving you;
I said hold me, never let go,
Until I flew to somewhere new;
I wish now you’d have said no1

Don't say a word, not even one;
Just shush, walk away
Impossible as a midnight sun,
Love starts with the first ray2

I’ve given all I had to give…
Now I’ve nothing left to lose
With this, no more can I live;
Done, my heart’s bloodily bruised3

Before my heart was locked,
With the key nowhere to be found,
But in your hands – then I was shocked;
I needed you to expound4

The key was what you used to cut,
And my heart was left in strips
Lock did not meet key; it stayed shut,
Rusted my heart where it still drips5

But no longer do I feel the hurt,
The ruby tears fall in vain,
Disregarded on the white shirt,
My heart’s permanent bloodstain6

Forgetting the depression and the cries,
I’ve almost forgotten you
Love’s nothing but pain, sorrow; lies:
All that’s left on my heart - a red tattoo7

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Author notes

Okay! For Emily’s incredible contest. This is based on a bunch of options: one of the pictures, the one with the red, bloody heart [what I took it as] in the hand. Addicted & Welcome To My Life by SP and Numb by Linkin Park. It’s a poem. A true, emotional, deep, and it was supposed to just make you want to cry your eyes out. It had 5 of your #5 options in it. The mix and match option. I hope it was okay I used five, though you did say two. The topics that inspired me for this are depression and abuse. Option seven, it was supposed to make you want to cry. I’m thirteen. I’m female. One of my fave quotes is the one in your contest to get inspired by: “First they ignore you, then they laugh at you, then they fight you, then you win.”

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  • On.Cue
    March 25, 2008

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    Haha. Love your options much? =P
    Love the way you incorporated the mix and match into this =)

    Hmmm. I can't think of a way to put my thoughts into words...or letters. or typing? Haha.

    You're on finalist list which means that you're going to have until the 28th-ish to do whatever else you'd like with the poem. You can add, delete, edit, etc. before I re-read all entries and then judge =)


  • djk0925
    March 24, 2008

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    Graet

    I love it Taylor, you never fail to astonish. This is great! I hold so much feeling. Now i must make better poems, because with this one you have made all of mine look like scribbles on a peice of paper.


    • Taylor Renee
      March 24, 2008
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      Thanks

      You're so sweet, Dil. Oh, and btw? I looove your picture here

      I guess I don't look horrible in it...

      Anyway

      lol. Thanks. You really think it's good? And yours all rock! Wayyy better than this thing

      Love you babe!


  • Siby Anan
    March 23, 2008
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    I'm utterly...speechless.

    Wow, Tay. So amazing.


  • asthray.heart
    March 23, 2008

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    9. wow. not sure what to say sept this was lovely.

    keep it up
    xxxx

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