Monique was obsessed to her phone. She loved her Envee (or however you spell it XD). She was on it anytime she had the chance.1
Her phone buzzed. She pulled it out of her pocket and opened it. The screen said: 'Text Message From: Yourself' 2
"Huh?" she thought to herself. She wondered why she recieved a message from herself. She opened the message and read it. It said, 'Please stop txting with me. My bttns hrt. btw, im ur cll phone' Monique was really creeped out.3
"WHAT?" she thought, "how can my phone send me stuff?" She decided to reply. 'Are you really my phone? you can't be my phone, can you? take a pic of yourself and send it 2 me.'4
She put her phone back in her pocket and then she saw a flash come from her pocket. Her camera took a picture. 'I must be going crazy!' she thought.5
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Her phone buzzed once more. she opened the message. there was a picture and a message. the picture was a picture of her phone. 'do you like me, u use me 24/7. plz stop using me. thnx if u do. did u kno i can change in2 a human if you dont use me for 1 day.' was the message. 7
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Monique shrugged and turned off her phone. she didn't use it all night. She had nothing to do and was really tempted to use the phone. she wanted to see this human so she decided not to.9
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the next day her phone turned on on its own at the same time she turned it off the night before.. there was a text message and a missed call. she opened the message. 'thnx, after u answr ur phone when it looks like u call urself i will appear.' she smiled because she was really happy.11
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She sat on her bed and waited. after three minutes the phone rang. she answered it. "hello?" she asked.13
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"this is phone calling is monique there?" a cyber voice answered.15
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"this is her." she said. she waited for an answer.17
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The cyber person spoke ,"K in ten seconds answer your home door."19
The phone went dead. Monique walked around the house to see if her mom was home. she was in the kitchen drinking coffee.20
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The doorbell rang and monique answered it. there was the cutest boy she had ever seen. he was muscular and had short dirty blonde hair. his eyes were crystal blue. The two of them hugged and then kissed.22
she felt amazing. he was the best kisser ever. The two of them started dating and after seven years they got married.
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THE END!24
Author notes
Honestly i do not have a cell phone but i want one very bad.
A contest entry
- Cell phones? by Melli.
240 points, ended May 6, 2008, 10 entries
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Comments
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Cool story, very original! I liked reading it! Anyways, I think one thing you could do is try to develop the character a little more. Who is Monique? Who is that random dude that shows up at the door? I mean, I know it was her "cell phone" haha
But I want to get to know hime better. but great write, I enjoyed reading it!
Illuminated *KT*
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That was Creepy!
It was creepy but in a cool way! how did u come up with this? <3beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, characters: 5.
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I think for your age you did a great job - who would have ever though a cell phone texting you would be cool if it was in cohoots with the computer huh. Anyway with a little more detail and expansion this would be great.... Keep penning hun
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Lol *looks at my cellphone and puts it down* Coolie i like it!
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I liked it!!! It was good!!
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Hmmm . . .
Allright, I'll to be honest in a nice way. And beforehand, I'm not trying to be mean in anyway.
Anyways . . . I'ts very amatuer. How old are you? you must be young. The story just sounds like an idea, and a good one at that. Although, you need depth, details, emotions, and explanation. You will have to really work on this piece to be good, and it coulg be a really enjoyable short story. Anyways, thanks for the entry. and good luck.
KEEP.WRITING.
-Melli<33
P.S. no matter if your unexprienced (spelling?) just kep trying
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