A thin wind wavered1
green blade of grass2
one among many 3
valiantly struggling 4
after winter's worst5
burdened at the tip 6
by a speck of dew7
that shimmered 8
a thousand shades 9
of rainbow colors10
caught my eye 11
and brought a smile12
and a sigh...13
Please tell me what you think
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A beautifully written piece, i loved it. The beauty of spring expressed in such little words, GREAT JOB!!
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Wow, this was really good!
I was going to name the lines I liked most but I realised I had copied the whole poem, so now use in that...
Even though it didn't rhyme it had a good rhythm and flow which can be hard to get with free verse. My ABSOLUTE favourite lines were:
burdened at the tip
by a speck of dew
we don't often think about that-well I don't usually think about it as a burden.
Cleverly Done, I liked it very much!
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thats nice its cool i like it
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LOVED IT
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Yeah, I wish spring would come. This was really good, and it makes me hope for the snow to melt and the sun to come out and the rainbow colors and green blades of grass. Not till June ^_^
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This is beautiufl and your imagery and metophors are perfect in this piece. An enjoyable read indead
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It felt like something I would think. Good job
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Nice visual
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Oh this was so beautiful and oeacful after reading such heavy work you reall have captures the eccense of articulate beauty
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Anu, this was amazing, how pretty to put nature into such a lovely perspective.
So sweet, ahh beautiful.
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This is exactly the kind of poem I love reading; I like anything inspried by nature.
It was short but sweet, and it flowed so well. And it says so much for such a short poem.
Well done, I really loved this
~Mirry xx
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Aww, that's adorable. It really makes me rethink my loathing of the rainy, unpredictable season of spring. One (potential) edit: line 5, the word "winters" should have an apostrophe to be "winter's"...unless you meant it in a different sense...? Nice poem.
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BEAUTIFUL
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Now you just know I'm going to love this. Beautiful, makes you want to go outside and see something else as awe inspiring.
Brooke
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For something so short, it was what catergory it was placed in, inspiring. You get an image with each line. you could probaly think of different messages and meanings but life is the one that would come to mind. A nice read
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Again I'm happy to read something in a positive tone on this site steeped in gloom and piles upon piles of vampires.
It's a nice poem, and easy to grasp, which is good for people like me who have trouble with "art."
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Such a pretty poem Amicus I love spring! I am not much of a winter person at all. I will be so happy when it actually warms up some. Your words in this poem really describe spring time perfectly!
~Joann
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I used to hate spring. It was my least favorite season for a certain amount of time. I don't know why I disliked it so much. I was more of a fall and winter person. Now I like spring. I think I like summer least. Too hot or too humid. Yeah I like having a break from school but I just don't think it's as beautiful outside. Spring, Fall, and Winter are so lush. And this poem made me think of the rich hues and thickness of Spring. it was very pretty.
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Well Done!
I think Andy summed this up quite well. The only thing I would add is that this poem seems ageless. You can picture a small child stretched out on the grass, propped up on his elbows, face in hands watching in amazement. Or an older gent sitting on his porch just watching time and life in one of its simplest forms. Great word choice.
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Good Poem!
I felt a lot of feeling and emotion in this short little poem. The struggle of life to come forth again against the battle with winter. It reminded me oddly that life is both a struggle and too brief. Got to try to make the most of it. I hope all is well.
Andy
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