Sleepless Again

I don't know how to write this, I don't know what to say. Again. I'm just thinking myself in circles. Again. But today, my circles are starting to form straight lines. I'm drawing a conclusion, and it all leads to the same question as yesterday...because it was never answered.1

Am I...that terrible...a person?2

It would be great if I could just tell myself that of course that's not true. I'm just not sure that's the truth anymore. These tears...these stupid selfish tears. I'll just keep crying, even though I'm only searching for pity, which doesn't even make sense. There's no one here to pity me. There's no answers wherever I look, no one will give them to me.3

I know I'm not going to sleep well tonight. Again.

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  • Adelaide Blood
    April 12, 2008

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    Very well written

    It describe how hard it is to put true meaning into words and the affects of stress on the human body... I liked it ^^


  • beezy92
    April 8, 2008
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    It's a really good write and the perfect description of my feelings some days.


  • LuckyBlackCat
    March 24, 2008
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    nice job. i like how heartfelt this piece was, although i think that most girls want to get sympathy when they cry, although some more than others. i know that i do. so i think it's kinda unrealkistic for the girl to not want sympathy. unless that was what you were going for....i wouldn't know....you're so unpredictable, yet so predictable at the same time. i think you're my friend for that.


    • DeadlyTurnip
      March 24, 2008
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      YAY!! FRIEND!!! lol just kidding kinda I suppose I am unpredictably predictable while being predictibly unpredictable and also predictable and unpredictable.

      Sorry. That was really random. Anyway:


      I'm glad you liked this, and I'm glad it seemed heartfelt to you. And thank you for your critiqueish thing as well.

      • LuckyBlackCat
        March 24, 2008

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        n e time pal (wow, that sounded gay) lol.....

        c u tomorrow! mcas day, whoopie! (i'm being sarcastic, don't flip out)


  • Blackwings
    March 23, 2008

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    what you wrote was amazing! I would really like to see this longer cause it's just that good. The detail in this just makes it so you can picture it. I really liked: "But today, my circles are starting to form straight lines. I'm drawing a conclusion, and it all leads to the same question as yesterday...because it was never answered." That's a great line ^.^ The only things I would do was make it longer and more detail about events. But it's a lovely peice ^.^ Nice job
    ~Blackwings


    • DeadlyTurnip
      March 23, 2008
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      Aww thank you! Your comment made me all fuzzy inside.

      And thank you for your suggestions, I'll use them.

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