Town Of The Living Dead

A/N: This another story to my new Queer Horror Series
the first was The Ghost.1


" We are not suppose to be here Dave it's forbitten" said a young man who's 16 tall slender dress in a white shirt and jeans with dark hair and green eyes as he and his other friends reach a big gate to a town. His name is Mike.2

"And your point" said his friend who's 17 tall very built with short brown hair and eyes dress in a sleeveless shirt and tight jean. his name is Dave3

"Mike is right Dave this place was seal off because of the out break" said this young girl also 16 with short blond hair blue eyes dress in all black a top pants with hoody her name is Brooks.4

"That was over ten years ago we can go in" said Dave about to break the lock to the gate.5

"No it's not safe zombies are in there" said this other 16 year old with no hair tall like Dave with brown eyes dress in a big hoody that's black and pants his name is Kevan.6

" That's a bunch of bull shit zombies are not real now come on" said Dave brecking the lock to the gate he and the others went inside the town it was in ruins looked like a ghost town cars and other vechcils were every were houses shops stores destory.7

"Man this is cool" said Dave taking photos with his cell phone.8

"No it's creepy" said Brook whaling on to Kevan as they walk.9

"What was that" said ? Mike in fear as he thought that he seen something move in the old houses.10

"Nothing you peace of scared shit" said Dave11

"Fuck you Dave I hear something and seen something move" said Mike12

"Ooh it's the zombies they come to eat our flesh" said Dave13

"Knock it off Dave" said Kevan14

"Ya leave him alone what was that"? said Brook as she hear something.15

"Something just move in that house" said Kevan16

"I told you I hear and seen something" said Mike17

"All you are peace of oh my God run" said Dave as he looked in shock be-hide them.18

" Shit" said Mike19

"Oh my God" said Brooks20

" Run" said Kevan as they sees the zombies they all ran . 21

The Zombies all had missing parts rotting teeth claw like nails sinking eyes flesh was missing and falling off their cloths were roting off and they had razor sharp teeth and ran after them.22

Mike fell and zombies leaps on him ripping into his body riping off his arms as they feed and legs biting riping him apart he screams as he was being eaten alive.23

"Mike no" yells Brook24

"He's gone keep moving" said Dave25

" Dave" screams Kevan as he see zombies were Dave ran but they caught him as he try to fight his way out one leap on his back and rip his neck out blood went every were as it bite on ripping his head off the other zombies leaps on his body ripping off legs arms feet and more fighting over parts as they rip in to his body pulling out organs.26

Kevan and Brook was caught but not killed forced off27

"Let us go you ugly smelly basters" screams Brook as she fought.28

"Leve her alone" scream Kevan as he fought.29

They were taken to a part of the town with tunnels and brought before the zombie king he was bigger then the other zombies his skin was more grayer darker his eyes dark er nails longer teeth bigger more rotten and he sat on a thrown of bones and flesh.30

" Bring" he order31

"No Kevan no" screams Brooks as he was forced to Neel before the zombie king his mouth got bigger and he let out as scream and bite his head off as Kevan's blood went all over he let the other zombies feed.32

He then with a bloody smile on his dead month gos from his thrown and came to Brooks she screams as he rips her cloths off and as the other zombies forces her down he rapes her she was so horrified Brooks passed out when she awake she screams as she was cocoon to this wall she see other woman who's in birth some screams as these zombie babies rip from their bodies and feed on them.33

Brook screams in horrow as her zombie baby rips from her then eat her alive.34

As zombies places a new lock on the gate they paired for more visitors.35

Weeks later another group of teenager breaks the lock and heads into the town of the living dead.

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  • S.D. Houston
    April 19, 2008

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    Gotta love a good zombie story! The concept was classic but interesting. I could easily clean this up and edit it for you if you wanted, and you could use it for a study piece.

    • V l
      April 19, 2008
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      Please do I would love that . I don't mind some one helping me or letting me knew I need to work on something I ask just to do i respectful and I''m greatful that you want to help me.


  • McrSAVEDmyLIFE
    March 22, 2008
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    Okay, I think some checking is in order. Spell check (forbitten is supposed to be forbidden) and the use of punctuation. I hate to be picky but if you are going to submit a piece, then you need to double check things so I can spend more time on the piece itself than the details of how to properly write one


  • Andy Stephenson gold member
    March 20, 2008
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    Blood thirsty critters.

    These teenagers seemed to be looking for trouble and found it. It reminds me a little of a poem I wrote about some teens going to a graveyard for kicks. Pretty much the same thing happened to them.

    You tell a good tale, but you could do with some commas and dividing some of your sentences into more than one. There are also some misspelled words.

    Andy


  • Fizbop
    March 19, 2008

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    Nicely started this is very dark and creative a very well done story I can't wait to see more of this very nicely done my friend.

    • V l
      April 19, 2008
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      Oh this is just the begaining for my Queer Horror sereis.


  • Prodigious.Mirth
    March 18, 2008

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    OH bkess you vl you always know how to write a sotry to lift me up..whatever it is ur darkness and creativness seeps thorugh and takes me into higher places - thank you so much
    ~blair!`

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