taste.

I can taste it1

Lust2

Forgivness3

Obsession4

Tonight5

I can feel it6

Tears7

Pleasure8

Wanton9

Secluding the state of mind10

I'll keep memories 11

The smallest ones12

I have13

The only ones I have14

The ones I can't forget15

fading16

deeply17

carving18

The sense out of me

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  • Bello.Midnight
    September 23

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    ♣ blake

    Absolutly adore the bloody picture.
    It was different..I honestly think it tied in with the simplicty and mystery of the whole poem which could clearly be depicted and interpretated in so many ways

    ♣ blake


  • Fizbop Greeters member
    March 22
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    Short to the oint and amazing


  • Mieta
    March 22
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    The picture is kind of wierd..and doesn't seem to mix with the words...


  • I-Love-Someone
    March 22

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    this is so short and simple, yet so amazing, I have no idea what to say. It's got so much emotion, and it's so captivating.


  • Hermanator1 silver member
    March 22

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    Liked it

    I think you did mean something different on one line but...maybe not. Line 10 was it: seducing...rather than secluding?
    Lots of subtle meaning that requires careful thought. I t seems that the little memories that can't be forgotten are the cuts to the person as well as to the heart.


  • Siby Anan
    March 22

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    Your poems always seem to have a hidden meaning behind them. Something I can't find unless I look hard enough. And even then, I'd have to know you very well. Only then can I figure out the hidden meaning.

    It seems your poems are always very well written, but you'd need to achieve a certain state of mind to understand them. Something I don't have

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