I worked long hours; I was a stock broker on Wall Street. The hours and pressure of my job made me irritable most of the time, but I made a lot of money and had a lavious lifestyle that I didn’t want to loose. The constant pressure made me do erratical things when I did find time off. It was a blessing that I was not married because I know of no one who would put up with my crappy attitude.1
Tonight a few of the guys and I were going to The Classy Cat a strip club that was in the heart of the city. I always enjoyed this and it seemed to help relax me. We had ordered our beers and grabbed a table right up front, didn’t want to miss any of that detail, you know what I mean.2
The first few girls were ok I loved fresh young bodies, there were no signs of aging yet and everything was where it should be. This beautiful brunette came out wearing a lacy negligee. She had stiletto heels and she was looking mighty good right now. I ordered another beer and asked for some ones I was going to give this lovely lady some money tonight. Maybe I was feeling a little generous after four beers, but damn she was looking good.3
She was one her second set now and I had tipped her about twenty dollars. She seemed to enjoy the attention and I was eating right out of her hand. I decided I wanted to have her dance especially for me so I talked to the bouncer and he went and told her my proposition. The music started up again and she came right to my direction and started dancing. She was gyrating all over the stage in front of me, then she lay down on her back and started moving her legs every way she possibly could. She then lifted her leg high and rounded it around my head I was so excited until one of her stiletto heals scraped across my eye. God damn that hurt I couldn’t see anything. The bartender brought over some ice and I put it on my eye to help it from swelling too much. She was very apologetic, but I wasn’t feeling it anymore so I decided to go home.4
I went home and took some Advil and laid down. My eye was killing me and I had a whopper of a headache. When I awoke the next morning I couldn’t even open my eye. Damn I got up and went to the bathroom to look at it. It was black and blue and swollen shut, I was going to have to go to the Doctor, how in the hell was I going to explain to him about this freak accident? That was the least of my worries how was I going to explain this at work? Hopefully she had done no permenant damage.
Author notes
Prompt : Freak Accident
A contest entry
- Freak Accident by Tizriz.
215 points, ended March 26, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
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Yeowch!! Haha. Lovely imagination. Thanks for entering!
Ryan -
Wow I think I know why someone did not like this lol, can't say I love it but it is good, haha poor guy.
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That's crazy! I love it!
I loved reading it really made me laugh!
Poor guy!
good job and good luck in that contest!
-Miranda
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This is pretty unexpected. I like the concept to this story, and it's pretty good for the contest's description. LOL
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 3, dialog: 4, characters: 4.
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HaHa! I love this as an idea of a freak accident. I would love to see what excuses he came out with the next day
This was very well weitten, it had the odd typo, but nothing to really worry about, and it had great imagery.
I really enjoyed reading this, well done!
~Miranda
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