death by fairy dust

Once upon a time there where three evil teenage girls planning to take over the school. One day the girls came up with the perfect plan. Sophia grinned and said “excellent this calls for a party at your house shadow” the girls all agreed. That night they had a party in the tent at the back. Jade got drunk, Sophia got high on ecstasy and shadow turn the music up.1

Then suddenly the 6 super hero’s {super man, bat man, robin, flash, water woman and wonder women} turned bad and needed a plan to take over the world. Wonder woman and bat man smashed the CD player. Water woman and flash killed jade with fairy dust. Robin gave Sophia more ecstasy while he got high to. Bat man sighed and killed Sophia with ice cream. THE END2

please comment this is my frist story

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  • QuestionSleep
    June 23, 2008
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    it was okay... it wasnt that funny or descriptive, but hey it WAS your first story....


  • missymoo20
    April 19, 2008

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    that was excelent the whole thing flowed very well.
    you should make a novel of this. LOL

    missymoo20

  • Random01
    April 1, 2008
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    it was really funny by the end!

    beginning: 3, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • IntrepidFantasy Greeters member
    March 20, 2008
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    lol short and funny. I think this would make an excellent novel if you wanted to add more to it.