I can taste it1
Lust2
Forgivness3
Obsession4
Tonight5
I can feel it6
Tears7
Pleasure8
Wanton9
Secluding the state of mind10
I'll keep memories 11
The smallest ones12
I have13
The only ones I have14
The ones I can't forget15
fading16
deeply17
carving18
The sense out of me
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Fantastic. It relates to someone I kno a bit. The "fading, deeply, carving the sense out of me" part. t shows a lot of emotion and you could tell it comes from the heart. What inspired you to write this? I want to get just a good as you one day.
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♣ blake
Absolutly adore the bloody picture.
It was different..I honestly think it tied in with the simplicty and mystery of the whole poem which could clearly be depicted and interpretated in so many ways
♣ blake
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Short to the oint and amazing
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The picture is kind of wierd..and doesn't seem to mix with the words...
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this is so short and simple, yet so amazing, I have no idea what to say. It's got so much emotion, and it's so captivating.
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Liked it
I think you did mean something different on one line but...maybe not. Line 10 was it: seducing...rather than secluding?
Lots of subtle meaning that requires careful thought. I t seems that the little memories that can't be forgotten are the cuts to the person as well as to the heart.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Your poems always seem to have a hidden meaning behind them. Something I can't find unless I look hard enough. And even then, I'd have to know you very well. Only then can I figure out the hidden meaning.
It seems your poems are always very well written, but you'd need to achieve a certain state of mind to understand them. Something I don't have
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