You Were Always There

You were always there1

When I needed you.2

When I was down on the ground3

And I couldn't get back onto my feet.4

You were there5

When my heart ached so much6

You told me which way to go.7

I had a million problems,none that I could solve.8

You were there to help me fix them all, one by one.9

Whenever I needed someone there for me, you were there by my side.10

But now you need me more than ever,11

And i'll be there for you too.12

Through the thick and the thin, 13

We stand strong together.14

And by each other's sides 15

We battle life through to the end.16

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  • alena austin
    March 21, 2008
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    it was good.

    It was a good poem. Didnt seem very original though. Couldve used more emotion. to me it just seems like all the other little love poems out there.

    beginning: 2, language: 2, plot: 2, ending: 2, dialog: 2, characters: 1.

  • lily64
    March 20, 2008

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    omg this is a really good poem!! i cant write something this good!! keep on writing these awsome poems!!

    from ur,bffl