That's Right.

BEFORE YOU READ: Brooke is a girl who is completely in love with this guy Jazz, who seems to love her as well. but she sees him getting kissed by a fellow classmate named Adelle and runs off to be alone. and no, jazz and brooke are not yet dating.
that's all, enjoy!1


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“Hey Bee.”3

I turned around, completely aware of the fact that Jazz could probably see my heart leap out of my chest and take off on rollerblades. How could he find me in the middle of the football field? I never go here, how did he know? My hair was soaked because the rain was still pouring and I didn’t feel so hot in my heavy, wet sweatshirt. But Jazz looked amazing as usual. His hair was dripping, clinging to his face. I had to face him; the last person in the world I wanted to be around right now. All I wanted was to be alone.4

Be brave Brooke. 5

I can’t.6

Yes you can.7

Shut up, what do you know?!8

Hey! Relax, will you?9

He’s standing right there; DO SOMETHING!10

I can’t do it!11

Grow a spine for heaven‘s sake.12

Come on Brooke! You can do this, I swear!13

“Bee?”14

I shook my head a little, coming back to reality. 15

“Oh…hey.”16

“Whoa,” he gasped, “what’s wrong? Why were you crying?” He looked so concerned, so genuine. How could he have kissed Adelle? 17

Jazz took his thumb and wiped a tear off my cheek. I wonder if he realized that it made my skin tingled with electricity. His thumb, it lingered for a moment longer than…well, you know, normal.18

“It’s nothing,” I stuttered. 19

“Bee, it’s you. If you were crying, it’s something.”20

You love when he calls you “Bee” don’t you Brooke?21

Of course I do.22

Oh please, get a grip.23

Okay, he’s looking at you, pay attention.24

“No really, I just…I don’t know.”25

He looked at me for a second, then bowed his head, sticking his hands in his pockets. 26

“Are you cold?” he asked, raindrops collecting on his eyelashes. 27

I noticed suddenly that I was shaking.28

Maybe he’ll give you his sweatshirt.29

Oh! Maybe!30

Knock it off, you saw him with Adelle.31

Who knows? Maybe he had a change of heart.32

Wishful thinking.33

Can’t you be optimistic for two seconds?34

HEY! Be quiet, all of you! Focus.35

“Yeah…” BANG! Full blown migraine. 36

My hands flew up to my temple, squeezing my eyes closed. This one was a doozy.37

“Bee! Are you okay?” Jazz asked, one-hundred percent concerned. He rubbed his two fingers on the sides of my head, rotating them in circles. The football stadium lights dulled back to their normal intensity. All the pain was gone.38

“I’m okay.”39

He looked around then jumped a little. Maybe he talked in his head too.40

“Let’s get you out of this rain. My coat’s in the locker room.” I started to walk when he stopped me. “I can’t let you walk,” he said incredulously. Before I could say anything, he had me up in his arms, carrying me off the field. 41

I could stay here forever.42

I felt his chest move up and down as he breathed, his heart beating steadily against me. I wrapped my arms around his neck for better balance and snuck a glance at his face. He was blushing!43

Oh my goodness he must like me!44

What about Adelle!?45

It doesn’t matter right now!46

We got out of the rain and into the hall. He put me down so gracefully, I felt like I was weightless. It felt funny now, not to have his chest up against me. 47

We walked into the locker room. He picked up his coat and handed it to me. “Here, you might want to wear this instead of that wet sweatshirt you have on.”48

I nodded and peeled off my pull-over. Don’t worry, I still had my Beatles t-shirt on. His coat was large and warm. It smelled like him too, every time I breathed I smelled him. 49

Jazz took off his sweatshirt too, replacing it with a red one from his locker. 50

We walked out together, passing a large window where the rain and newly developed hail could be heard drilling holes into the ground. “Bee…” he said in a low voice while we walked on. His fingers slipped through mine, lightly.51

My heart jumped about fifteen feet.52

I must have blushed so much.53

Whoosh! I was so distracted, I tripped over my own feet. 54

“Whoa,” he laughed, reaching out. One hand went to support my waist, and the other grabbed my wrist. I regained my poise and looked at him. His face was so close…55

Omigawd! He’s going to kiss you!56

What do I do? What do I DO?!57

Relax, act natural.58

Omigod, omigod, omi— 59

That’s right. He kissed me.
All those medelsome thoughts in my head gone.
Except for one word.
Wow.60


Author notes

5. "I won't forget the day we met or the day we kissed. The sky may fall and the stars may too, but in the end, I will still love you ..."
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the voices that are like, arguing with eachother, those are all her thoughts. i based her character off myslef a bit :-p

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  • Seshat Kitty
    August 30, 2008

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    lol lol lol lol lol!
    I LOVED IT!!!!!!
    Totally understand the voices, sounds quite familiar actually This had me laughing so much but it was so sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeet at the smae time. *squirms* It's just so awesome!
    Thanks for entering and good luck!


  • jessicakristine
    August 8, 2008
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    Good, but doesn't fit with my contest. Thanks anyways though! I liked it!


  • Wendy Elizabeth
    July 16, 2008
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    hey, this is really good! i like jazz, he's sounds sweet!


  • Glowstarcharmer
    March 22, 2008

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    Ahh right, I just re-read this and it makes a lot more sense with the little introduction bit. I think that it helps to set the scene and therefore makes the whole piece more enjoyable as its not so confusing to work out whats going on between the characters. (Just one thing though, in the line 'Brooke is a girl who in completely in love', it should have been 'is completely in love'. I think this was just a typo but I thought Id point it out to ya). Good work hun, hope to read more soon.

    X Amber X


  • beezy92
    March 21, 2008

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    Veeery interesting (= I just HAD to read it when I saw my name in the preview...even though it's not about me. I'm just so self-centric... Ok enough. I was kidding, byt the way

    Anyway this was great. I love sweet scenes in the rain. (= Jazz wasn't tailor made for me (even though I love his name...and the thumb on the cheek thing =) but I bet a lot of girls LOOOVE this sotry and ar efalling in love with a fictional character. (Or is he? ) I do that sometimes

    Anyway, great write! I enjoyed reading (=


  • Glowstarcharmer
    March 21, 2008
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    I really liked this piece. Dont worry you are certainly not the only person who argues with themselves in their own head, I do it all the time and I know loads of other people who do as well. Or maybe we are all crazy, lol. I was a bit confused by this. At first I thought he was her boyfriend but by then end I guess I was wrong but then I was confused about why she was so upset that he had kissed another girl. I suppose if I knew the situation better it would make more sense, I hope there is more to come.

    X Amber X


    • happy go lucky13
      March 21, 2008
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      mm, good thinking. ill add a little info at the top to better explain whats going on. hehe, here's to people talking to the other people in thier head :-p

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