She was driving,on a snow white christmass eve to see her mum and daddy with the baby in the back seat,20miles to go and she was running on faith and gasaline, it had been a long hard year and she had allot on her mind, she was driving too fast and before she know she spinning on a thin sheet of glass and she saw both their lives falst before her eyes , she didnt even have time to cry ,she was so scared , then she throw her arms in to the air and said , jesuse take the wheel, take it from my hands , i cant do all this on my own , save me from from the road im on , jesuse take the wheel, still was still getting colder as when she made it too the sholder and came to a stop,she cryed when she saw the baby in the back sleeping like a rock, for the first time she bowed her head to pray and said i'm sorry for the way ieve been acting i know its got to change, a single tear fell from her eyes as she syed in relife.
what do you think?
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It has potential but there are a lot of mistakes and can make reading it a little hard and even confusing. The style of the writing is smooshed together and that makes it even harder to read on the background this is on.
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this has really good potential. try editing it and putting it in better paragraph form.
its gotten me interested, so keep writing!
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