Wolf creeps, 1
Stealth in every sinew2
Intent on his goal, 3
A meal in his sight. 4
He sprints on, steadily5
Whispers in the dark, 6
His shining teeth 7
Lit by the moonlight,8
Bloodstained by his quarry’s own9
And in the night, a stirring moan10
The scream of the hunted, 11
The meal to be, 12
I turn and run, 13
The wolf I see. 14
A contest entry
- Wolf poems! by HaXXoR.
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I think this is excellent. I thought it had almost flawless execution, it was direct and you managed all the feeling of the prey into it. I love the ending, unexpected and twisting - very nice work.
I have absolutely no criticism!
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Whispers
**I like whispering more
I like how you praise the beauty of the wolf but then it is your own demise. I had that creeping up feeling. -
This piece, I found moved smoothly and held my attention.
I’m not a very good judge of Lyrical writing since I don’t have the ability to compose it myself. But here goes
This piece, I found moved smoothly and held my attention. I had the feeling-- I was the prey—pretty scary.
JMHO but I do believe this is such a great idea that you should expand on it.
Geri
beginning: 5, plot: 5, ending: 4.
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Excellent!
You have done a nice job here! Your lines are powerful and packed full of details as well. Your words showed me your emotions and painted the image.
Lynn
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Interesting turn of events there at the end. I wasn't expecting that author to be the hunted. But it's still very good. Great work on this, Shady. Keep writing.
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this is a very good poem, nicely described and pictured
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Simple words and yet a powerful image! this poem captures the traits of the wolf in the way that only a great poem can! Good Job!
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Really cool! I wish I could write poems.
Good job!
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This poem was simple, but well writen. You chose each word carefully and made it quite fluid. I like the last few lines the most, the irony of it all. Its only fun to watch them run, if your not the one their chasing. Thanks for entering.
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I like your way of choosing your words... really nice work.. quite simple. but still good.. you have a good flow in the poem and i can really feel the dark night.. first the wolf's hunt for a meal.. and then the fear of the haunted.. really good piece. and a great change.. you got both the hunter's and the victims view of it..
keep up the good work
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